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A Broken Heart

she heard the sound of pigeons overhead looking up she saw them whirling and gyrating forming ever emerging patterns in the sky they soared on and on until they turned into black dots in the blue such sights would have sent her to raptures sometime back...... but now when she sees them she can only think of the years speeding by and the chances missed her whole life- a fading black dot! she is infected with a virus of melancholy she walks with lacerations in her soul pain consumes her without flame forever she wages a battle inside, to drive out the demons of dejection but she feels as if a sharp knife is cutting right through her heart and she winces at every chop though she tries hard to cover her bruises they bleed red and make themselves known pain has sucked her out in a leaking vessel, she collects her tears to water the parched terrain of her drought stricken domain light has sorely betrayed her and now she lives in perpetual darkness fighting with black shadows day in and day out with a broken heart that can never be mended!
A Brian Strand 1096 Poetry Contest Placed Fifth Feb.26.2022 Some Broken Hearts Never Mend Poetry Contest Sponsor- Faraz Ajmal

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Date: 3/27/2022 6:57:00 AM
Vortex of gloom … superbly penned, Valsa
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Date: 3/27/2022 5:37:00 AM
"she is infected with a virus of melancholy" - This mood is beautifully brought out all through the poem through images like, "until they turned into black dots in the blue", "a sharp knife is cutting right through her heart"... Beautiful. Congratulations!
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Date: 3/1/2022 10:43:00 AM
This entry is 'A Definite Win!' I am almost certain that you have been writing poems for quite some years as your poetry is seasoned with amazing talent. Hugs and blessings, Jennifer.
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Date: 2/28/2022 11:25:00 AM
A virus of melancholy sounds sad "she can only think of the years speeding by and the chances missed her whole life- a fading black dot!" I see a pattern. You are expressing sadness well here.
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Date: 2/27/2022 5:29:00 PM
Vasal, This is a very sad, I felt the emotions and pain, as your words describes in detail. Good luck in the contest. Blessings ~ Debra
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Date: 2/27/2022 3:38:00 PM
A very sad state of mind.
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Date: 2/27/2022 6:14:00 AM
- Most of us have felt this pain ... beautifully written, Valsa :) - Best wishes in the contest - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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Date: 2/26/2022 9:39:00 PM
Amazing poetry, the very words draw one in, and this reader feels the sentiment..
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Valsa George
Date: 2/26/2022 9:58:00 PM
Thank you so much for your kind visit and comment ,Harry !
Date: 2/26/2022 2:32:00 PM
WoW! Valsa, This is a good entry for the contest theme. You are such a good writer, you wrote about sadness and heartbreak so well. I think it’s a good contender for the contest. Best wishes in the contest. Have a nice day-Alexis
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Valsa George
Date: 2/26/2022 9:23:00 PM
Thank you so much Alexis for your highly encouraging opinion about my ability as a poet.... ! Whether deserving or not, I feel so delighted.... ! Have a great week ahead, dear friend !
Date: 2/26/2022 12:54:00 PM
Dear Valsa, It's not an easy task to express the sadness and heartbreak of a dejected person. You have chosen perfect vocabulary and images to describe a character who "is infected with a virus of melancholy". It's tragic and sorrowful, but perhaps true for many unfortunate ones. Love and blessings ~ Mala
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Valsa George
Date: 2/26/2022 9:20:00 PM
Thank you so much Mala for your insightful analysis of my poem ! Warm greetings, dear friend !
Date: 2/26/2022 10:26:00 AM
Broken hearts happen to everyone, so suck it up and move on, but nice write, Valsa!
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Date: 2/26/2022 9:18:00 PM
In life there are many instances that break our hearts... true Rico ! But mostly we get the ability to spring back. Thanks a lot Rico!
Date: 2/26/2022 5:21:00 AM
WOW Valsa, this poem is a gem, I absolutely love the way you have created and crafted it with such poetic talent - kudos my friend - this IS a win! Hugs and blessings, Jennifer.
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Valsa George
Date: 2/26/2022 9:17:00 PM
Hi Jennifer, this lovely comment has made my day ! Your prediction may or may not come true.... ! Yet this wish has made me so happy ! Thanks a lot ! Stay happy and blessed, dear !
Date: 2/26/2022 5:00:00 AM
Some tragedies have lifetime pain that never goes away. Well painted travails of life, Valsa.
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Valsa George
Date: 2/26/2022 9:14:00 PM
Quite true Vijay ! Some tragedies shake the very foundation of our existence !
Date: 2/26/2022 12:40:00 AM
There is nothing worse than a broken heart, it can take a lifetime to mend. Enjoy your weekend Valsa. Tom
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Valsa George
Date: 2/26/2022 9:13:00 PM
Once the heart is broken it is so hard to glue it up ! Thanks a lot Tom

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