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Calm, but too hot, no breeze, no clouds. Many umbrellas for the crowds All wanting shade and get relief Most swam in the lake, heat release. That lake was theirs jumping up high, They splashed, dived, uttered a great sigh. Calm waters were agitated, Many couples motivated A small girl came last to arrive, One bully blocked her timely dive. "Get out, girl, you're not one of us." The poor girl did not dare discuss. A big man was angry, face red. The lake now calm, the bully fled, When all was calm, she smiled so sweet, The girl swan, all was a great treat. 17 January 2022 8 lines. 8 syllables each Enter the 'C Form - Couplet' Poetry Contest Sponsor Constance La France Subject CALM

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Date: 1/31/2022 3:45:00 PM
Dropping back with Congrats on your win
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Date: 1/31/2022 7:40:00 AM
Congratulations on your win. Your "Calm" is a fun write. The lake/water looks great. Wish I was in the water. Have a blessed day/week.............
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Date: 1/31/2022 6:19:00 AM
Anger and aggressiveness give way to calmness and love. beautifully written. Congratulations!
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Date: 1/31/2022 6:10:00 AM
Back with congratulations on winning first place in the contest with your beautifully written poem, Victor.
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Date: 1/30/2022 8:35:00 PM
Back to your poem once again with Congratulations on your proud win dear Victor....
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Date: 1/30/2022 2:51:00 PM
Victor, congratulations on your First Place win in my C Forms - Couplet contest with your wonderful poem, I really dislike bullies and they seem to be everywhere ~ Constance
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Date: 1/20/2022 4:16:00 PM
nicely done. Get those bullies out and all is fine!!
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Date: 1/20/2022 9:11:00 AM
Great verse for Constance contest. Good luck my friend.
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Date: 1/20/2022 6:17:00 AM
Nice one here, Victor, I guess I'll choose a different theme, as everyone seems to select this calm one:)
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Date: 1/18/2022 11:42:00 AM
Lovely writing. God bless you, Love in Christ, Gina
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Date: 1/18/2022 8:57:00 AM
Ahh!! Great story told in poetic form. Reads like a good contender for the contest. Way to go. Thanks for your visit to my page. Sara
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Date: 1/18/2022 5:27:00 AM
The prior several days had been chilly and snowy, so this was a delight. I hope you recover quickly from your cold and sore throat. Excellent piece of writing. Good luck in the contest..... Debra
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Date: 1/18/2022 5:14:00 AM
Nice entry into the contest Victor. Captivating image of a warm summer day...Stay safe and well...Delice
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Date: 1/18/2022 2:35:00 AM
Nice couplet Victor...good that the bully fled and the lake is calm again and the girl got to swim...Best wishes in the contest...~ Ani
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Date: 1/17/2022 10:37:00 PM
Love this, Victor, so poignant.
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Date: 1/17/2022 8:27:00 PM
Seeking relief on a hot day, Best wishes in the Contest Victor..
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Date: 1/17/2022 5:07:00 PM
Wow, nicely done! I do not like bullies, I'm glad she got her swim.
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Date: 1/17/2022 1:30:00 PM
Our island of Oahu (Population 876,156, Area 597 sq. miles) yet I love living on a small island. Not as small as yours but some get island fever and need to leave. I enjoyed your poem and I am happy the young girl got to swim. Blessings xxoo
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Date: 1/17/2022 12:19:00 PM
The calm of relief from intense heat, and also from the threat of a bully is conveyed by these lovely lines. I enjoyed this, Victor. :)
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Date: 1/17/2022 10:57:00 AM
Yes, let all enjoy the calm waters. Chase off the bullies but still perhaps the bully is troubled so perhaps someone can follow up with that. Lovely poem.
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Date: 1/17/2022 7:41:00 AM
The interpretation of the complexions' feelings is splendid! Victor. Because of the purity of the sunlight, this piece of art is predominately relying on ingenuity! Verse composition dwells on the most appropriate answer if you want to profess yourself! I contemplate a beautiful summer day while the temperature outside dips to -14 degree. I'm delighted the poem ended on a high note.
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Date: 1/17/2022 6:05:00 AM
Calm waters, but turbulent hearts ! When storm subsides and calm prevails, smiles linger on faces ! A fine entry for the contest ! Best of Luck Victor !
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Date: 1/17/2022 5:52:00 AM
HeyVictor….lovely poem with a peaceful feel. Enjoyed. Debx
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Date: 1/17/2022 5:26:00 AM
- If I could change ... I would take away the winter ... just had the spring, summer and fall ... lovely written, Victor :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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Date: 1/17/2022 5:03:00 AM
Nice to be on a lake on a hot summer day. You take us there, Victor, in your signature style painting details that bring forth the scenes.
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