David Kavanagh Poet Monorhyme

An Old Shovel

I'm just an old shovel, who loved spooning around
    Scooping up and over again, the same old ground
    I’ve handled jobs, few others would call profound
    Always piling high, and patting down a big mound
    Some folks leaned on me, if no seats to be found 
    Then gave me a shoulder, when homeward bound
    When on the scrap heap, I never made one sound
    Got shafted damn good... but, I’m on the rebound

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Janice Canerdy August 23, 2023 at 8:49 AM Very effective use of personification, David! Janice David Kavanagh August 23, 2023 at 9:27 AM Heya Janice, thank you so much for positive comment, the best I could do In monorhyme form, cheers David

I Am Anaya August 22, 2023 at 5:20 PM If you sing along to the words, and change ol shovel to ol bottle of rum, this may make a fun Sea Shanty! Lol As we dance a jig and swig our grog! B0l I Am Anaya August 23, 2023 at 8:49 AM That's good, "skates" in American Navy.. from coal to steam to nuclear power David Kavanagh August 23, 2023 at 12:53 AM You may be onto something here Anaya, they could sing it down the boiler room whilst shovelling coal, give em layabouts something to do, lol, cheers David

Terry Flood August 22, 2023 at 4:37 PM Hey, an old shovel with a stout wooden handle… will outlast a modern plastic handled effort by millennia. Unless you’ve edited this, David, it seems like fine personification to me… so I hope you get a worthy second in the contest. Tee hee David Kavanagh August 23, 2023 at 12:49 AM Yeah I did an edit under Lin’s supervision, I liked the original but was not suitable for contest, yep I’m with you on (stout handles) cheeky git, Gertcha, cheers David

Jan Allison August 22, 2023 at 3:04 PM love the personification and monorhyme - the line about getting shafted was so clever! hugs jan xx David Kavanagh August 23, 2023 at 12:39 AM Thanks so much Jan, I purposely saved that line for the ending, only so many parts to a shovel, for playing around with, cheers David

Lin Lane August 22, 2023 at 5:00 AM Any tool with the chance to rise from lack of use deserves to be erected or I should say resurrected. Personify this guy, David and enter it in the contest. Lin Lane August 22, 2023 at 2:16 PM You're welcome. You'd do the same for friends. David Kavanagh August 22, 2023 at 6:50 AM Well it got one now thanks to you Lin, I really should read contest instructions thoroughly, thanks again Lin Lane August 22, 2023 at 6:38 AM ;-) Your shovel needed a life of his own. David Kavanagh August 22, 2023 at 5:32 AM Aah I hate to discombobulate this one, I totally misread this contest rules, what’s new lol, it needed to be a personification, thanks for the heads up, cheers David

Tom Cunningham August 22, 2023 at 4:38 AM Sadly it was his time David, you'll need a new one to put the old one to rest. Good luck in the contest. Tom David Kavanagh August 22, 2023 at 4:55 AM Heya Tom, I actually have an old one that needs a new handle, next time I’m in Home store I must get one, cheers David