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3/28/2017 11:30:00 AM Robert McVay Posts: 4	If souls could talk they would say“Don’t play chance with your life”But sometimes you do. If souls could talk they would say. “You have so many imperfections but take those imperfections and make them a perfection.”You would say “But I have no imperfections” but that is what you think but the people around you think differently.If souls could talk they would be talking up a storm because they would be saying that they had many imperfections while they were alive and now trying to make our lives a perfection by telling their imperfections like drinking alcohol like it is water or making those bad decisions that could ruin your life down the road because they will no matter if you forget or try to cover them up.Now that you know, go and make your life better
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4/10/2017 5:14:00 PM Doug Vinson Posts: 102	Hi Robert. How about breaking it up with shorter lines and/or shorter paragraphs? That way it would not be all one mass of text.
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6/3/2017 10:46:12 PM quinoa Posts: 6	I like this expression 'If souls could talk'. It sounds like musiс.
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