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A Fawn and a Frog

A springtime fawn found a placid pond and knelt down for a drink. She bent her knees into the mud, And placed her velveted chin parallel to the pond and the dawn found the edge of the earth. The touch of the fawn’s Mouth made the water wake. (and all things in it). And as she drank, the orchestra played the pond-song play. The whole pond awoke to the sound of the little, lapping, fawn’s tongue-song. A tadpole was freed and ...Swam in the song. He surfaced. Greened in the dawn. And surprised the fawn. He saddled her sweet new nose With his bright green clothes. And she sneezed him Aloft a red virgin rose.

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Date: 8/5/2022 6:41:00 AM
Your short alliterations placid/pond, parallel/pond, pond song/play little/lapping and water/wake add much to the rhythm of the music in your piece. Greened in the dawn/bright green clothes seemed out of place but I do love the inclusion of some rhyme at the end. I got your gist that we don't have to plan a good deed, sometimes they just happen outside of our control. Nice work, Cooper.
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Lee Etheridge
Date: 10/3/2023 9:14:00 PM
Well. Been off a beat or two. Trying to get back. Thanks.
Date: 7/23/2022 2:15:00 PM
"A Fawn and a Frog" is a lovely write. Have a great/blessed day writing away.............
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Lee Etheridge
Date: 7/23/2022 11:47:00 PM
Thank you
Date: 7/23/2022 6:15:00 AM
From a Tadpole to a Fawn "One good turn deserves another." A Nature Poem of the Fauna to be highly ranked!
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Lee Etheridge
Date: 7/23/2022 11:46:00 PM
Thank you.
Date: 7/22/2022 5:08:00 AM
kept hearing Cat Steven's Morning Has Broken reading this....that is the beauty of poetry....it ripples out....loved it
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Lee Etheridge
Date: 7/23/2022 11:47:00 PM
Oh great. Yes. Love that song
Date: 7/20/2022 4:01:00 PM
A creative effort of nature at dawn and the harmony experienced in nature. We shold learn from nayure and get along better with all of creation, Cooper. Thanks for sharing your thoughts through your poetry my friend. Bill Wecole to PoetrySoup! You'll like it here!
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Lee Etheridge
Date: 7/23/2022 11:55:00 PM
Yep. Agreed. It’s a pleasant place to be.
Date: 7/20/2022 3:50:00 PM
This is delightful writing, Cooper: I’d like to add my welcome and say I look forward to reading many more of your poems. I am SuZ.
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Lee Etheridge
Date: 7/23/2022 11:54:00 PM
Thank you. I just learned about this and I’m happy to find a community.
Date: 7/20/2022 3:33:00 PM
This picks me up and puts me down in a different place! Clever writing, fine sensibility. More please!
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Lee Etheridge
Date: 7/23/2022 11:57:00 PM
Thank you, Elizabeth. I’ve always loved the name Elizabeth. It’s a poetic name.
Date: 7/20/2022 3:30:00 PM
Welcome to PoetrySoup Cooper. This was a enjoyable free verse and I look forward to reading more of your poems. Cheers Anne :-)
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Lee Etheridge
Date: 7/24/2022 12:02:00 AM
Anne, Thank you. So glad to find this community because it’s strange to write (in my world, ha)
Date: 7/20/2022 1:50:00 PM
This is funny, Cooper! Great job!
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Lee Etheridge
Date: 7/23/2022 11:59:00 PM
Yes. It seems so funny. I hope it’s happened.
Date: 7/20/2022 1:47:00 PM
Quite delightful Cooper, wonderful talent!
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Lee Etheridge
Date: 7/23/2022 11:58:00 PM
Thanks, James. I really appreciate it
Date: 7/20/2022 1:37:00 PM
That’s so lovely Cooper, welcome to PoetrySoup… Belle
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Lee Etheridge
Date: 7/24/2022 12:00:00 AM
Thanks, Belle!
Date: 7/20/2022 1:13:00 PM
Oh, this is ever so beautiful Cooper! A magical and mystical feel to an awesome subject! More, please! Linda
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Lee Etheridge
Date: 7/23/2022 11:52:00 PM
Thanks Linda. It’s a little pond I remember from my grandfather.
Date: 4/11/2022 7:36:00 AM
what an interesting piece! do write more!
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Lee Etheridge
Date: 6/1/2022 1:24:00 AM
Ok. Thanks
Date: 4/10/2022 1:49:00 PM
Tight work, Keep up the good vibes.
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Lee Etheridge
Date: 6/1/2022 1:25:00 AM
More honesty on its way. God bless

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