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3/28/2017 11:30:00 AM
If souls could talk	If souls could talk they would say“Don’t play chance with your life”But sometimes you do. If souls could talk they would say. “You have so many imperfections but take those imperfections and make them a perfection.”You would say “But I have no imperfections” but that is what you think but the people around you think differently.If souls could talk they would be talking up a storm because they would be saying that they had many imperfections while they were alive and now trying to make our lives a perfection by telling their imperfections like drinking alcohol like it is water or making those bad decisions that could ruin your life down the road because they will no matter if you forget or try to cover them up.Now that you know, go and make your life better
3/28/2017 11:33:41 AM
You and me, we are energy	from what I saw it was good but try to put a little more rhyme to it at the end.
4/4/2017 8:05:15 AM
The House I Live In	I thought that it was good but could be improved.
4/4/2017 11:02:00 AM
Any one tell if this is ok ?	I really liked it. I can almost relate to it. The rhythm has a steady beat and the rhyme scheme is great but at the last stanza the first two lines did not rhyme like all the other stanzas. The question is this ok uh yeah this is.
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