Jan Allison Poet Couplet

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Your Unforgivable Behaviour

For almost two years you’ve been out of my life
Your mercenary actions caused me heartache and strife

I’ve worked so hard for everything around me
Yet the house where you live you got for free

I held five part-time jobs so I could pay my own way
Yet in thirty years you’ve not worked one single day  

You cheat and you lie with such accuracy
All you ever think about is ME ME ME

Well honey I’ve just got one thing to say
If you arrived at my door I’d turn you away

I NEVER ever want to set eyes on you again
Your behaviour makes me think you’re insane!

chosen word 3  - Unforgivable 

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09-17-17

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Kevin Shaw September 24, 2017 at 4:37 PM Well written Jan, I know such a person myself, 40 years old and never worked, Congratulations on your win. Regards, Kevin Jan Allison September 24, 2017 at 4:42 PM It touches a nerve Kevin especially when they are better off financially than many other people who actually work and don't live off the state:-(

Seren Roberts September 24, 2017 at 4:22 PM Congratulations Jan you deserve this top spot with this great write.....Seren Jan Allison September 24, 2017 at 4:28 PM Thanks Seren i was just checking the comment was really for me lol:-) hugs Jan xx

Subimal Sinha-Roy September 24, 2017 at 12:46 AM Congratulations on your great win, Jan. Jan Allison September 24, 2017 at 8:22 AM Thanks so much Subimal:-) hugs Jan xx

Heidi Sands September 23, 2017 at 2:01 PM Congratulations for your win Jan! :) Jan Allison September 24, 2017 at 8:22 AM Thanks so much Heidi:-) hugs Jan xx

Lin Lane September 23, 2017 at 1:17 PM Waayyy 2 Go! Recognition for a great poem. Congratulations! Jan Allison September 24, 2017 at 8:23 AM Some things just have to be written Lin!:-) hugs jan xx

Paul Callus September 23, 2017 at 1:11 PM Such people do exist...they are parasites of our society. I enjoyed the assertive way you went about this! Congratulations on a merited podium finish. Hugs // paul Jan Allison September 24, 2017 at 8:23 AM Thanks so much Paul, you are so correct in your comment:-) hugs Jan xx

Joseph May September 23, 2017 at 1:06 PM So sad when it's family...Congrats on your win Jan Allison September 24, 2017 at 8:24 AM Its sad whoever it is Jospeh but when its family it really is terrible to see:-( hugs jan xx

John Hamilton September 23, 2017 at 12:18 PM Such a truthful write Jan describing so many people, congrats on another worthy win! Jan Allison September 24, 2017 at 8:24 AM Thanks so much John I think this may touch a nerve with other people:-) hugs Jan xx

Eve Roper September 23, 2017 at 11:38 AM Back to Congratulate you on your win hugs Eve Jan Allison September 24, 2017 at 8:26 AM Thanks so much Eve:-) hugs Jan xx

Roy Pett September 23, 2017 at 10:18 AM Congratulations on your well deserved win Jan, exceptional poem. :))) Jan Allison September 24, 2017 at 8:26 AM Thanks so much Roy I'm glad you enjoyed:-) hugs Jan xx

John Michaels September 23, 2017 at 9:30 AM Powerful piece, Jan!! Congratulations on your First Place win! All the best, John. Jan Allison September 24, 2017 at 8:44 AM Thanks so much John:-) hugs Jan xx

Constance La France September 23, 2017 at 9:04 AM Jan, congratulations on your win in my contest, your poem touched me deeply, jealous people are evil people, best to be avoided, well done! Jan Allison September 24, 2017 at 8:44 AM You are so right there Constance and the hurt they can cause cannot be measured:-( hugs jan xx

Dale Gregory Cozart September 23, 2017 at 8:42 AM Congrats on your win, Jan! Jan Allison September 24, 2017 at 8:46 AM Thanks so much Dale:-) hugs Jan xx

Arthur Vaso September 19, 2017 at 7:22 PM There is a lot of unforgivable behavior everywhere these days. Some even claim is a "side" LOL Nice poem expressing these sentiments. Jan Allison September 20, 2017 at 3:41 AM Yes I see so many sides taken but of course there are three sides to an argument ( I'm still trying to work that one out lol) :-)hugs jan xx

Pat Adams September 18, 2017 at 5:22 PM Good write. Total opposite end of the spectrum, but well constructed and gets the meaning across. Glad I'm not on the brunt end of that one!!....80)......Patrick Jan Allison September 18, 2017 at 5:26 PM I do like to surprise with the more serious side to my pen Pat:-) hugs Jan xx

Roy Pett September 18, 2017 at 7:16 AM Wow Jan, wasn't expecting this amazing piece, this certainly overflows with emotion, great poem, GL on contest. :)) Jan Allison September 18, 2017 at 8:04 AM I never know what my muse will come up with and I do surprise people with a more serious side to my poems:-) hugs jan xx

Arthur Vaso September 17, 2017 at 11:23 PM I hear you, great write Jan, sadly some people also fall for those types. I have seen it right here! Jan Allison September 18, 2017 at 3:50 AM Yes me too Arthur and I hate being lied to when you have it literally in black and white what someone says - people forget the internet leaves and indelible footprint:-( hugs jan xx

Russell Sivey September 17, 2017 at 4:34 PM What a fantastic write my friend! I believe this to be so true Jan! I think Constance will enjoy this incredible poem! I really loved reading your amazing piece here this afternoon, Great Work!! Jan Allison September 17, 2017 at 5:26 PM Sadly not everyone in life is what they portray themselves to be and you can get a nasty surprise when they show their true colours:-( hugs jan xx

Eve Roper September 17, 2017 at 3:49 PM Wonderful power of emotional words,,, I am glad I know you somewhat that I know this poem is not about you... :) Luck in the contest a winner already Hugs Eve ~`* Jan Allison September 17, 2017 at 5:25 PM Thanks Eve I never know what my muse will come up with next:-) hugs jan xx

Gordon Mcconnell September 17, 2017 at 3:35 PM Smashing piece Jan real good penning with strong emotions displayed. Jan Allison September 17, 2017 at 5:24 PM Thanks so much Gordon:-) hugs jan xx

Ilene Bauer September 17, 2017 at 3:23 PM wow! i ever would have picked you as the writer of this poem, jan, but it's nice to surprise your readers once in a while. well done! good luck in the contest... Jan Allison September 17, 2017 at 5:24 PM I never know where my muse will take me Ilene but i do surprise with a more serious style from time to time:-0 hugs jan xx

Maureen McGreavy Pigeon Tart September 17, 2017 at 12:50 PM Wham! Succinct xomo! Jan Allison September 17, 2017 at 12:56 PM Thanks Mo:-) I do surprise people with a more serious poem that is rather out of character but I never know where my muse will take me:-) hugs jan xx

Eileen Manassian September 17, 2017 at 12:25 PM That's quite the write, Jan. Some people seem to get ahead in life even when they shouldn't be. It's best to stay away from people who bring you grief. Good luck in the contest. Hugs Jan Allison September 17, 2017 at 12:58 PM You are so right Eileen and sadly their lies are so convincing they believe them to be true:-( hugs jan xx

Anne-Lise Andresen September 17, 2017 at 12:00 PM - I try to avoid egocentric people, Jan - They make life miserable - You have described the person alive, great done - Good luck in the contest :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :) Jan Allison September 17, 2017 at 12:06 PM Thanks Anne Lise its so sad when a person shows their true colours and it's not particularly nice to see the real side of that person:-( hugs jan xx