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5/6/2015 3:23:07 PM
New, Crazy but undeniably lovable.	Been here all of two days and iv posted almost 10 poems. i love to write and get feed back but writing poems is not all that i do among writing poetry i also write short story's and have started my first book im only 17 but i hope that my writing will take me far. i also love singing and being outside. my life have not been easy in fact its been quite complicated but it has all made me who i am. To me and what i write especially when it comes to my poems its all about letting go of how i feel and everything i write is personal to me i hope to learn more from being on her and to gain advice from what iv already done so please welcome me with open arms and fingers read for typing advice thanks for letting me be apart of this very amazing site. a few more things about me i suck a grammar my favorite color is purple and im a huge animal lover. my favorite number is 7 and yes i meant what i said in the name of this post im new crazy but have a way with helping people so in undeniably lovable.
5/6/2015 3:26:59 PM
Im new would love the feed back	please take a look at my poems im new and leave a comment with your thoughts/opinions/criticism/etc......would love to hear all, thanks in advance...
6/3/2015 5:59:14 PM
My poem, The Dream	I would like some honest critique of this work. Please I had that dream again last night, The one that leaves me crying. He tells me im not good enough, And i should just quit trying. I was just a pawn in his hand, To use then cast away. He gets inside my head and plays these little games. He made me believe that I was wanted. He told me that he loved me, and he was here to stay. But all he did was use me, And then he walked away. Now im left here broken, saying its my fault. Its really hard to talk about, Because no one understands. Whats its like to be abandoned by your dad again. To want his love for nine strait years, To be the perfect daughter. To be for him all that i can be. Just to have him walk away. No one can see me breaking, Or the pain that this has caused. I look fine on the outside, and say that nothings wrong. Because im the strong one that never breaks, Everyone counts on me, to make everything else go away. So I bottle up my demons, and cast them all away. Let no one know what im feeling. Because, see that just my way. So i walk around with this fake smile on my face. Knowing that one day he will see, The daughter that i could be, The daughter that he lost. As i look toward tomorrow for a better day. Because when i look around i know im loved By people who mater to me, My mother, my brother, and my sisters to. And by a stepfather who means the world to me. So I can proudly say to him. To Mark Who needs a fathers love like your anyway edited by amara-rose on 6/3/2015
6/4/2015 3:22:32 PM
AM I THE ONLY TEEN ON POETRY SOUP?	I am 17 and now a Senior in highschool
3/1/2016 5:22:12 AM
My Soul extended version/ lyrics	Please tell me what you think, don't hold back. This was my first time writing song lyrics hope you enjoy. /poem/my_soul_extended_song_lyrics_763001
3/1/2016 5:52:44 AM
Newbie	Welcome to poem haven have fun!
3/1/2016 6:50:32 AM
My Soul extended version/ lyrics	This is my first time writing lyrics so tell me what you think. The first verse was the original poem I extended. /poem/my_soul_extended_song_lyrics_763001
3/22/2016 6:38:26 AM
Fall from grace	I've fallen from grace Crashed through the sky Landing crumpled where I lie My sins are what sent me tumbling Weighting down my soul. Wings ripped out Im bleeding from the scars they left behind. I've been cast out forever My golden halo no longer shines My sins forever haunt me Lies, darkness, and empty eyes. My fall from grace has left me hallow Wishing for the girl who used to fly Before the lies Before the wrong paths my feet followed My mortal sins confine me Tormenting me in the form of Darkness and daemons which attack me from all sides As they invade my mind. If not for being branded on my soul I'd just wash them all away Hoped to turn the water black Cleansing the shadows to light again Ill live amongst the sinners now Forced to fight and try to survive everyday It's my eternal punishment. Forced to wonder with those like me Other who have fallen because of their dark and secret sins Aging till we die. Maybe then I'll be forgiven For the sins written in my soul. Maybe then in deaths dark embrace ill be able to fly again . Please don't hold back let me know what you think edited by amara-rose on 3/22/2016
3/22/2016 7:06:50 AM
Feed back please	I've fallen from grace Crashed through the sky Landing crumpled where I lie My sins are what sent me tumbling Weighting down my soul. Wings ripped out Im bleeding from the scars they left behind. I've been cast out forever My golden halo no longer shines My sins forever haunt me Lies, darkness, and empty eyes. My fall from grace has left me hallow Wishing for the girl who used to fly Before the lies Before the wrong paths my feet followed My mortal sins confine me Tormenting me in the form of Darkness and daemons which attack me from all sides As they invade my mind. If not for being branded on my soul I'd just wash them all away Hoped to turn the water black Cleansing the shadows to light again Ill live amongst the sinners now Forced to fight and try to survive everyday It's my eternal punishment. Forced to wonder with those like me Other who have fallen because of their dark and secret sins Aging till we die. Maybe then I'll be forgiven For the sins written in my soul. Maybe then in deaths dark embrace ill be able to fly again .
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