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Broken Pieces

How can it be, these broken pieces that from such dull unthinking come, some unlinking blunder, fall around me so beautifully, in such a way as to reflect the light? I think I might like a bite of this apple. Build a chapel around me, take it with me as I fall or not, stall or stop, I forgot but I didn't, Lost the plot but it isn't for nothing. The way this light shines is something. Something clear, something old, to be nearer, to behold and see I am that that is and that can be. Trust me, its easy to judge in the space between you and it but were all doing it screwing it up, chewing ourselves to bits with the idea that this is failing but this is how we do it and my god we do it well in every way that that it can be done. It's the same sun, the same centre. I fly east for the winter, try and ease these splinters gently, sent to me to mentally provoke thoughts that will heal me and in capital letters MESS MYSELF UP to make myself live better. Helping aint helping if I leave myself empty and there's plenty to tempt me into giving it all away but not today. Hopefully not ever. We dont just float, we ARE the river.

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Heather Ober

Date: 1/2/2019 9:00:00 AM

"Chewing ourselves to bits with the idea that this is failing"... Yes. We are so hard on ourselves, too concerned about perceptions. I love your writing style. This is real poetry.

Even Flow
Date: 1/24/2019 6:58:00 PM

Thanks again Heather, I've probably said it before but it its always so nice to receive comments from someone who's work you rate as highly and enjoy as much as I do yours. I really appreciate it.

Kai Michael Neumann

Date: 10/28/2018 6:24:00 AM

Good river of sadness and resolution. Congratulations on your win, Kai

Even Flow
Date: 11/15/2018 4:38:00 AM

thanks Kai, I really appreciate you reading and commenting.

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 10/26/2018 4:18:00 AM

- Psychological difficulties can be heavy to bear, but the pleasure is to be found even when life is difficult - Well done, Even - Congratulations on your win - hugs //Anne-Lise :)

Even Flow
Date: 11/15/2018 4:31:00 AM

thank you so much Anne-Lise, ive been off for a couple of weeks so this was a nice surprise. Yes, the real jewels are on the other side of the storm often. thank you so much for reading and commenting so Kindly, I really appreciate it.

Deb Radke

Date: 10/25/2018 8:30:00 PM

Congratulations on your well deserved win with this provocative piece of writing. You’re very good. My best. Deb

Even Flow
Date: 11/15/2018 4:06:00 AM

Thank you Deb, I hadn't realised, I really appreciate you commenting, it means a lot to me.

John Hamilton

Date: 10/25/2018 1:01:00 PM

Great write even flow, not familiar with your writing but I'm sure I will see your name in the winners circle again, you're THAT good!

Even Flow
Date: 11/15/2018 4:04:00 AM

thank you so much John! I am sorry for the late reply, I've been offline for a couple of weeks. What a lovely surprise. I have never entered a competition on here before but you have definitely encouraged me with your kind words, this group is great for that. Thank you so much again, this has really made my day.

Heidi Sands

Date: 10/6/2018 7:31:00 AM

This is a powerful poem. Well done :)

Even Flow
Date: 10/6/2018 9:54:00 AM

Thanks Heidi !

Charlotte Boyle

Date: 10/5/2018 2:52:00 PM

Just love those last two lines so much. Sometimes I feel like I am just floating along, but understanding that I am in the river gives me so much comfort.

Even Flow
Date: 10/6/2018 6:43:00 AM

Thanks Charlotte, for reading and commenting.Yeah, we are all that river, helps me to remember too.

Constance La France

Date: 10/4/2018 9:52:00 AM

Even Flow, YES "we are the river" your poem touched me deeply, I find it so internal and thought provoking and wonderfully penned although for me it is more Free Verse than Rhyme but matter not, I love it~

Even Flow
Date: 10/4/2018 5:39:00 PM

Thank you so much for your encouragement and thank you also for mentioning that. Ive always put things as free verse because I wasn't sure of the forms and thought it a safe bet. I'm not so good with that.It turns out I had probably categorised them correctly then. I have edit the form, really appreciate the nudge.