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Shades of Blue Swirling winds dashed in a frenzy Her composure tore apart, Then the lightning and the thunder All pitched in to break her heart. Darkness fell with little warning Thoughts got flooded in the rain And the only sense of feeling Left the ache of burning pain. Foaming waves kept on their pounding, Made it harder to resist Weary mind spoke of surrender: Why the trouble to persist? Then to mind came thoughts of sunrise Brilliance of the midday sun Magic of the twilight settling Lover’s promise to be won. Faces formed behind the curtain Of the deluge of her tears Through the howling winds, a whisper: “Give to me those raging fears. Think of all that still awaits you Places, dreams you’ve yet to see Turn away from blue that shades you I am Love, come walk with me” For Jan's Collaboration Contest July 11, 2017

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Richard Lamoureux

Date: 7/8/2019 7:12:00 AM

This Is a special and oh so pretty piece.

Eve Roper

Date: 7/25/2017 9:18:00 PM

You and Paul wrote a wonderful poem a winner already :-)

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 7/14/2017 2:03:00 PM

Wow, a collaboration that is sure to find its way to the top of any list! I love the subtle rhythm change of the eight/seven syllable count. You two shine brilliantly in this wonderful piece! Bravo! ; )

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 7/11/2017 6:31:00 PM

Awesome collaboration, you two! I was able to scroll down and see it was Paul. Both of you complement each other so well, Eileen!

Joanna Daniel

Date: 7/11/2017 10:23:00 AM

Excellent collaboration, both of you, I say, Jan is gonna have a really tough time judging this contest:) your entry just adds to it:)

Eileen Manassian
Date: 7/11/2017 2:24:00 PM

I think so too! :) I rarely join contests, but I'm glad that Paul asked me to collab with him. Thanks for the visit.

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 7/11/2017 9:43:00 AM

You and Paul did a tremendous collaboration, I expect this will do very well. Hugs Rick.

Eileen Manassian
Date: 7/11/2017 2:25:00 PM

Thanks, Richard. I'm glad Paul asked me to write with him. We work well together. Do you think you know us well enough to know who wrote what? Hugs

Demetrios Trifiatis

Date: 7/11/2017 9:01:00 AM

Two beautiful personalities merged to create such an amazing quatrain filled with lofty ideas! Good luck to you both: Eileen and Paul!

Eileen Manassian
Date: 7/11/2017 2:27:00 PM

Thank you, dear. Paul and I have written about six pieces up to date. I love working with him. He is a gentleman in every way and always able to write great prompts for me to finish. Filakia

Daniel Turner

Date: 7/11/2017 9:00:00 AM

I stated at the bottom so I read Paul's first. I should have known you were his secret partner. You both did a magnificent job, Eileen. Good luck sweetie:) I'm glad you got him to write with you. You make a wonderful team.

Eileen Manassian
Date: 7/11/2017 2:28:00 PM

Thanks, Daniel. I was happy when Paul asked me to write with him. We work well together and he's always been someone I greatly admire. I love his writing and he's a fine gentleman. I'm glad you found this to your liking. Blessings.

Charlie Smith

Date: 7/11/2017 8:25:00 AM

Fabulous 8 syllable rhythm Eileen, terrific write, best wishes in the contest...

Eileen Manassian
Date: 7/11/2017 2:31:00 PM

Thank you, Charlie. :) Good to have you visit.

James Inman

Date: 7/11/2017 8:21:00 AM

You and Paul work well together Eileen. your poem has a beautiful flow and I enjoyed how the tone changed half way through.

Eileen Manassian
Date: 7/11/2017 2:33:00 PM

I was a journey from despair to hope due to the influence of Love. Really, love is what makes life livable. Thanks for the visit, James.

Joseph May

Date: 7/11/2017 5:39:00 AM

I love the lyrical flow to this beautiful poem, and the storm that gathered within...Great collaboration....best wishes

Eileen Manassian
Date: 7/11/2017 2:36:00 PM

Thank you, Joseph. I appreciate that you referred to lyrical flow. Paul and I do like writing in meter and I think it comes off well in our writing. Paul has a keep eye for editing as he is published author in his country and does a great deal of editing work. I love his input and help with my writing.

Constance La France

Date: 7/11/2017 2:29:00 AM

Eileen beautifully penned by two, flowed nicely

Eileen Manassian
Date: 7/11/2017 2:37:00 PM

Thank you, dear. So glad to see you back here. :)

Sara Ella

Date: 7/10/2017 10:18:00 PM

What a beautiful collaboration :) I absolutely love the last line <3

Eileen Manassian
Date: 7/11/2017 2:40:00 PM

Awww...Thank you, Sara. I look forward to your visits. I will by to visit you soon. Hugs

Ilene Bauer

Date: 7/10/2017 7:27:00 PM

i'm blown away when i read a really great collaboration and this one certainly fits the bill, eileen. the joining of your voices is absolutely seamless!

Eileen Manassian
Date: 7/11/2017 2:43:00 PM

That is the sweetest accolade, dear. It's good when one cannot know where one writer begins and leaves off and the others takes up. You are a sweetie pie.

Tim Smith

Date: 7/10/2017 6:34:00 PM

A terrific piece you two and what an ending line. I think no names for the contest.

Eileen Manassian
Date: 7/11/2017 2:45:00 PM

Thanks for the heads up, Tim. I removed my name as soon as I read this. I don't go to the contest page as I rarely join contests, so I wasn't sure what was required. Just hit the enter button. Kind of you. Hugs

Paul Callus

Date: 7/10/2017 5:58:00 PM

Hi Eileen...it's past my bedtime, but still got some energy left to stop by and thank you for being such a pleasant and willing collaborator:) I think I'll pinch your accompanying picture and add it to my post! Hugs & goodnight // paul

Eileen Manassian
Date: 7/11/2017 2:47:00 PM

You are a pleasure to work with, Paul. I appreciate your great skill in writing and your keen eye in spotting inconsistencies. :) This is our sixth collab. I'm honored that you'd want to write with me, and I look forward to writing more....Hugs

Heidi Sands

Date: 7/10/2017 5:09:00 PM

I commented on Paul's page. This is an outstanding collaboration! Very well done by the both of you. I enjoyed it and best wishes for the contest :)

Eileen Manassian
Date: 7/10/2017 5:12:00 PM

Thanks ever so much, Heidi. I appreciate the lovely comment. Paul and I have at least 6 collaborations together. I'm thrilled that he has chosen again to take a chance on me. He's an amazing poet. :)