Debbie Guzzi
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Deborah Guzzi writes full time. Her third book, The Hurricane is available through Prolific Press. https://prolificpress.com/bookstore/prolific-books-c-12/the-hurricane-by-deborah-guzzi-p-151.html Her poetry appears in Allegro, Artificium, Shooter, & The Foxglove Journal in the UK, Subterranean Blue, Existere, The Ekphrastic Review, Scarlet Leaf Review & Subterranean Blue Poetry, Canada - Tincture, Australia - mgv2>publishing, France Cha: Asian Review, China - Vine Leaves Literary Journal, Australia - The Scarlet Leaf Review - Greece, Ribbons, pioneertown, Sounding Review, Bacopa Literary Review, The Aurorean, Liquid Imagination, The Tishman Review, Page & Spine & others in the USA. 

The Crown Polished

Blog Posted by Debbie Guzzi: 2/6/2014 6:24:00 PM

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Date: 2/10/2014 2:43:00 PM
Dee hates the use of the word yonder in my verse 7 let's think of how to change that line!! ;) I don't mind. - Does anyone else use that word but me?
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Painted Hunter
Date: 2/11/2014 12:15:00 PM
I use it
Date: 2/10/2014 12:23:00 PM
COOL!
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Date: 2/10/2014 7:13:00 AM
I forgot to say thanks for reading and considering my work for your contest..Glad that you got it finished and laid to rest..Sara
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Date: 2/9/2014 5:03:00 PM
I build a warm blaze upon the bare earth. Then, cook up some vittles: vermin and fern. A rugged fortress lest poachers return – My bloody blazer, now, filthy fivefold! I am shivering cold; the fire won’t burn. I stealthily creep seeking higher ground. With every fear a worn mind can churn, I crawl beneath some trees; more wood is found. Two bundles, brushwood: birch twigs, logs, to burn. While feeding my hunger, I loosen my girth. Then, see a mineshaft; my hope starts to yearn. Distantly hidden, completely unmanned. Through the north woods I come, my bow in hand.
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Date: 2/9/2014 4:59:00 PM
Not naked! You got me, Debbie! I DO NOT GET JOKES! lol I did rewrite sonnet 7 I couldn't leave it with the frozen naked hunter. Here is a new one. Is this the correct rhyme scheme. ababcdcdefefgg. Enjoy. I'll post my new one below and in your contest. Well, I tried...twice! **************************
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Dane Ann Smith-Johnsen
Date: 2/9/2014 5:01:00 PM
I must build a shelter, to fight off the cold. A rugged fortress lest poachers return – My bloody blazer, now, filthy fivefold! I am shivering cold; the fire won’t burn. I stealthily creep seeking higher ground. With every fear a worn mind can churn, I crawl beneath some trees; more wood is found. Two bundles, brushwood: birch twigs, logs, to burn.
Date: 2/9/2014 10:04:00 AM
Sonnet 4: omit commas on l. 2, 5; l. 8 "breath" or "breaths"; l. 12 change "looses" to "loosed", line is 11 syllables. Sonnet 5: end of l. 5, 6, 7, 9, need punctuated. Sonnet 6: l. 2, 4, 5, 6, 8, 10, 11, 13 need punctuated; l. 2 comma after "turn"; l. 5 comma after "uncontrolled"; l. 14 omit comma. Sonnet 7: l. 3, 5, 9, 11, 13 need punctuated; l. 3 comma after "rises"; l. 8 perhaps a comma after "window". This crown is looking awesome; a few technicalities worked through and she'll be a beauty!
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Date: 2/9/2014 9:47:00 AM
I agree, Isaiah....(pertaining to 3)
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James Marshall Goff
Date: 2/10/2014 7:14:00 AM
done!
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James Marshall Goff
Date: 2/9/2014 12:16:00 PM
My droid won't let me scroll all my poems to choose my sonnet....TPS tells me to scroll down the right side...but there is nothing there...I will try on apple at work tomorrow...
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Debbie Guzzi
Date: 2/9/2014 11:00:00 AM
Please post your verse in the contest as requested now.
Date: 2/9/2014 9:34:00 AM
Sorry I couldn't be around for much of the voting. I have been having problems with the website, and also with my internet connection due to snow and cloudy weather. Here is a few suggestions for polishing. Sonnet 2: maybe "lives" in l. 8 and a "." in l.12. Sonnet 3: omit commas on l. 8, 9, 10.
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Debbie Guzzi
Date: 2/9/2014 10:59:00 AM
I took another pass at it Isaiah, I'm tired of playing with it we can not use it in its entirety for anything so no worries. PLEASE post your verse as requested in the contest now.
Date: 2/8/2014 1:29:00 PM
lOOKS LIKE i SWITCHED TO MANY LINES AROUND AT THE LAST MINUTE...SORRY. I wanted to participate, but Had way to much going on with the newer car that I purchased, a 2010HHR needing a new motor one week after buying it and the IWS, the maintenance warranty company backing out of their contract...ie refusing to fix it...claiming it was pre-existing, but it drove without noise, etc when I bought it. Meanwhile, I had to price motors, compare installation prices and all of that. I still don't have a car to drive. Thank God for the old farm truck. Sorry I let you down.
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Debbie Guzzi
Date: 2/8/2014 1:42:00 PM
Dane you still get a second place win for trying and I really appreciate it with all you have going on!
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Dane Ann Smith-Johnsen
Date: 2/8/2014 1:34:00 PM
PSS For future reference, What was the end rhyme pattern for this. I did notice that it did NOT fit the regular sonnet pattern...I was trying to follow others posted here. Did you enter my verse in some contest?
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Dane Ann Smith-Johnsen
Date: 2/8/2014 1:30:00 PM
PS I did NOT realize this was for a contest. I thought it was for fun! Or for some magazine you were going to send it to. OOPS!
Date: 2/8/2014 9:22:00 AM
Ok by me. Lets use yours. Joyce
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Date: 2/8/2014 2:34:00 AM
The last line of both 7's do not match Caleb's last line....
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Date: 2/8/2014 12:24:00 AM
I am worried about the three men laying there maybe bleeding to death. They may be poachers but they could have been hungry and needed game. I don't see how we can just leave them laying there while we're getting warm ourselves and say it is finished. None of the verses finish the story Joyce.
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Debbie Guzzi
Date: 2/8/2014 6:45:00 AM
mine did Joyce
Date: 2/7/2014 9:59:00 PM
Well I don't think it has completed the story. That is why I was trying to get some action into verse 6 in order for the story to come to a satisfactory ending. Sara did a great job. Joyce
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Debbie Guzzi
Date: 2/7/2014 10:04:00 PM
you don't thing whose verse 7 hasn't completed the story, Joyce
Date: 2/7/2014 8:25:00 PM
I like yours too...
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Date: 2/7/2014 6:03:00 PM
Bet, an idea, simply include yours as an entry to the contest.. you said something about everyone being able to read alternate story lines? Just give yourself a HM and tada... everyone can read yours as well.Ah, re-read your comment. We're on the same page...lol.. finally. Do something special for yourself this weekend... bookstore? or savor a cappuccino somewhere.. sprinkles and all. Or simply cuddle smoky, write something just for you, light some candles. Love ya.
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Date: 2/7/2014 1:18:00 PM
HERE IS MINE, DEBBIE. I must build a shelter, to fight off the cold. Will naked exposure bring death around? No! Fearless courage fights off ill fate’s hold. My naked body screaming without sound – Alertly I creep seeking some safe ground. With every fear a worn mind can churn, I crawl beneath some trees where wood is found. Two bundles, brushwood: birch twigs, logs, to burn. I build a warm blaze upon the bare ground. Then, cook up some vittles: vermin and fern. While feeding my hunger, I look all around. I see a mineshaft; it’s good fortune’s turn! Refreshed and full with courage, by strength fanned, Through the north woods I come, my bow in hand.
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Date: 2/7/2014 12:02:00 PM
In sonnet 6, I think there might be a typo. Surge OF strength rather than Surge I strength? Also death's devious plan instead of deaths devious plan?
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Date: 2/7/2014 11:42:00 AM
Okies GOT Dane Ann ..she's on it! IS that OK now Caleb?
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Dane Ann Smith-Johnsen
Date: 2/7/2014 1:16:00 PM
Do I post it here, Deb?
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Painted Hunter
Date: 2/7/2014 12:19:00 PM
Haha...yep
Date: 2/7/2014 11:08:00 AM
No prob Caleb we still have to look at Dane Ann's I tried reaching her in soup mail & email & Facebook, no answer so far.
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Date: 2/7/2014 11:00:00 AM
It's all come together nicely, I think. One problem, though....you gotta take out the part about the trail mix...please...I like the sonnet, but the trail mix has GOT to go...I do bring a little homeade deer jerky sometimes...never that nasty excuse for jerky they sell at stores..haha..but never, under any circumstance, will you find me with a bag of trail mix...;)....EVER
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