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Free will vs destiny. Does it wpyl

9/22/2020 5:57:01 PM Tansy Roekaerts Posts: 5	My thoughts are racing limbs a pacing I feel the end is nigh. All alone in night unending Time a torturous lie. Brain fermenting, my thoughts fragmenting Shatter in glass shards. Body returned to gods uncaring I grasp my deck of cards. Fear is mounting, my hearts a pounding I know the end is nigh My eyes I raise can I be seeing Glass shards alight the sky? Hearts they are seeking, of those a weeping My choice is not to cry. These cards in sorrow had me keeping I care no longer why With care and love I gently shred The cards I did not sow The life I bled was tragically led The end, you'll never know.
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9/25/2020 9:35:24 AM Sheri Goddart Posts: 4	Tansy888 wrote: My thoughts are racing limbs a pacing I feel the end is nigh. All alone in night unending Time a torturous lie. Brain fermenting, my thoughts fragmenting Shatter in glass shards. Body returned to gods uncaring I grasp my deck of cards. Fear is mounting, my hearts a pounding I know the end is nigh My eyes I raise can I be seeing Glass shards alight the sky? Hearts they are seeking, of those a weeping My choice is not to cry. These cards in sorrow had me keeping I care no longer why With care and love I gently shred The cards I did not sow The life I bled was tragically led The end, you'll never know. It is so beautiful. I really like it
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9/26/2020 10:55:04 AM Tansy Roekaerts Posts: 5	Thanks you so much
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