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Constance La France's Heartbroken Contest...17Jul 2025 ' perhaps the most unforgettable moment of young adulthood is the bittersweet taste of first love fading away...' by poet

 

Heartbroken By Young Love --POTD

I feel your unrehearsed pauses-- the rustle of a blue shirt in leaving a tangy ache your firm lips make, holding back cold, collected words. This rendezvous ... a slow-fire quiver an ending which has it's own interment; and outside, night wrestles with time brittle dew against my eyes, dry mouth licking an estranged bite that reminds me of your frivolity . Until sighs become hollow and stuttering like a thirst from a weltering breakwall. So it is with discovery, the trails of affection are never mine as I call you grimly,' 0 heart-breaker' while banging shells litter on the dunes as this heart shrinks from tangled lies: There is still much to learn about young passion... needles upon my chest losing you from sight like a migrant breeze... for a woman , fragile at eighteen.
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Date: 8/18/2025 8:31:00 AM
A merited double 'congratulations' is being sent your way, dear Nette...one for your win in Constance's contest, and one for p.o.t.d. honours. Being able to write such a beautiful poem in memory of heartbroken young love definitely goes a long way to soften the aches & pains of that fragile 18 yr-old lass. ~ Warm regards // paul
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Date: 8/9/2025 11:45:00 PM
Gorgeous writing. Congrats on the potd and how high this is on best new 100 poems list!
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Date: 8/1/2025 7:48:00 AM
Nette, congratulations on your win in my Heartbroken contest, I love your quote, image, and your words are beautifully penned, and congrats also on receiving the Poem of The Day honour, blessings ~
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Date: 7/30/2025 12:27:00 PM
Wonderful writing Nette, a worthy winner and potd. Well done!
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Date: 7/22/2025 9:20:00 AM
Congratulations again!
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Date: 7/22/2025 8:13:00 AM
Back with Congratulations on your New win. I enjoyed reading your wonderful write again. Have a blessed day with your wonderful New win..............
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Date: 7/19/2025 11:43:00 PM
Congrats, lovely poem!
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Date: 7/19/2025 9:07:00 PM
Big congrats on your POTD and this astounding piece my dear poet friend & sis! Cheers! Thanks for sharing! Hugs. A Blessed Sunday and God bless!
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Date: 7/19/2025 6:42:00 PM
Well-written poetry, Nette. Congratulations om your POTD honor! Enjoy your special day of recognition. A poet in Texas, Bill
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Date: 7/19/2025 5:49:00 PM
Young love is immature in many ways. So much to learn, so many emotions linger. Your thoughts caress gently around me and my heart. Congratulations Nette, on Poem of the Day. My best to you. Hugs, Brandy
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Date: 7/19/2025 2:53:00 PM
Well deserving of this honour. Congratulations Nette. Hugs Rick It’s so good I read it twice.
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Date: 7/30/2025 12:26:00 PM
Hey Rick sent you a soupmail. Broken people the song is uploaded today.
Date: 7/19/2025 1:38:00 PM
holding back cold, collected words...brittle dew…until sighs become hollow and stuttering…just a few great ones! And now I see you have POTD! Congrats!
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Date: 7/19/2025 11:28:00 AM
- Congratulations on your lovely p.o.t.d., Nette :) - hugs
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Date: 7/19/2025 10:21:00 AM
So many congrats! Happy for you!
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Date: 7/19/2025 9:25:00 AM
Young love so fragile. Congratulations Nette! :)
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Date: 7/19/2025 8:18:00 AM
Congratulations on your POTD win. What a wonderful write. Love the ending... To be 18 again. I have been off the computer for a few days. Have a blessed day with your wonderful win...................
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Date: 7/19/2025 7:50:00 AM
WOW, now this is poetry, causing me to pause, to feel and taste the bite of passion's first growl l....MAGNIFICENT...IMNSHO
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Date: 7/19/2025 6:57:00 AM
Dear Nette, Eighteen is so young, and yet I believe you carry the weight of love’s disappointments like a seasoned soul. This is such a fragile, brave part of you. Congrats on POTD. Summer Blessings, My Dear Nette, Daniel
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Date: 7/19/2025 5:34:00 AM
Nette, Congratulations on your beautiful poem receiving POTD! Enjoy your day xxoo
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Date: 7/19/2025 5:14:00 AM
Awww how nice to see this in the spotlight. Enjoy
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Date: 7/19/2025 4:47:00 AM
returning to congratulate you on a well-deserved POTD...your words are poignant and beautiful
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Date: 7/19/2025 3:55:00 AM
Poignant, painful, piercing, superbly penned as always, Nette, warmest congratulations on POTD
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Date: 7/19/2025 2:41:00 AM
Congratulations Nette on a passionate potd!
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Date: 7/19/2025 12:38:00 AM
Dear Nette,your imagery stirs such a quiet ache — the “rustle of a blue shirt in leaving,” and “needles upon my chest” carry such emotional precision. There's a delicate tension in every line between longing and letting go, like the lingering warmth of someone who's already vanished. This poem moves like memory —Congratulations on this being awarded POTD...Hugs
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Date: 7/18/2025 5:13:00 PM
absolutely beautiful and flowing lines! Yes, first love is bittersweet and you've capture the feelings quite well. Best wishes with the contest, Sara PS Faving
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