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Brief: the Last One

The Last One Snowflake white on emerald lawn A moment just as soon forgot Daisy petals fall this dawn The last one said, she loves me not 6/30/17 For the “Kim’s Color Splash” poetry contest Sponsored by: Kim Rodriques

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John Hamilton

Date: 7/15/2017 7:49:00 PM

So sad, but hey, it's a winner! Yoohoo!

Chris Green
Date: 7/17/2017 8:32:00 AM

Thanks John...yep...YooHoo. :)

Jan Allison

Date: 7/15/2017 6:35:00 PM

Dropping back with my congrats Chris:-) hugs Jan xx

Chris Green
Date: 7/17/2017 8:31:00 AM

Thanks Jan, I appreciate your kindness.

Alyssa Lorette

Date: 7/15/2017 11:34:00 AM

Hey, just coming again to congratulate you for winning 9th place! :)

Chris Green
Date: 7/17/2017 8:31:00 AM

Thanks so very much Alyssa

Kim Rodrigues

Date: 7/14/2017 9:08:00 PM

This one's a beauty, Chris! Glad that you made the list of winners in my contest!

Chris Green
Date: 7/17/2017 8:31:00 AM

Thanks so much Kim. I am honored to have placed in your contest

Andrew Walker

Date: 7/5/2017 1:59:00 AM

This is a reminder to me, that a poem can be brief and still send a powerful message. And I know how this feels. Thanks for sharing!

Chris Green
Date: 7/5/2017 8:35:00 AM

Thanks so very much Andrew. I do often get very long winded, but you are right. sometimes brevity is the best course to take

Maria Williams

Date: 7/3/2017 5:49:00 AM

Yes she does, go on try again. Beautiful and descriptive Chris, Good luck in the contest...Maria

Chris Green
Date: 7/3/2017 8:53:00 AM

Thanks so very much Maria. I need to find a few more daisies.

Joanna Daniel

Date: 7/1/2017 7:38:00 AM

Now didn't you say once that you'll start again with "she loves me not"?? This is short and sweet and touching, Chris:)

Chris Green
Date: 7/3/2017 8:53:00 AM

I did, one of these days I will learn to listen to myself. :) Thanks so very much Jo for your kindness always.

Tim Smith

Date: 7/1/2017 7:13:00 AM

Grab another flower and start over.

Chris Green
Date: 7/3/2017 8:52:00 AM

Good idea, now why didn't I think of that. Thanks so much Tim.

Daniel Turner

Date: 6/30/2017 8:11:00 PM

Bummer! So sad to be such a beautiful verse, Chris. Good luck!:)

Chris Green
Date: 6/30/2017 8:15:00 PM

Thanks my friend. The contest sponsor asked for emotion, that was all I could muster today. :)

Sara Ella

Date: 6/30/2017 8:10:00 PM

Oh NO! This is so sad :( I guess that means it is really GOOD :D Good luck on the contest!

Chris Green
Date: 6/30/2017 8:15:00 PM

Thank you Sara, you are always so kind to me.

Akkina Downing

Date: 6/30/2017 6:46:00 PM

Oh she loves you alright :) good luck in the contest my friend :) hugs

Chris Green
Date: 6/30/2017 6:58:00 PM

Thanks so much Kina. I am happy you liked this one.

Lenna Walker

Date: 6/30/2017 6:39:00 PM

Creative and sad. That 'white on emerald' can be seen vividly. Good luck in the contest and have a great weekend my friend:)

Chris Green
Date: 6/30/2017 6:41:00 PM

Hey there my friend. Thanks so much for stopping by this evening, I always look forward to your visits and your comments on my poetry. You have a great weekend too. : )

Sunlite Wanter

Date: 6/30/2017 6:32:00 PM

Amazing how touching a few lines can be. All I need to do is change the gender. I can feel the emotions with just these lines. Sweet Dreams.

Chris Green
Date: 6/30/2017 6:38:00 PM

Thank you my friend. You always have a way of making me feel so good when you stop by to read my poetry. I truly do appreciate you.

Dale Gregory Cozart

Date: 6/30/2017 5:22:00 PM

Oh damn, yours is better than mine. Now you'll win. Goodnight, Soupers.

Dale Gregory Cozart
Date: 6/30/2017 7:12:00 PM

Perhaps, although I've never tasted it.

Chris Green
Date: 6/30/2017 6:37:00 PM

Well from what I know, sewer water moves at a pretty fast pace. :)

Dale Gregory Cozart
Date: 6/30/2017 5:53:00 PM

Or maybe you miscounted the petals?

Dale Gregory Cozart
Date: 6/30/2017 5:48:00 PM

Yes, but mine is pewter and sewer water. How moving is that?

Chris Green
Date: 6/30/2017 5:35:00 PM

Oh whatever!!!! I used simple colors not something unusual like you did with Pewter. :) And I know Kim, she likes unusual stuff. Mine is white and green...wow, so kaleidoscopic. :) Thanks so much Dale for the laughter this afternoon.

Heidi Sands

Date: 6/30/2017 5:13:00 PM

Oh, you have reached the reader with such sadness with this powerful short poem Chris! Good luck in the contest! :)

Chris Green
Date: 6/30/2017 5:19:00 PM

Thanks so much Heidi. I am thrilled you liked this. I really wasn't going to enter but then this thought popped into my head so I did. Oh damn......I need to go enter it. Sheesh. :)

Alyssa Lorette

Date: 6/30/2017 4:46:00 PM

Such a simple, yet emotional poem! Good luck, Chris! :)

Chris Green
Date: 6/30/2017 4:58:00 PM

Thanks so very much Alyssa. I am thrilled you liked this one.

Jan Allison

Date: 6/30/2017 4:42:00 PM

You are tugging at the heartstrings with this one Chris! Good luck in the contest:-) hugs Jan xx

Chris Green
Date: 6/30/2017 4:45:00 PM

Thanks so much Jan. I wasn't going to enter after reading some of the other entries, they are so good but I figured, what the hell, might as well. :)