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Autumn Leaves Premiere Contest Winner

As summer has briskly bowed and left, The air has become crisp and moist. Sky is clear, the wispy clouds straggling here and there! The evening’s weak rays cut through trees, half bare And a chilly wind playfully wings Shaking the remaining autumn leaves To fall awkwardly one by one with a soft hum, Making a mosaic design on the ground Under the trees, lies a massive pile, Of cast off leaves the wind had felled. Though laborious, it is fun raking them Then jump over and toss them to the wind See them fly about like embers from fire How delightful watching them settle Once more to the ground and listen To the rustle of dead leaves under the feet My heart beats to its joyful rhythm And I long to float like them, weightless Across the patch of empty ground, Long shadows draw a series of grotesque graffiti A lone bird atop a gnarled branch Screeches its dismay over the change of the season But my heart dances as I watch the leafless trees Stretch their bare arms to the sky And the chill of autumn sprinkles goose bumps all over Sept. 2022 ~Placed FIRST~ Fall Flavors Poetry Contest Sponsor- Regina McIntosh Subject Chosen- Raking Leaves

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Date: 10/24/2022 11:11:00 PM
Wow! Congrats! Thanks for sharing this... making me vicariously feel how is it to rake leaves in my "Autumnless" country. God bless you.
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Date: 10/24/2022 10:51:00 AM
Valsa, CONGRATULATIONS on your trophy win with this vivid portrait of autumn in all of its glory!!! I stand in awe at your use of words to create amazing images - "grotesque graffiti," "autumn sprinkles goosebumps." Your poem is so filled with delightful contrasting images. It shows the sheer delight of the autumn. So happy for your win my friend. Blessings of the season to you!
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Date: 10/24/2022 6:22:00 AM
Back with big congratulations on your win Valsa! Linda
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Date: 10/23/2022 10:56:00 AM
Love the light and dark contrast in the final verse, Valsa! … Long shadows draw a series of grotesque graffiti. Congratulations on top win!
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Date: 10/23/2022 8:40:00 AM
Back with Congratulations on your trophy win dear Valsa. I'm really happy for you and wish you always the best.
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Date: 10/23/2022 5:01:00 AM
Beautifully done! Congrats on top place. God bless you with much love and many more amazing writes. Love, Gina
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Date: 10/24/2022 8:17:00 PM
Wow , what an honor! Thank you so much Gina for the opportunity given and placing my poem at the top. I have been away to visit a close relative who is terminally ill. So couldn't respond earlier ! Stay blessed. Love and hugs!
Date: 9/12/2022 7:34:00 PM
Your metaphor is amazing, and it makes me want to go out and wander through the branches and leaves. Great poem, best for a win, Valsa.
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Date: 9/12/2022 7:42:00 AM
I got goosebumps reading this lovely Fall poem Valsa! Linda
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Date: 9/11/2022 8:25:00 AM
A FAV for my list, Valsa. It was such a delight to read. It was as if I was a kid again, playing in the leaves. You made it so real with the imagery and descriptions in your poem. Good luck in the contest! Bill
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Date: 9/10/2022 8:18:00 PM
The lone bird -- that's me. Let winter wait as the leaves cling to the trees just a bit longer. ~ Fall Fan
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Date: 9/10/2022 11:35:00 AM
Chicken skin moments are best left to chickens ...Enjoyed, Valsa! Aloha!
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Date: 9/10/2022 7:10:00 AM
You captured autumn scenery well Valsa. It's creeping in here now. Hope you're having a lovely weekend. Tom
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Date: 9/10/2022 4:42:00 AM
I like your images of autumn's goodbye. Much joy you convey through colorful, decaying leaves. Best to you.
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Date: 9/10/2022 1:53:00 AM
Perfect imagery and a desire to walk amongst falling leaves. Great poem. Best for a win.
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