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Alertness

a fly fell down dead
some ants stage an autopsy~
‘cadaver’ in shreds

Copyright © Valsa George | Year Posted 2022

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March 9, 2022 at 1:51 AM

Outstanding Metaphors and great Haiku, Valsa.

March 8, 2022 at 5:41 PM

Oh! Valsa, this poem is a little dark. Outstanding visuals. Blessings ~ Debra

Andrea Dietrich

March 8, 2022 at 1:09 PM

oh my, I can sure picture this one. Many ants kind of gross me out. Lke when I see them swarming over a little piece of candy or something. ugggg.

Bj Legros Kelley

March 8, 2022 at 12:55 AM

Eating on the fly takes on a whole new perspective for me now Valsa, I wonder if I can ever hear that term again without remembering your great haiku! ~BJ

March 7, 2022 at 11:51 PM

Thanks for confirming my suspicions, Valsa ~ Antsy about Flying

March 7, 2022 at 8:40 PM

so is the observation, dear Valsa, makes for great poetry.

March 7, 2022 at 4:35 PM

The life cycle, good Haiku, Valsa. A poet friend in Texas, Bill

Caren Krutsinger

March 7, 2022 at 10:57 AM

One of my favorite haikus of all time.

March 7, 2022 at 10:29 AM

Food for thought . . . .Aloha!

March 7, 2022 at 8:15 AM

Images succinctly captured.

March 7, 2022 at 7:16 AM

They're like a pack of hungry lions, have watched that scene many times. Tom

Joseph P. DiMino

March 7, 2022 at 7:03 AM

Love it! The fly dead...the ants full~now for my picnic.

March 7, 2022 at 6:54 AM

Hi Valsa, You composed a good haiku. Each line painted a vivid picture. Well done. Have a great day-Alexis

Victor Buhagiar

March 7, 2022 at 6:26 AM

Very well constructed haiku. Great visuals.

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