Andrea Dietrich Poet Personification

Broken Sinking Boat

“minus identity .  . who am I?” - Unseeking Seeker

I am a boat not anchored to the shore.
The waves keep crashing me. They’re coming fast
and very hard.  I hear the ocean’s roar.
My stern and bow are breaking. They can’t last.
My hull is sinking. If I’d had a name,
I can’t recall it. No esteem have I.
Who was I, and who am I now? All aim
is lost, and as I sink, I see the sky
so dark and terrifying even though
it’s daytime.  Is it nighttime after all?
I look around me, and I just don’t know
where I begin or end. I feel so small.
I’m breaking into pieces on a sea
that swallows me and my identity.

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thriveni c mysore July 2, 2024 at 10:00 PM sad but there is so much to it, Congratulations on your win dear poet.

Christina Bowring June 29, 2024 at 12:05 AM Dear Andrea, this is a very powerful and moving personification. You have captured the loss of identity, self worth, acknowledgement, so beautifully within all these amazing lines. The quote from US pairs perfectly. The despair of the little boat and its sorrowful plight is so profound. ‘ I look around me and I just don’t know where I begin or end ‘ ‘ I feel so small ‘ such sad lines that illustrates vividly the essence of the whole sonnet. Your ending couplet is truly amazing and impactful to Andrea Dietrich June 29, 2024 at 7:23 PM Thanks so much, Crristina Christina Bowring June 29, 2024 at 12:09 AM the reader who has been greatly touched by the eventual demise of the boat and its identity lost to the sea forever as it’s consumed and becomes one with the sea. Outstanding piece from you. If this is for a contest then good luck. Looks like a winner to me :):)

Susan Lawrence June 26, 2024 at 8:35 PM Hi dear Andrea , it’s been so long and I’m happy to be back here reading some poems and writing a few. I’ve missed you and missed your words. This has so much sadness and true despair. I love how descriptive and creative you are. big hugs, Susan :)

Joseph P. DiMino June 26, 2024 at 11:08 AM "I feel so small. I’m breaking into pieces on a sea that swallows me and my identity." Wow! Not a a time nor good place to be at... -- a death many people live with from day to day~ day after day a seeming, constant perish of existence. Well said. Andrea Dietrich June 26, 2024 at 12:03 PM thanks, Joe. I had to research what it meant not to have an identity and this is how it felt to me as I studied about it.

Jay Narain June 26, 2024 at 10:34 AM A nice poem. Losing self identity is losing oneself. boat personification is touching. Andrea Dietrich June 26, 2024 at 12:04 PM thanks, Jay

Ink Empress June 25, 2024 at 11:44 PM Wow this is brilliant! Great personification! I love the idea of boat! And this prompt is very inspiring i want to write for it too. But need time to sit and scribble! Youv nailed it sweet andrea! Its so deeply moving n descriptive! One of my faves from you and i can resonate too! That last line! Just brilliant! Best wishes Andrea Dietrich June 26, 2024 at 8:23 AM thanks, ink. It's actually a sonnet and it was really fun to write. I did not know how to address the topic until the boat idea came to me.

Valsa George June 25, 2024 at 9:11 PM The despair is very evident in the protagonist as he plunges into the nadir of hopelessness and finds no way out. A powerful poem. Losing one's sense of identity is losing oneself ! A great entry, dear Andrea. All the Best. Andrea Dietrich June 26, 2024 at 8:23 AM thanks so much, Valsa

Tonye George June 25, 2024 at 9:04 PM Powerful lines there Andrea. I could almost feel the sinking. Nice entry for the contest. Best wishes. Andrea Dietrich June 26, 2024 at 8:24 AM thank you

Susan Ashley June 25, 2024 at 7:29 PM Dear Andrea, the confusion, suffering and loss of identity of the breaking sinking boat is palpable through your brilliant personification. Great imagery! Warmest wishes.. ~Susan Andrea Dietrich June 26, 2024 at 8:24 AM much appreciated, Susan

Yann Rolland June 25, 2024 at 7:12 PM great poetry, great metaphor, we can relate to, enjoyed yann Andrea Dietrich June 26, 2024 at 8:24 AM thanks, Yann

Kim Rodrigues June 25, 2024 at 7:06 PM Great expression of lost identity. Very well done! Andrea Dietrich June 26, 2024 at 8:25 AM thanks, Kim

Paige Hind June 25, 2024 at 6:44 PM Powerful- I liked your ending, and enjoyed reading Andrea Dietrich June 26, 2024 at 8:25 AM thanks, Paige.

Hilda Greenhough June 25, 2024 at 6:12 PM A terrifying poem. This was well written in a realistic style that caused me to feel the rolling waves. It is WOW good. Andrea Dietrich June 26, 2024 at 8:25 AM thanks, I am glad if it gave feeling!