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A Lover's Testimony- Swap Quatrain Contest

I saw the light there in your eyes Love clearly seen without disguise And banished was my soul’s dark night There in your eyes, I saw the light I felt the flame there in your kiss A burning taste that filled with bliss On searing heart, you staked your claim There in your kiss, I felt the flame I came undone with each caress Subdued as hands sought to undress My heart and soul you’d surely won With each caress, I came undone I felt complete in your embrace For hands each curve with love did trace Essence of love, a tasty treat In your embrace, I felt complete I now lie still, safe in your arms I am enthralled by your sweet charms With all this warmth, my heart I fill Safe in your arms, I now lie still For Andrea’s Swap Quatrain Contest February 19, 2014

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Just That Archaic Poet

Date: 3/9/2014 12:21:00 PM

Very sweet and heartfelt poem; great job on this write :)

Joyce Johnson

Date: 3/9/2014 11:21:00 AM

This would certainly have been a winner. Lovely meter. this was a fun contest. Joyce

Eileen Manassian
Date: 3/9/2014 11:28:00 AM

Thanks, Joyce. yes....it was fun...lots o hard work, but rewarding. I can't believe after all that I failed to enter it into the contest. Thanks for the visit!

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 3/9/2014 1:54:00 AM

Please go to my blog again and also see my comment to you at YOUR blog. I am wondering if maybe your other poems are not getting to me. I'd be happy to check them out and tell you if they appeared at my contest. And if they did, I can tell you why I did not give them a win. This one, I will tell you that for its perfect rhyme and meter, you would have been at least in 5th or 6th place and maybe higher!

Eileen Manassian
Date: 3/9/2014 11:27:00 AM

OK....I kicked myself...I didn't enter it. I'm so sorry for all the fuss....

Eileen Manassian
Date: 3/9/2014 1:55:00 AM

Oh Andrea.....I'm so heartbroken. I love your work...If I didn't really enter it...I'll kick myself...

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 3/9/2014 1:38:00 AM

Dear Eileen, this is wonderful. you did the contest correctly. I am going now to double check if you were ever on my list. I am sure I never saw this on my list. Here I go to check again.

Eileen Manassian
Date: 3/9/2014 11:29:00 AM

:( My blunder, Andrea...I explained on YOUR blog and apologized profusely!!! Still waiting to see if you will forgive me!

Donna Jones

Date: 2/23/2014 9:04:00 AM

This is such a beautiful poem sweetie..., not only the form but the title and intimate content...I don't see you enter contests often...bet you place tops here...

Eileen Manassian
Date: 2/23/2014 9:15:00 AM

Hi MD!!!! How are you, my dearest??? I was away for a bit...on holiday....and no, I don't join too many contests. I know I'm silly, but.....I'll try to get back in form. Thanks for your continued love to me. You have no idea how much it means...Hugs!

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 2/20/2014 7:44:00 PM

Hi Eileen, after writing my own I appreciate this poem even more. Perfection!

Eileen Manassian
Date: 2/22/2014 7:24:00 PM

Richard....you are too kind. I'm touched by your comment.

Joseph May

Date: 2/20/2014 1:10:00 PM

You made it look easy...great write!...

Eileen Manassian
Date: 2/22/2014 7:25:00 PM

Thanks, Joseph. Glad you passed by....

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 2/20/2014 9:30:00 AM

I feel the heat! This should do very well Eileen. What is meant by swapping???

Eileen Manassian
Date: 2/20/2014 10:38:00 AM

Hi, Richard....Go to Andrea's contest site. She has a link which explains it more. But here goes: Usually each line is 8 syllables...first and second line rhyme....First and fourth lines are swapped...meaning...the first line is cut in the middle and the latter part comes first in the last line...and the third line has to rhyme with the last one. Check my first and last lines of the first stanza...you'll know what I mean The word order is swapped. You better join this contest...I'm sure you''ll shine! Hugs

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 2/20/2014 5:12:00 AM

- A beautiful gem from you, Eileen. - Hope your holiday gave you lots of new energy. - Good luck in the contest. . . it won my heart. - Have a beautiful day. - oxox // Anne-Lise :)

Eileen Manassian
Date: 2/20/2014 10:39:00 AM

Hello, sweet Anne Lise...Thank you for the lovely visit. yes, it was a lovely holiday and I did gain a lot of energy from being with loved ones. I'm glad you liked this. Hugs!

Poet Tacito

Date: 2/19/2014 9:58:00 PM

Deep, longing sighs! Like a theme song for Skittles, tasting her rainbow...absolutely touching!

Eileen Manassian
Date: 2/20/2014 10:40:00 AM

Hmmmmmm....tasting a rainbow....how ....SWEET! :)

Ilene Bauer

Date: 2/19/2014 7:32:00 PM

this sounds like a winner to me! beautifully executed - it flows so naturally and just swept me along...

Eileen Manassian
Date: 2/20/2014 10:41:00 AM

Thanks, Ilene...I'm glad it gives that feeling because I did have to work on it quite a long time! ;) I even burned what I was cooking....HA HA! That's how engrossed I was. I hope it does well. Thanks for the vote of confidence.

Richard D Seal

Date: 2/19/2014 5:35:00 PM

oh wow yes, I was thinking of having a go at this but having read yours i dunno if I'll try lol. Just beautiful my little Desert Orchid. Take care, Richard

Eileen Manassian
Date: 2/20/2014 10:42:00 AM

OH, Mr Seal....You are being WAY too kind...Out of character, isn't it? I mean...where is the teasing! ;) Thanks, though. It feels good to get praise from ya! I wasn't so sure about the title....it just came as an easy out. Glad you liked it.

Richard D Seal
Date: 2/19/2014 5:36:00 PM

That's a great title for this write too

Nette Onclaud

Date: 2/19/2014 2:47:00 PM

how beautifully epxressed, eileen.. the flow of your words is runs like a river, and the content romantic.. love it!.. huggs

Eileen Manassian
Date: 2/20/2014 10:45:00 AM

Ohhhhhh.....thank you, Nette. So glad to receive this encouragement from you. Bless you for it. Hugs

Joe Flach

Date: 2/19/2014 12:59:00 PM

Terrific write, Eileen. Great use of this challenging form. This flows smoothly; maintains consistent thought and theme; and was a pleasure to read. Good luck in the contest. Joe

Eileen Manassian
Date: 2/19/2014 1:00:00 PM

Hi Joe....I must admit....it took some doing. Andrea is a tough cookie to write for! ;) Your post gives me that confidence I need to know I did pretty well. Thanks ever so much. :) I'm delighted by your visit.