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Blowing

She blew the candles after she was ninety, feet on the earth, mind distorded by the counted years. She still blew the candles with the only ones she feels as strangers. With the ones that love her and she doesn't know. Waiting for her dad, mum and husband, that have already gone. Waiting for her son to find his life before she goes. She blew her candles with many worries, she had a birthday without her parents, husband and the ones on her mind. She didn't count the ones she was with, because her life is ibetween the steps. She was sad blowing the candles, because she doesn't know how many steps she is going to make or how far her wings are going to fly. The nest is made, the chicks are grown old and her partner flew to the next level. She blew the candles surrounded by her beloved ones, instead she felt alone while she was blowing to nowhere.

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Date: 3/4/2023 11:40:00 AM
Hello Marie, Oh such a sad poem. She was surrounded by love ones yet felt alone. She did not sense her love ones were there. Enjoy your day my friend. Hugs.
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Darlene De Beaulieu
Date: 3/5/2023 8:09:00 AM
Hello Marie, yes i am feeling better now. Yes it can be mixed feelings at that age. I did have a nice weekend thank you. Enjoy your day my friend.
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Maria Fernandez-Garcia
Date: 3/4/2023 1:05:00 PM
Hello Darlene. At that age one's is happy because you made another year, but at the same time, many rememberings about the past and many beloved ones are not there anymore. It can be a mixed happiness and sadness, I suppose. Hope you're better. Have a nice weekend.
Date: 2/28/2023 3:24:00 PM
"with the ones that love her and she didn't know." ...that is so sad. A mention, perhaps, of the disregard for the elderly. Very nice, Maria. Congratulations!
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Maria Fernandez-Garcia
Date: 3/2/2023 2:53:00 PM
Do you know Ann. I write what I live and see. That was my aunt's birthday. The one I grew up with. She is my mum for me. She is 91 and she doesn't remember many things, she keeps forgeting, but she doesn't has Alzheimer, it's only the age. She keeps thinking about the death ones in the family, and she doesn't count the ones are next to her and are there day by day. This is the story of my hero. My aunt.
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Maria Fernandez-Garcia
Date: 2/28/2023 3:30:00 PM
Hello. My auntie blew the candles. She is 91. She is my everything, my heart, my entire life. She s my aunt but she grow me up. She's not very well, but I love her as much as nibody knows. Thanks for your coment, you are welcome
Date: 2/25/2023 8:01:00 PM
Though melancholic this poem has rich beauty. Congratulations!
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Maria Fernandez-Garcia
Date: 2/26/2023 12:08:00 AM
Hello. Thank you and have a nice Sunday
Date: 2/25/2023 7:24:00 AM
Hi Maria. This is a melancholy write for sure and so beautifully executed. Congratulations on your win. :)
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Maria Fernandez-Garcia
Date: 2/25/2023 7:41:00 AM
Hello Lunda. Thank you so much. Have a beautiful day...

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