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Black Bird On a Wire Edited Version

Black Bird on a Wire Black Bird sitting on a wire back turned towards me Do you wish to hide the intelligence of your eyes I see here at this old dump picking through the unwanted wanted things I wish I could search along with you check out what the Jones's have no more use for The bits of their unfixed the not new enough Their "I think we deserve the very best." "This ain't good enough, let's buy more and more stuff!" At one time I wore their discarded garments without pride I should have been proud for I dug for them with my wanting hands Hands that waded through their decadence the refillable the recyclable their unused reusable Black Bird I watch you and your brothers as you feasted on our last suppers Ripping open black bags fighting for morsels Unconcerned with the rotting intoxicated by fermenting fruit the pungent aromas There are bones that need to be picked clean I noticed but did not recall until now the depth of my wanting the hunger within Back then I was hoping praying for a bicycle Desperately wanting to ride far away from here so that I might escape my then my embarrassment my "I hope no one sees me!" "Garbage picker!" "Where did you get that coat?" "We threw that in the dump!" Boy oh boy do I like clothing now. No one will ever again make fun of what I wear! Part of me wishes to return with you Black Bird to see what I have left behind So that I can reclaim and recycle that little boy But I can't The dumps aren't open anymore It is like those old bones bleached picked clean Manicured Items placed in appropriate piles All the while you sit on your wire back turned to me Intelligent eyes hidden knowing I can't disturb you In a while you will feed on yesterday for this place is not closed to you! This piece grew out of my childhood experiences. We got our clothing from the dump and I still remember a girl saying to my sister " That's my coat, we threw that in the dump." I felt so bad for her and also for myself.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2016




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Date: 10/21/2016 2:08:00 PM
Great poem and too true. I ws hiking with a self professed ercycler this summer and it is amazing what can be gleaned.
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Date: 9/15/2016 1:47:00 PM
What a wonderful nostalgic write Richard. I so enjoyed looking back and remembering when. A fantastic write, the both of them. To hard to decide which one I liked the most so I chose both. : ) Congrats on your win in the contest and A Very Happy belated Birthday from me. I like the crows part in all of it too, they are cunning. Awesome, Sharon
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Date: 9/13/2016 11:29:00 PM
RICHARD, Congratulations on your win. Thank you for supporting one of my contest. Stop by my blog "An Angels Tear" if you'd like. Smiles and Hugs..... LINDA
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 9/14/2016 7:49:00 AM
Hi Linda, thanks for choosing this one. Hugs Rick.
Date: 9/10/2016 8:59:00 PM
Nice piece Richard. Enjoyed reading this thematic... Verlena
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Date: 9/9/2016 8:29:00 PM
I quite enjoyed this, for fun I read the two poems side by side, I liked them both and it was fun to notice the subtle differences and changes in expression and form. Happy Birthday, and for those that would like to read his original, here is the link. http://www.poetrysoup.com/poem/black_bird_on_a_wire_677040
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 9/10/2016 8:30:00 AM
Which did you prefer? Also thanks for the Birthday greetings Arthur. I hope you are having an enjoyable weekend.
Date: 9/8/2016 9:09:00 AM
Just stopped back k to read this one again. Have a great birthday.
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 9/9/2016 9:58:00 AM
Thanks Tim.
Date: 9/8/2016 3:02:00 AM
A momentary observation that prompts you to put pen to paper, Richard. A fascinating poem - Top marks from me! My very best regards. :) john
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 9/8/2016 8:14:00 AM
Thanks my friend.
Date: 9/7/2016 8:07:00 PM
I don't think any of us really knew who we were, until we look back, and now we know. Too late? Maybe. A fine write, Richard, hugely impressive. Regards, Viv
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 9/8/2016 8:14:00 AM
That is so true Viv.
Date: 9/7/2016 3:29:00 PM
This metaphoric write sinks in deep, piercing the core of other souls who have walked the same path and were caught in the same web! I can relate! Wonderfully written with insight and liberation. Excellent my friend! 7 :)
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 9/8/2016 8:13:00 AM
Thanks so much Connie.
Date: 9/6/2016 12:31:00 AM
Oh, Richard. How you pull at the heart strings with this write. If I could go back in time....Still, you are an amazing man in the here and now. The circumstances that shape us, make us stronger, wiser, and more compassionate. My heart goes out to the author of this piece. I'm SO busy with the new semester. I'll get back to writing soon...I hope. Hugs
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 9/7/2016 7:38:00 AM
Good morning Eileen, I'm looking forward to you being back. Hugs Rick. We finished our move so life should be a bit less hectic for the next little while.
Date: 9/5/2016 5:03:00 PM
When we look back on perception of the past may change compared to when we were living in the moment. Excellent poem Richard.
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 9/7/2016 8:00:00 AM
Thanks Tim.;0)
Date: 9/5/2016 4:49:00 PM
Very deep write Richard. I had to read the explanation to understand what the blackbird represented. None of us would be who we are today if not for our past. I enjoyed the read immensely.
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 9/7/2016 8:00:00 AM
Thanks Daniel, I agree. In the end I have no regrets.
Date: 9/5/2016 9:51:00 AM
Great write, heart wrenching and thoughtful again I relate, parallel lives. I wonder who the black bird represents? I think I know! Thoroughly enjoyed this read, thanks for re-posting, never read it before.A7
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 9/5/2016 3:39:00 PM
The blackbird represents the past in terms of what happened, the present in terms of trying to come to terms with the after effects of abuse and the future in terms of the shadow that the wings create which obscures the future.
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John Hamilton
Date: 9/5/2016 2:47:00 PM
Wow very deep, thanks for the explanation.
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 9/5/2016 1:40:00 PM
The blackbird represents the past in terms of what happened, the present in terms of trying to come to terms with the after effects of abuse and the future in terms of the shadow that the wings create which obscures the future.
Date: 9/5/2016 9:05:00 AM
I found this so heartbreaking to read Richard especially as it is written retrospectivly. Sadly it is reality for many who would be grateful for our cast off's and scraps from our plate - we live in such a throwaway society your wonderful words open out eyes to the issues:-) hugs jan xx
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Richard Lamoureux
Date: 9/5/2016 9:18:00 AM
Thanks Jan, this was an autobiographical piece.

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