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9/9/2020 2:51:05 PM
my first attempt at a sonnet.	once Joyful, resentful, demanding and loud The past is a place, where I felt defined Pain I wear it an invisible shroud I’ll take to my grave, unless I can find That time that I colored to lend it weight Bright little boxes, for fear we be late. Unthinkable that time could lose its hue Fading with it all I held to be true Time now weighs heavy, a mantle of lead. Time then so light so quickly was it spent Paying no heed to my disease so spread Till I was left, or was it me that went? Once was mother, but alas no more I have lost my voice, but inside I roar. Tansy888 on 9/9/2020 edited by Tansy888 on 9/9/2020 edited by Tansy888 on 9/9/2020 edited by Tansy888 on 9/9/2020
9/11/2020 11:26:51 AM
my first attempt at a sonnet.	Wow thank you so much for taking the time to write that! Immensely grateful. You're right I simply can't hear the stresses. Thanks so much for your belp
9/22/2020 5:57:01 PM
Criticise	My thoughts are racing limbs a pacing I feel the end is nigh. All alone in night unending Time a torturous lie. Brain fermenting, my thoughts fragmenting Shatter in glass shards. Body returned to gods uncaring I grasp my deck of cards. Fear is mounting, my hearts a pounding I know the end is nigh My eyes I raise can I be seeing Glass shards alight the sky? Hearts they are seeking, of those a weeping My choice is not to cry. These cards in sorrow had me keeping I care no longer why With care and love I gently shred The cards I did not sow The life I bled was tragically led The end, you'll never know.
9/26/2020 10:55:04 AM
Criticise	Thanks you so much
10/12/2020 11:00:37 AM
my first attempt at a sonnet.	Thank you so much for you time. Im getting the book.
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