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I saw her footprints daub the sand no other tracks to show, just then late afternoon, near August's end a meeting that we hadn't planned I'd left in spite of stormy skies deciding ‘midst a whim, I’d go to watch the tidal ebb and flow and get the late-day’s exercise I'd seen her car parked in the lot no other combers there that day the weather dour and dismal gray (a troubled feeling, I then fought) I hadn't planned to meet her there my heart pulsed faster, thinking of the chance of seeing my true love and might just catch her, unaware I could not see far down that shore the mist and fog thick as they were but still, I searched for signs of her the bright red coat she always wore I saw one set of tracks that showed a-winding north-ward to the rocks that place we’d often share for talks below the narrow Prout’s Neck Road I spied, thru brume, the cliffs ahead high, stretching skyward in the fog there, down below, our favorite log where lay her jacket, clean and red it seemed a grand mistake to me no HER, and yet no footprints back just pressed in sand, a single track that wound into the darkened sea I looked and looked for other signs (inside my heart the horror burned) but no tracks from the surf, returned and then … I saw those dreadful lines in broken shell she'd etched one note "forgive me, love", so spoke the sand I knew to where she’d gone then, and sat down and hugged her fav’rite coat. ~ * This is a form I created called “Eodemina”, made up of at least FOUR stanzas of four lines of Iambic Tetrameter, each stanza beginning with the SAME letter, (of the poet’s choosing), and all in Enclosed Rhyme. I hope you like it. Fellow poets - why not give it a try! * ~ 1st Place ~ in the "Love Story" Poetry Contest, Silent One, Sponsor. ~ 1st Place ~ in the "Your Very Best Rhyme of All-Time Poetry Contest", Brenda Chiri, Sponsor.

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Date: 11/5/2017 11:43:00 PM
Gregory, a salute to you for the Gold. ~ Sonia
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 11/7/2017 12:12:00 AM
Very sweet of you, Sonia, thank you so very much, my friend! :-) <3
Date: 11/5/2017 1:23:00 PM
Great story...oh so sad! Congratulations Gregory!
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 11/7/2017 12:11:00 AM
So kind of you to say, Heidi, and I'm so glad you liked it! Thank you for your kindness and comments - blessings, friend! :-) <3
Date: 11/5/2017 12:11:00 PM
Superb in every respect, Greg! Congrats! Janice
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 11/7/2017 12:08:00 AM
Bless you and many kind thanks, Janice - I so appreciate it! :-)
Date: 11/5/2017 10:15:00 AM
Congratulations on your well deserved win Gregory with this beautifully written though sad poem, captured my imagination from start to finish, brilliant. :))
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 11/7/2017 12:07:00 AM
I so appreciate your kind comments, Roy, and I thank you so very much! Blessings, my friend! :-)
Date: 11/5/2017 8:00:00 AM
Congratulations on your well deserved win. Absolutely beautiful and emotional.
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Date: 11/7/2017 12:06:00 AM
That's very sweet of you to say, Line, thank you so much, friend ... blessings! :-) <3
Date: 11/5/2017 6:48:00 AM
This is just beautiful Greg! So very sad ... anticipating the joy of meeting and then plummeting to sorrow. Very emotional write. Congratulations on your win!!!!! ~Judy
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 11/7/2017 12:06:00 AM
Oh, thank you so kindly, My Sweet Friend - you are always so kind to me, and it does NOT go unnoticed or unappreciated! I'm so happy you liked this one, Judith - blessings! <3
Date: 11/5/2017 6:41:00 AM
Congratulation, Greg on your win with a wonderful poem that read earlier as well and appreciated so much.
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 11/7/2017 12:04:00 AM
So very kind of you, Subimal, and I thank you so very much! Blessings, Brother! :-)
Date: 11/5/2017 6:37:00 AM
A haunting love story Greg, one that is full of sadness... Guess, she wast he one who got away... Excellent poetry storytelling with great rhyme and flow.. Congratulations on your first place in the contest..
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 11/7/2017 12:03:00 AM
Thank you SO very much, Silent one, I am honored and humbled by the placement of my poem, and so grateful you enjoyed it and found it worthy! Blessings and thanks again!
Date: 9/9/2017 4:58:00 AM
I followed the foot prints with you and felt its tragic end - well written and a well deserved 1st place - Indiana x x x
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Date: 9/9/2017 5:52:00 AM
Bless you, Indian, and thank you so very much for liking my poem - it put a smile on my face! :-) <3
Date: 9/6/2017 4:38:00 PM
I never read this one before, this one had me all choked up, a very worthy winner Greg, your storytelling is top notch!
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Date: 9/9/2017 5:51:00 AM
Very kind of you, Brother, and thank you so much - I'm pleased you enjoyed the story! :-)
Date: 9/5/2017 8:58:00 PM
Favoriting this one. Beautifully executed tragic story, with plenty of suspense and emotion. Kudos!
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Date: 9/9/2017 5:50:00 AM
I'm glad you enjoyed this one, Anita - thank you SO much! <3
Date: 9/5/2017 7:20:00 PM
Beautiful and great flowing poem, Greg, congratulations on your win Hugs Eve ~`*
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 9/9/2017 5:49:00 AM
Thank you kindly, Eve - much appreciated! :-)
Date: 9/5/2017 3:42:00 PM
Oh... Greg, your poem is so sad. I felt so sorry for the guy on the beach. This poem had tears in my eyes. have a nice day my friend.
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Date: 9/9/2017 5:49:00 AM
Thank you SO very much, Darlene, that is very sweet of you - blessings! <3
Date: 9/5/2017 10:47:00 AM
Excellent composition... must admit I was hoping for that Hollywood ending...
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 9/9/2017 5:48:00 AM
Indeed - and thus the surprise! I'm glad you like it, Line - blessings! :-) <3
Date: 9/5/2017 7:25:00 AM
Excellent composition. Wonderful. Big Congrats to win top. Best Wishes
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Date: 9/9/2017 5:47:00 AM
Thank you so much, Anisha - that's very kind of you! :-)
Date: 8/23/2017 9:12:00 PM
You tell this touching story very well Greg...Greg..
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 8/24/2017 6:06:00 PM
Thanks, my friend ... glad you enjoyed this, Joseph. Have a great day! :-)
Date: 8/23/2017 5:05:00 PM
Touching and sad, brings out emotions inside the reader. Crafted well.Thank you for posting.
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 8/24/2017 6:06:00 PM
Thanks, Michael, your kind words are greatly appreciated!
Date: 8/23/2017 3:12:00 PM
I don't usually go for long story rhymes but this is great. Had my attention all the way. // Barry
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Date: 8/24/2017 6:05:00 PM
Thank you SO much, Barry - very glad you enjoyed it! Blessings!
Date: 8/23/2017 4:16:00 AM
Oh, how sad, it's so so sad! A wonderfully written write though Greg! A fabulous poem that you have displayed here my friend! I truly loved reading this incredibly sentimental piece this morning, a masterful writing! You told the tale with such emotion, Great Work!!
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Date: 8/24/2017 6:05:00 PM
Thank you so very much, Russell, you honor me, my friend ... I'm so pleased you enjoyed this and that it touched your heart! Have a great day, Brother! :-)
Date: 8/22/2017 11:30:00 PM
Hi Greg, a sad story told with poignancy and poetic perfection, an artistic combination that tugs at my heartstrings. Beautifully done :)
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Date: 8/22/2017 11:43:00 PM
That is so very sweet of you, Susan, and I greatly appreciate your kindness ... I am so blessed to be surrounded by quality writers such as yourself, and even more, making the friendships I have with folks like you! I have gotten such kindness and encouragement! I'm so pleased you enjoyed this one - bless you, my friend! :-) <3
Date: 8/22/2017 9:24:00 PM
A dreadfully sad tale well woven Greg, nicely done :) xomo
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Date: 8/22/2017 9:44:00 PM
Thank you so much, Maureen - I'm very pleased you enjoyed it! :-)
Date: 8/22/2017 5:59:00 PM
So sad, Greg.
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 8/22/2017 7:22:00 PM
Thanks so much, Dale!
Date: 8/22/2017 2:07:00 PM
Sad to think, some points in life take us to the brink and we no longer see the light only night without hope. God bless. Endearing and expressive loss.
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 8/22/2017 7:22:00 PM
Indeed, DM, I have been there more than once myself, and had people close to me never come back from that brink, sadly. Thank you for your beautiful comment!
Date: 8/22/2017 11:53:00 AM
a sad poem Greg that tugs at the heart
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 8/22/2017 7:21:00 PM
Thank you, my friend - much appreciated.
Date: 8/22/2017 10:59:00 AM
Oh my gosh Greg. This poem really hit me! Is this fiction? Did it happen?? If it happened, I am so sorry. This is so well written though!
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 8/22/2017 11:30:00 AM
Thank you, Heidi - it happened, but not to me, someone close to me who asked me to write it, and I pray they're pleased ... I changed the title, as it seemed a bit "not right" ... I think this one is more fitting. Blessings!

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