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A Life In Monochrome

Black or white? How can that be? I’m sure I see a kaleidoscope of colors. But something is not right. I can’t distinguish which is which. They all look pallid white or ebon black. I panic. Where are the rainbow hues? All gone as if violent squalls of a mighty hurricane Swept them off the face of a tempestuous earth. I try to move about and shatter the confusion, But all is pitch dark fog. I stop For I can hear, oh yes I can hear The breathing of someone in the room. Where is it coming from? Who is luring there? I can sense it in the corner, a shape darker than dark. I freeze. Those eyes! Burning red. I see it approaching, getting near. I scream. My wife touches me tenderly. Another nightmare? Come we’ll have breakfast. I rise and grasp my white walking stick. All is stygian dark though I feel the soft white sun. For I am bat blind. Except minute faint white patches. The rest is just tar black.

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Date: 1/25/2022 6:33:00 AM
Powerful and raw and beautifully sensitive . You took us with you on this journey and mage it alive for the reader . You have created so much immediacy and emotion here Victor. An important message . Our senses are gifts . Susan :)
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Date: 1/22/2022 11:21:00 AM
Another wonderful tale with a surprise at the end, Victor. At first I thought you were outdoors and lost in the fog. Very vivid images. :)
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Date: 1/20/2022 9:19:00 AM
Great story , you had me believing until the last stanza.
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Date: 1/20/2022 7:17:00 AM
- Sounds like a nightmare ... but, most bats have good eyesight ... a great poem, Victor :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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Date: 1/20/2022 6:20:00 AM
Another one of your amazing stories with a twist, Victor, great creativity, so many times, we take our senses for granted, this poem reminded me of that:)
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Date: 1/20/2022 4:37:00 AM
Well, I did not expect that ending...Delice
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Date: 1/20/2022 2:26:00 AM
You were able to make your readers experience the confused state of one's mind when life becomes a monochrome to someone and everything in life suddenly turns to just black and white for him...So well crafted Victor...God bless...~ Ani
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Date: 1/19/2022 9:26:00 PM
Mind sometimes travels through labyrinthine tracks and a jumble of scenes and emotions come crowding when one is not able to distinctly see one from the other. At times we see everything is clothed in hazy mist. A powerful write bringing out the complexities of human mind, dear friend !
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Date: 1/19/2022 7:06:00 PM
When you need to be comforted or a sense of calm to surround you, she will be near. Your thoughts curl softly around me and my heart. My best to you, my dear sweet friend. Hugs, Brandy
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Date: 1/19/2022 5:32:00 PM
Love the emotional roller-coaster, Victor.. someone is telling you that through your darkest times, there will be a silver lining. In the end...comfort! Great write!
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Date: 1/19/2022 1:18:00 PM
WoW! What story. Filled with emotion. This must be what it's like to be blind. My husband has been fearing losing his sight. It has been deteriorating. A fine write as always Victor. God Bless, JB
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Date: 1/19/2022 12:06:00 PM
Victor, you piqued my interest at every turn, and I couldn't wait to see what would happen next and hear the following line. My buddy, you have written an enthralling piece. On the other hand, the tenderness is an excellent turn in the end.
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Date: 1/19/2022 11:01:00 AM
She must have come into your dreams to soothe you and calm your fears, that is what they do even from heaven :)
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Date: 1/19/2022 5:58:00 AM
A terrible affliction Victor, its a strange world they live in not being able to see anyone or anything. Tom
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Date: 1/19/2022 5:54:00 AM
My curiosity kept peaking at every turn to see the next scene, hear the next verse. Captivating write my friend. The poignancy though hurts in the end. A signature turn of your poems, Victor.
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Date: 1/19/2022 5:52:00 AM
A significant achievement? Nightmare apart, u show great empathy with those sight-challenged. In Matthew 6, Jesus adds, "It's better to enter blind ..." than be blind to "darkness" within. In Matthew 7, Jesus talks about specks in the eye. In John 8:12, "I am the light if the world " u got me going ( oops)
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Date: 1/19/2022 4:02:00 AM
Sad one. That would be a nightmare and a living nightmare if one awakened and it was their life. Enjoyed reading this one today. Thanks for the visit to my page. Sara
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Date: 1/19/2022 2:37:00 AM
Absolutely marvelous poem! So vivid and powerful that captures the attention of the reader and makes him see the world of the blind! Blessings!
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Date: 1/19/2022 12:39:00 AM
Something has gone wrong Victor, only the title is showing Tom
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Date: 1/19/2022 1:05:00 AM
I had a mistake in the html. It is now corrected. Thank you for pointing it out to me.

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