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A Visit With Grannie


I go to visit my kindly grannie,
And I am met by her golden orange cat;
With a kink in his whisker and a tummy fat,
The door opens after many an irritable knock-
I am caught in a generous loud yell for my nanny.
She ushers me inside and I sit on an absurd old chair,
The chair keeps wanting to fall over - I have to take care;
Oh dear, who was the engineer of this lopsided thing I sit on,
When I move this way or that,  it emits an odd, creaking song. 
I do have to appreciate the lovely purple iris on the kitchen table,
And grannie makes an excellent cup of tea and cookies made of maple;
I was genial in my praise and think she is quite admirable - she has flare,
Don't know an iota about tea but grannie tells me her brand is quite costly.
I help her get the dishes in order, then she says. . .  . I have to do my washy!

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July 11, 2016

Poetry/Rhyme/A Visit With Grannie
Copyright Protected, ID 16-808-045-0
All Rights Reserved.  Written under Pseudonym.


Submitted to the contest,  Premiere Contest Number 3
Sponsor,  A Skat

Third Place
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For the Premiere contest, Make A Poem
sponsor, Shadow Hamilton

Third Place
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Lamoureux Avatar
July 13, 2016 at 6:10 PM
My favorite so far, congrats!
Chansarkar Avatar
July 13, 2016 at 10:13 AM
Great use of the words to form a lovely story,congrats BW!
A  Avatar
July 12, 2016 at 11:39 PM
Broken, Congratulations on your nice win. Skat
Misra Avatar
July 12, 2016 at 8:18 PM
Congratulations on your win, Broken Wings. Well writ!
Scars Avatar
July 12, 2016 at 5:31 PM
Broken Wings, congrats on your fine placement in the contest :)-luloo
Haight Avatar
July 12, 2016 at 5:15 PM
Congratulations, Constance, on your podium win in this Premiere Contest! Love your story and how you used the 21 words. 7 Hugs, Sandra
Hamilton Avatar
July 12, 2016 at 4:54 PM
very poignant poem Connie lovely congrts on 3rd place hugs
Allison Avatar
July 12, 2016 at 4:51 PM
Dropping back with my congrats:-) hugs Jan xx
Dietrich Avatar
July 12, 2016 at 9:13 AM
You did better than most I saw of these poems, Constance. One hour seems about right. WELL DONE.
Stebbings Avatar
July 12, 2016 at 5:57 AM
Lovely pictorial visit to your Grannie. Barry
Wigley Avatar
July 11, 2016 at 11:24 PM
Sounds like my kind of Grannie, Constance, and I like the sound of her house. Quirky and creaky, like me. A lovely write, good luck. Viv x
Allison Avatar
July 11, 2016 at 10:21 PM
I can just picture the scene Constance - good luck in the contest I really like the way you wove your words in so cleverly:-) hugs Jan xx
Smith Avatar
July 11, 2016 at 9:50 PM
A wonderful visit with your granny Constance. Good luck in the contest.
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