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Cyndi Macmillan
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Cyndi MacMillan lives in a small town in Ontario that is home to North America’s largest working waterwheel. Her writing has appeared in notable Canadian literary journals and local newspapers. 

A Cruel Light is her debut gothic mystery (4/4/2023). She has been a Jill-of-all-trades, but for as long as she can remember, she has dreamt of being a novelist.  Hard work and the wonderful team at Crooked Lane Books have made that dream a reality.  Please note that her husband and daughter kindly keep her coffee mug filled when she is wrestling with a suspenseful chapter.   During a pandemic lockdown, the family adopted a rescue cat who chirps. 

When not writing, Cyndi enjoys reading Gothics, scrapbooking, and losing horribly at board games.  Works-in-progress include the second (and third) Annora Garde Mystery, a Canadian noir series, and a standalone horror mystery, so more often than not, Cyndi is writing.  She is a member of Crime Writers of Canada.

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WORK WORK WORK! WAY TO GO! AND HOW TO USE AN ELLIPSIS.

Blog Posted by Cyndi Macmillan: 5/16/2015 8:51:00 AM

Punctuation and poetry has been discussed quite a bit during the workshop.

Some choose to leave it out all together and have had their poems successfully published.

Some prefer to use it within a line, but do not end lines or stanzas with punctuation and have had their poems successfully published.

Some prefer to write their poems by adhering to exact syntax/punctuation usage and have had their poems successfully published.

The trick is to be consistent.

In my experience, editors (and readers) prefer that you use punctuation consistently. The same is true for spacing within lines.  They will check you for consistency; they want to see that you wrote your poem with thought/intent/purpose.  You know the voodoo that you do.

Some editors will have no problem with the occasional ellipsis, if used with proper intent.

And, yes, an ellipsis can be used to indicate a pause in thought.

BUT, editors prefer that you find another way to indicate that pause. They want to see that the poet understands spacing; lines left empty, gaps between words.  Even a period is a pause.  The words we use can indicate hesitancy, as well.  Each word (yes each) we choose to use in a poem sets the poem's mood.  We can easily change pacing by using tools other than an ellipsis.

However, sometimes an ellipsis can and does work to indicate either a pause or an unfinished thought.

How to use an ellipsis in a poem:

If the next line of your poem below connects to the one above -- the thought continues--it should be an emdash. 

If the next line after the ellipsis does not connect in context, has absolutely nothing to do with the previous line, then an ellipsis works.

I can show example, later, if you'd like.

 

The following is from this site

https://www.butte.edu/departments/cas/tipsheets/punctuation/dash_slash_ellipses_brackets.html

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TIP Sheet
THE DASH, SLASH, ELLIPSES, AND BRACKETS

The dash, slash, ellipses, and brackets are marks that serve specific purposes as indicated below.

THE DASH

The dash (–) is used to set off additional material within a sentence, often in order to emphasize it, to set off appositives that contain commas, or to indicate missing words. Sometimes confused with the hyphen, a dash comes between words as a form of division, whereas a hyphen generally joins words or parts of words to indicate a connection.

When typing, use two hyphens together without spaces to form a dash. Do not put a space before or after the dash. Some word-processing programs have a mark called an em-dash (longer than a hyphen), which can be used with no space before or after it. The word-processing program may form this automatically when two hyphens are typed together.

1. Use a dash to set off an interruption that is closely relevant to the sentence but not grammatically part of it, such as a list, illustration, restatement, summary, shift in thought or tone, or dramatic point.

Only one person wears that perfume–my mother.
Three of the people in my class–Tom, Dick, and Harry–refused to join the demonstration.
His feelings for Gwendolyn–he is madly in love with her–will never change.

  • Note: Although they can be used in similar situations, the dash and parentheses serve slightly different purposes. The dash is intended to emphasize supplemental information, whereas parentheses tend to understate it.

 

2. Use a dash to set off appositives that contain commas. (An appositive is a noun or noun phrase that immediately follows and renames a noun or pronoun and is usually surrounded by commas.)

Learning the mechanics–the complex, detailed structural components–of the English language is very difficult because the rules are often so inconsistent.

 

3. Use a dash to indicate an abruptly unfinished thought or remark. Do not include a period or comma after the dash.

She is a wonderful girl, but–
"Please help me before I–" she cried.

THE SLASH

The slash (/) is used to show a division between paired terms or between lines of poetry.

1. Use a slash to indicate that a choice can be made between paired or multiple terms. Do not use a space before or after the slash.

Catherine is taking the course pass/fail.

I am acting as the secretary/treasurer/social chairman since there are only two of us on the board.

2. Use a slash to indicate the division between lines of poetry quoted within a sentence. Add a space before and after the slash.

Wordsworth's lines, "There was a time when meadow, grove, and stream, / The earth, and every common sight, / To me did seem / Apparell'd in celestial light," begin one of his most beautiful poems.

ELLIPSES

Ellipses are made up of three periods with spaces between them (. . .) and are used to indicate that material is missing within a sentence or passage.

1. Use ellipses when material has been omitted from a direct (word-for-word) quotation, whether the omission is a word, phrase, or several sentences.

The absurdity of the situation makes me ponder Hamlet's query "whether ‘tis nobler in the mind to suffer . . . outrageous fortune."

2. Use ellipses to indicate a pause, hesitation, or unfinished thought.

The veterinarian spoke softly, "The poor horse is . . . was . . ."

3. Use a 4-period (closed) ellipsis at the end of a partial quote that is nonetheless a complete grammatical sentence (thus including a period at the end of a 3-period ellipsis).

Original sentence:

I have a weathered copy of that photograph in my own personal collection.

Partial quotation using a closed ellipsis:

I have a weathered copy of that photograph . . . .

Note: When used within a sentence, place a space before the first period and after the last period of ellipses. If a mark of punctuation occurs right before the ellipses in the sentence, include the punctuation and follow it with one space before the first period of the ellipses. Do not use ellipses to begin a quotation.

BRACKETS

Brackets [] are used to insert comments or information into direct quotations, to identify errors in text, and to enclose parenthetical information within a parenthetical passage. Although similar to parentheses, brackets and parentheses are used for specifically different purposes.

1. Use brackets to insert comments or clarifying information within a direct quotation. The brackets indicate the parenthetical information is not included in the original text of the quotation itself.

"That disaster [February's earthquake] devastated communities for thousands of square miles."

 

2. Use brackets to highlight errors in the original text of quoted material by immediately following the error with the Latin word sic ("thus") enclosed in brackets. This addition acknowledges the original error and lets it stand as written.

"Words of great excitement should be followed by an explanation [sic] point."

3. Use brackets to enclose parenthetical information within material that is already enclosed in parentheses, in order to avoid confusion.

Elizabeth served in the role of president (an "honorary" [unpaid] position) because she was sincerely concerned about changing the direction of the organization.

 



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Date: 5/17/2015 2:11:00 PM
Thanks for posting this Cyndi. I'm learning to use ellipsis to control not only what I'm saying and how, but also the reader's breath, the feel of the poem...
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Date: 5/16/2015 10:38:00 AM
Thanks for this, Cyndi-- I really better make a copy of this, mainly because I can be so indifferent (errm lazy too?) in using punctuation, and mainly go with what I feel like using. I mainly go by instinct, not saying though that my instincts are any good. At all. Honest to goodness truth, I am a very, very lazy writer, and don't go really into the nuances of grammar and punctuation, aside from those that have already been ingrained in me from before. Btw, I replied to your comment on my write. I'm thinking, really thinking on what to do. I really don't want to impose too much, understanding how busy you all are.
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Date: 5/16/2015 1:16:00 PM
Thank you Cyndi, for calling me youngster! Haha, gotta tell you though, I don't think I am that much younger than you are? I'm just really childish. take your time, no worries about me please. Hugs back and have fun!
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Date: 5/16/2015 11:27:00 AM
:D Youngster, you have got years and years to figure all that out. Me? LOL... I gotta move it or lose it! Will try to get their .. but not til Tuesday, probs. Family time, holiday weekend, time with my home-crew. HUGS. No rush, think, ponder, chew, stew... all is good, really and truly.

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