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a fly fell down dead some ants stage an autopsy~ ‘cadaver’ in shreds

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Date: 3/9/2022 1:51:00 AM
Outstanding Metaphors and great Haiku, Valsa.
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Date: 3/8/2022 5:41:00 PM
Oh! Valsa, this poem is a little dark. Outstanding visuals. Blessings ~ Debra
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Date: 3/8/2022 1:09:00 PM
oh my, I can sure picture this one. Many ants kind of gross me out. Lke when I see them swarming over a little piece of candy or something. ugggg.
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Date: 3/8/2022 12:55:00 AM
Eating on the fly takes on a whole new perspective for me now Valsa, I wonder if I can ever hear that term again without remembering your great haiku! ~BJ
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Date: 3/7/2022 11:51:00 PM
Thanks for confirming my suspicions, Valsa ~ Antsy about Flying
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Date: 3/7/2022 8:40:00 PM
so is the observation, dear Valsa, makes for great poetry.
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Date: 3/7/2022 4:35:00 PM
The life cycle, good Haiku, Valsa. A poet friend in Texas, Bill
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Date: 3/7/2022 10:57:00 AM
One of my favorite haikus of all time.
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Date: 3/7/2022 10:29:00 AM
Food for thought . . . .Aloha!
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Date: 3/7/2022 8:15:00 AM
Images succinctly captured.
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Date: 3/7/2022 7:16:00 AM
They're like a pack of hungry lions, have watched that scene many times. Tom
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Date: 3/7/2022 7:03:00 AM
Love it! The fly dead...the ants full~now for my picnic.
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Date: 3/7/2022 6:54:00 AM
Hi Valsa, You composed a good haiku. Each line painted a vivid picture. Well done. Have a great day-Alexis
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Date: 3/7/2022 6:26:00 AM
Very well constructed haiku. Great visuals.
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