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Cyndi MacMillan lives in a small town in Ontario that is home to North America’s largest working waterwheel. Her writing has appeared in notable Canadian literary journals and local newspapers. 

A Cruel Light is her debut gothic mystery (4/4/2023). She has been a Jill-of-all-trades, but for as long as she can remember, she has dreamt of being a novelist.  Hard work and the wonderful team at Crooked Lane Books have made that dream a reality.  Please note that her husband and daughter kindly keep her coffee mug filled when she is wrestling with a suspenseful chapter.   During a pandemic lockdown, the family adopted a rescue cat who chirps. 

When not writing, Cyndi enjoys reading Gothics, scrapbooking, and losing horribly at board games.  Works-in-progress include the second (and third) Annora Garde Mystery, a Canadian noir series, and a standalone horror mystery, so more often than not, Cyndi is writing.  She is a member of Crime Writers of Canada.

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A HAIKU SHABU SHABU PUB - SHOP TALK & SMALL TALK.

Blog Posted by Cyndi Macmillan: 6/9/2017 8:07:00 PM

Welcome to Soup’s Shabu Shabu.  Sake is on the house, tonight.  Be careful on overindulgence ;)

(You may stray off topic, but no sneaking poison fish into each other’s hotpots!  Karaoke always welcome.  What happens at the bar stays at the bar.  Unless someone dances on the bar and then na na na na na, I’m telling-- and taking videos! )

I am not a great haiku poet.  I am not even a good haiku poet.  But I do love both reading and writing haiku.  Writing haiku is not only about being in the moment, but also about seeing right into that moment.  Maybe, the poet sees a parallel to what is happening or to what s/he is experiencing.  Maybe, the poet has identified something significant, self-actualizing or even something humorous.  Haiku is about emotion and thought, a kind of awakening or realization.  

Some of you may be new to haiku or you were wrongly taught in school that haiku is a poem that is written in three lines with a syllable count of 5 in the first line, 7 in the second line and 5 in the third line. 

Haiku can be written in one line, two lines, three lines or more.  It can have less than 17 syllables (in fact most haiku currently being published is quite short.

Most haiku is written as two grammatically linked lines and one line which is not linked grammatically.  This third line contrasts/juxtaposes the other two lines, but it may also add a nuance to the other two lines to give an aha moment. 

Good haiku gives the reader a sense of time and place.  In a tiny poem of 6 to 17 words, the reader can feel right there, experiencing that minutiae of life or nature.

As poets, we deceive ourselves that this is simple.  But is it really?

Here are a few haiku I’ve chosen to share... I find them totally engrossing.  BIG in their smallness.

Now, we are really only supposed to read one or two haiku a day.. and I’m sharing eight... so you may want to scan or just focus on one or two or if you want to gobble the bunch up, I wouldn’t blame you. 

Tell me what you see.  What do you like.  Does one speak to you?  Did you feel the aha moment?

 

(the following haiku are shared here for review and study purposes only and this blog will be deleted in a few weeks.)

 

unshelled pistachios

my father

on marriage

 

Tiffany Shaw-Diaz

 

 

burnt coffee
the taste of nothing
left to say

Glenn G. Coats

 

sunset –

the cow’s tail

conducting flies

 

By Hugh O’Donnell (Ireland

 

 

morning frost
she curls up
even smaller

By Anna Maris

 

 

empty beach

the rain fills

her prints

 

By Alexey Andreev

 

full moon

ghost crabs

race their shadows

 

By Jeff Hoagland

 

 

flock of white doves

lace the sky . . .

my grandmother's doilies

 

By Wendy Visser

 

 

aging ...

getting the freckles

i wanted in childhood

 

By Charlotte Digregorio



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Date: 6/11/2017 12:17:00 AM
Continued... Senryu on the other hand - came about in the 18th century and has the same format but was created by the Poet with a pen name Senryu. It became popular among the common people and references human nature in a satirical or cynical fashion. Tanka meaning 'Short Song' has 5 lines of 5,7,5,7,7 syllables. It has been in existence for over 1300 years. It was a form of lyrical love songs passed in message notes discreetly by usually unattached maidens to the ones they were attracted. A Tanka has to be about romance. ...Maria
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Date: 6/11/2017 10:48:00 AM
However, even in Japan, contemporary haiku is being written and published, regardless of 'strict' views. Poetry for the people by the people is still (thank GOD) very much alive.
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Date: 6/11/2017 10:47:00 AM
Yes. We've heard this before. Thanks
Date: 6/11/2017 12:09:00 AM
Owing to our Japanese associations, we have been studying Haiku and Japanese under experts for some time now. Haiku, which was made great by Basho in the 17th century is an unrhymed Japanese poetic form in strict discipline consisting of 17 syllables arranged in three lines of 5, 7, and 5 syllables respectively. In Haiku, as taught in Japanese elementary schools, the first two lines must reference nature and the seasons (not be humorous). The third line will qualify the first two lines - Any deviation of the format is considered inappropriate and frowned upon in Japanese tradition and will not be considered. It may even be seen as an insult to the language...Maria See more on this -
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Date: 6/11/2017 10:51:00 AM
I am guessing if haiku is taught in Japanese schools... then it is being written in Japanese, so the syllable count is more on par with haiku origins? An interesting article.... www.nahaiwrimo.com/home/why-no-5-7-5
Date: 6/10/2017 6:56:00 AM
family day... after a wet, cold spring, finally its sunny and hot and gorgeous. Will be in and out all day. I'm glad my chums have found a haiku or two that they connected with... Cheers. Cyndi
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Date: 6/10/2017 1:22:00 AM
Four only In order of preference..Hugh/Charlotte/AlexeyAnna
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Date: 6/10/2017 6:22:00 AM
I really liked Hugh's as well. Everybody has their personal tastes and I made sure to put up a mix of haiku. I think its not only about the style/voice of the haiku, but also what the reader finds in them. My great grandmother tatted lace... so the doily one spoke personally to me, hit me the hardest on an emotional level (I had her in my life til I was 15)
Date: 6/9/2017 11:33:00 PM
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Date: 6/10/2017 6:13:00 AM
:)
Date: 6/9/2017 10:47:00 PM
OK, since I am just alone here right now, let me go and hog another table :p! Then I am going (for now, gotta go grab real lunch, etc etc) .... now for the haiku that stood out for me (Finally!! You say!) For me, it'd have to be the 1st, 3rd & 5th... sorry if I won't expound too much now...I'll only touch on the 3rd & 5th ones here though-- the 3rd one made me smile big time, loved that conductor line and the 5th one, just because it is raining here, it was something I can relate to somewhat, even if I am not on a beach right now, but it brought me there. I like it when the piece just takes you on that personal place. Kampai!
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Date: 6/12/2017 2:24:00 AM
oh and yes, making sushi. I know you don't like sushi... but have you ever tried making sushi? I find it very fun!
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Date: 6/12/2017 2:23:00 AM
Yes, tuning out and zoning (and/or honing) in ... Closest I can get to moments such as that is when I am with food (doiinks, food! again, food!). There are moments for me when I just love being in the wet market (yes, fish guts and all); that and selecting each fruit or veggie; prepping, cooking. And yes working with chocolate. I sometimes get into this zone when I am with chocolate, but yes, it's been too long since I've worked with it. *sighs*
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Date: 6/10/2017 6:11:00 AM
I think it's about being in a haiku-state-of-mind that is difficult FOR ME. To quiet all the outside influences and see and hear and be aware of what is around me instead of worrying about what is going on in my world. Can the layering, depth, come naturally? Yes!
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Date: 6/10/2017 6:06:00 AM
:DDD I was a bad hostess. I put up the blog and then spent two hours in the kitchen... then, too tired, I went to bed. Sorry for leaving you alone, but it looks like you still had a good time. I love my fellow ramblers! We must form a rambers club, one day ...
Date: 6/9/2017 10:08:00 PM
Please allow me to be the mushroom in this hotpot, Cyndi. A toss up for if I'll be the shiitake or enoki, but I'm inclined to be the former. Warning: I will major ramble & jump around here, since so many thoughts popped into my head, even if it's related very, very slightly, and knowing myself, I'd still want to squeeze them all in, esp since I have too much to do but still want to type something here ;p. 1: Enjoying this shabu-shabu, goes well with my Japanese dinner for Fridays straight now. Last week, had ramen, & last night cooked sukiyaki & ebi tempura. Darn, now I want some sashimi & sushi, haven't had my fix yet. 2: Speaking of, do you guys in Canada have Bullet Train Sushi? It was my first time to encounter one in Cerritos & oh my goodness, it was the coolest thing for me-- sushi being served on a Bullet Train was too cool! We don't have that here yet cont'd
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Date: 6/12/2017 1:31:00 AM
btw here's a link to the Magic Touch Bullet Train Sushi-- my 4 year old nephew was so smitten by that train ;) https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Ho-Ze0wwu70
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Date: 6/12/2017 1:27:00 AM
Again, thank you Cyndi for looking into it-- Interesting suggestion,I will try to play around with that (mainly the syllables, I think it required 5/7/5 before) and write different versions soon... I guess eating sushi can be an acquired thing-- I even have a shirt (was wearing it yesterday, actually. It says, "You are what you eat. So I am sushi.") oh, teriyaki, yummy! I love Japanese food.
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Date: 6/11/2017 10:33:00 AM
Thank you very much for replying and commenting about the haiku, Cyndi & also for your suggestions :) I really appreciate it. Only thing is I am going to be a very bad guest & eat and run. I will try my best to be back here and give a more decent reply. I'm sorry :(
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Date: 6/10/2017 6:53:00 AM
PS-I don't like sushi. I have tried it because my niece is a huge fan... but it's not for me. Teriyaki, however, mmmmm... ramen is delish to me. No Bullet Train, here, yet.
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Date: 6/10/2017 6:39:00 AM
I like the concepts/realizations within each haiku very much. I do wonder if you could tighten each however... let the haiku be finished by the reader? and what thoughts? Don't do this, but this is just showing a different way to see it: trees try to sway me// as thoughts of us swirl --// lone leaf on my shoe
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Date: 6/9/2017 10:42:00 PM
Sorry, oops, I am not going for the small talk right now, obviously. You mentioned the 5-7-5 -- *ding* chalk me up as one of those erroneously taught students. But again, speaking of that syllable count can I ask a favor? Would love what you, Chris or anybody would think of some of my 5-7-5 haiku? They're part of a haibun though & I wrote it for Charlotte's contest. If you have time, I'm intrigued what you think of any of them, if they can stand independent of the entire piece. Thank you... adding the link here. I'll go right now & develop some callouses, haha . Seriously thank you if you do read it https://www.poetrysoup.com/poem/where_barren_branches_touch_newborn_leaves_727889
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Date: 6/9/2017 10:35:00 PM
back again to the hot & cold part... for me, writing haiku can definitely be so complex, so measured (kinda not literally) and not seem what it is at first glance. Have you ever played Monument Valley? It's this game I recently downloaded & goodness, it got me hooked. It is a puzzle/logic game, wherein you have to figure out the lead character's path so she can reach the goal. Beautifully rendered in my opinion. Check it out if you have time. I find haiku to be this puzzle, wherein each pc./ word be carefully thought out (see how I contradict myself, ha vs to those times that I just close to blurt them out like burps or hmm belches?; like you just have to let them out & when you do, it is so oddly satisfying <--- goodness, sorry for my analogy)
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Date: 6/9/2017 10:15:00 PM
3: What you said about your thoughts on haiku here, as well as about you writing them, is what I also feel. For me, it's a bit hard to explain, but I mostly go by feel when I read haiku. I can be so dense to the technicalities of it, but there are just those times when I read some & just Know, that that is what haiku was probably created for. Wherein it just encapsulates that moment. and yes, I will get around to sharing which haiku here stood out for me, eventually. Basta, I get into this weird zone when I read haiku 4: What you said about haiku as being deceptively simple. For me, I can run so hot & cold on this. I have gone on some haiku "streaks" before-- in both reading and writing & for me, it is when I overthink it that it truly feels so heavy- forced. But I have written "haiku" in less than 5, even 2,1 minute/s and they feel more like haiku to me than the other ones. BUT of course, I am only banking on what I (in bold, italic) feel, so that's not much weight. doiinks

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