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Black and White

In the visiting room evening's ebony is shellacking everything. He sits across from me at the sable-shaded table, in shades, pours black coffee pungent as the Gauloises he smokes, his sun-starved skin bone-white but brooding black light, an abandoned chessboard to his right, squares of day and night, the king checkmated, a game lost and won, pawns scattered and fallen. I saw people as just pawns in a game... Led like lambs unknowingly, their lamb-white light dazzling his dark; the ghost-gleam of graves secret and snowed on, snowed under, a sprinkling of snow-light over onyx-shadowed night. The stark-sudden cold relief of white. I dodged the death penalty by six months... His voice is low, nicotine-husky, the tarry crawl of emphysema creeping and wheezing in his lungs. My girl bleached her hair white as bones... The early sixties were so black and white - photography, TV, monochrome movies - even my thoughts were black and white... Outside, white smothers with a feathery dove-light. Inside, he's stalked by the panther of night and not everything is black and white.

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Date: 4/21/2024 8:44:00 AM
Dear Charlotte, the sensory strength of your striking poetic pen never fails to amaze me. You create an intense atmosphere of both prison and persona, skillfully contrasting variations of black and white to lead me into the stun-gun thought of your exquisite grand finale "not everything is black and white" - such a potent yet deft poetic punch! Congratulations for your well-deserved trophy win in Craig's contest. Warmest wishes, my friend.. ~Susan
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Date: 4/13/2024 3:28:00 AM
I am captivated by your creative thoughts and excellent poetic technical exploitation, Charlotte! [of course, worthy of a fav!] ~ Best regards// paul
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Date: 4/1/2024 8:34:00 AM
Enthralling story telling Charlotte, whilst painting it black and white. Congratulations on a brilliant write!
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Date: 3/30/2024 2:02:00 PM
I started writing on this theme, similar to yours, but the contest closed, so I scrapped it.. This is deep and clever word play
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Date: 3/24/2024 10:12:00 AM
This is amazing. I love it. A fave. God bless you and congrats. Love, Gina
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Date: 3/23/2024 9:57:00 AM
Incredibly atmospheric Charlotte - brilliant writing, congratulations on your top win
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Date: 3/23/2024 9:30:00 AM
Charlotte, congratulations on your first place win in Craig's contest with this intensely powerful delve into the essence of black and white. There is a powerful sense of brooding, a foreboding foreshadowing. I am always in awe of your creativity in the way you use words - "stalked by the panther of night." Every time I read one of your poems I am taken on a poetic odyssey - one I want to take over and over. Sending you blessings, high fives and fist pumps!
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Date: 3/23/2024 6:07:00 AM
Happy for you for your first place win Charlotte. You're a true poet. Most of us are just trying to measure up
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Charlotte Puddifoot
Date: 3/23/2024 1:22:00 PM
v sweet of you :) but tell the poetry society judges that lol
Date: 3/22/2024 10:05:00 PM
That ending is haunting: 'stalked by the panther of night'. This is an unforgettable place and person, even when you get to leave and go out into the sunlight. The vowel sounds in the poem are also 'brooding': lots of long o sounds (o, oo, or), and assonance (others have mentioned alliteration). I faved because it made me feel such a strong desire to leave this room.
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Date: 3/22/2024 5:47:00 PM
This poem showcases superlative writing skills. I agree, you should write that novel. Congratulations.
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Date: 3/22/2024 11:14:00 AM
Dear charlotte, you always create unique and meaningful poems that leaves readers in awe of the depth of what you weave and convey in such a seamless manner: i love your use of various blacks and whites and also how you used chess lines as well as the last two stanzas stood out for me along with exquisite diction and alliterations. Brilliant storytelling! Pleasure reading your work! Congratulations on your well deserved win.
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Date: 3/22/2024 8:08:00 AM
On the plus side, survived the death penalty. Maybe the purists would say a slower death was better. Who are we to agree or disagree in a world of Black and White.
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Date: 3/21/2024 10:18:00 AM
Interview or visit with a lifer? You're so good at sensical alliteration. Some throw words together that pair together poorly and call it alliteration, but you are the real deal. This is gritty, real. If I got the interpretation right I certainly wouldn't want to be in the same room. And yet, things aren't always just black and white...
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Charlotte Puddifoot
Date: 3/21/2024 2:15:00 PM
visit, you got the interpretation right..yeah nothing worse than forced alliteration..there are many shades of grey, at least fifty ;)
Date: 3/20/2024 4:49:00 PM
Strangely, I have just written a poem on a similar topic and posted it. What a talent you are. Well done Pete,
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Date: 3/20/2024 4:37:00 PM
Wow! What an amazing writer you are! This was so visceral. That's it. You truly bleed words...
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Date: 3/19/2024 8:22:00 AM
Dear Charlotte, What a haunting exploration of contrasts and complexities. The ebony evenings and bone-white skin paints a stark picture of duality. I love that your portrayal of people as pawns in a game echoes the harsh realities of life's uncertainties. The interplay of light and shadow, snow and onyx, adds depth to the narrative, evoking despair and resilience. You have shown how life's truths are often more nuanced than they appear. Wonderful Read!! - Blessings, Daniel
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