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"recently scenes of early life have stolen into my mind, like breezes blown" - Samuel Taylor Coleridge I walk the shore alone beside your voice How alive it seems, chiming with the wind Its chant as ancient as the sea Here, the cliff where we first saw the sea Here you proposed with a shake in your voice My whispered 'Yes' snatched by the willful wind Your last wish: your ashes, set free on the wind The waves break sadly, forlorn from the sea As I turn to the pull of yesterday's voice Your voice on the wind lures me to the sea 10/18/22 Past Memories, 'T' Form contest Sponsor: Constance La France Form: Tritina

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Date: 12/10/2022 6:50:00 AM
Special time, and hope the memory brings it all back.
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Date: 11/12/2022 12:53:00 AM
Michelle, such and emotional Tritina, it touched my heart and congratulations on your placement in my contest, Writing Challenge - Past Memories- "T" Forms, and of course I like the quote, well done !
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Michelle Faulkner
Date: 11/23/2022 10:40:00 PM
Thank you for your comment and the placement in your contest, I appreciate both~
Date: 11/5/2022 10:02:00 PM
The wind and the seashore are so inextricably linked, you use each to weave a tapestry of beauty and melancholy. Memories of that momentous day linger, yet emptiness puts up a quarrel and sadness prevails. Thankfully a fictional write, still it packs an emotional punch. Love your final statement. Great use of Tritina form... going in my faves ~ John
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Michelle Faulkner
Date: 11/6/2022 9:00:00 PM
I try, even in the fictional poems, to convey the truth of the emotion, so I will imagine what that moment would be like, I guess it is the dark side of my poetry. Your insights are always so introspective and gives me a fresh perspective - thank you for the compliment of the fave! p.s. this was actually my first tritina~
Date: 11/1/2022 11:39:00 AM
"Alone beside your voice," "pull of yesterday's voice," "snatched by the willful wind!" Your poetic use of words and innovative imagery always leaves me breathless with awe Michelle! Not only are they so imaginative but they always perfectly express the emotion of your poems. Congratulations on your win! Blessings of comfort.
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Michelle Faulkner
Date: 11/1/2022 8:21:00 PM
This is actually (thankfully) a work of fiction, but am so pleased you enjoyed it, your encouraging comments always make me smile, thank you Sam~
Date: 11/1/2022 6:22:00 AM
Oh Michelle, this is such a poignant and touching write! I love many of your poems, this is another exquisite one in a beautiful matching form. Congratulations on your well-deserved top win. Love ~ Mala
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Michelle Faulkner
Date: 11/1/2022 8:20:00 PM
I am so touched by your kind words, Mala, I enjoy your poems as well~
Date: 11/1/2022 3:07:00 AM
Indeed, very touching writing in the form of Tritina. Congratulations!
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Michelle Faulkner
Date: 11/1/2022 8:19:00 PM
Appreciate it, thank you~
Date: 10/30/2022 4:14:00 AM
lovely expressive piece
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Michelle Faulkner
Date: 11/1/2022 8:19:00 PM
Thank you Yolanda
Date: 10/21/2022 3:13:00 PM
An emotional write to read Michelle. Sad but conveyed through the readers heart...
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Michelle Faulkner
Date: 10/21/2022 8:51:00 PM
Thank you, michael, for your visit and comment~
Date: 10/21/2022 8:59:00 AM
Michelle, So very poignant and lovely. I especially loved...I walk the shore alone beside your voice...Your poem a winner for sure!
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Michelle Faulkner
Date: 10/21/2022 11:38:00 AM
Thank you, Ann, for your visit and the positive comment, I appreciate it~
Date: 10/20/2022 12:42:00 PM
Your poem oozes atmosphere and drips with emotion Michelle. I can almost smell taste and hear the sea and sea air. A great read. Cheers - Gary
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Michelle Faulkner
Date: 10/21/2022 11:38:00 AM
I too love the smell and taste of the beach and sea air, thanks for your comment, Gary
Date: 10/20/2022 6:41:00 AM
A beautifully romantic poem Michelle. Just lovely. :)
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Michelle Faulkner
Date: 10/21/2022 11:36:00 AM
Thank you so much~
Date: 10/19/2022 3:32:00 PM
you both are hale and youthful yet ... so this is good poetry (not biographical, except in romance). Always a treat when you write/post/ communicate poetically. Paz and shalom-shalom, Michelle.
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Michelle Faulkner
Date: 10/19/2022 8:06:00 PM
Thankfully, not biographical! Thank you and peace to you also Anil~
Date: 10/19/2022 11:12:00 AM
Whispers on the wind, indeed! Enjoyed, Michelle! Aloha!
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Michelle Faulkner
Date: 10/19/2022 2:24:00 PM
Thanks, Rico, hope you're well~
Date: 10/18/2022 8:19:00 PM
This clutches at the soul as a blood sucking leech. So poignant and equally romantic .... ! The concluding line though not vociferous speaks in a thousand tongues. Into my FAVE...! All the best dear Michelle.
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Michelle Faulkner
Date: 10/19/2022 2:23:00 PM
I am very flattered Valsa, thank you for your encouraging comment and the fave~
Date: 10/18/2022 6:10:00 PM
This is absolutely stunning, as a poem and as a love story. Sad but deeply emotive, gl int the contest. It's a winner for me, Michelle,
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Michelle Faulkner
Date: 10/19/2022 2:23:00 PM
Thank you kindly for your comment, I appreciate it
Date: 10/18/2022 4:02:00 PM
Your ending line spells the essence of your poem, Michelle. Heartfelt and emotive write--skillfully delivered. Best to you.
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Michelle Faulkner
Date: 10/18/2022 4:06:00 PM
Thank you for your kind words, Vijay~
Date: 10/18/2022 3:49:00 PM
beautiful ~
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Michelle Faulkner
Date: 10/18/2022 3:54:00 PM
Thank you, Line, appreciate it