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Your Last Wish

"recently scenes of early life have stolen into my mind, like breezes blown" - Samuel Taylor Coleridge


I walk the shore alone beside your voice
How alive it seems, chiming with the wind
Its chant as ancient as the sea

Here, the cliff where we first saw the sea
Here you proposed with a shake in your voice
My whispered 'Yes' snatched by the willful wind

Your last wish: your ashes, set free on the wind
The waves break sadly, forlorn from the sea
As I turn to the pull of yesterday's voice

Your voice on the wind lures me to the sea

10/18/22

Past Memories, 'T' Form contest
Sponsor: Constance La France
Form: Tritina

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Paul Bell Date: 12/10/2022 6:50:00 AM Special time, and hope the memory brings it all back. Login to Reply

Constance La France Date: 11/12/2022 12:53:00 AM Michelle, such and emotional Tritina, it touched my heart and congratulations on your placement in my contest, Writing Challenge - Past Memories- "T" Forms, and of course I like the quote, well done ! Login to Reply Michelle Faulkner Date: 11/23/2022 10:40:00 PM Thank you for your comment and the placement in your contest, I appreciate both~

John Watt Date: 11/5/2022 10:02:00 PM The wind and the seashore are so inextricably linked, you use each to weave a tapestry of beauty and melancholy. Memories of that momentous day linger, yet emptiness puts up a quarrel and sadness prevails. Thankfully a fictional write, still it packs an emotional punch. Love your final statement. Great use of Tritina form... going in my faves ~ John Login to Reply Michelle Faulkner Date: 11/6/2022 9:00:00 PM I try, even in the fictional poems, to convey the truth of the emotion, so I will imagine what that moment would be like, I guess it is the dark side of my poetry. Your insights are always so introspective and gives me a fresh perspective - thank you for the compliment of the fave! p.s. this was actually my first tritina~

Sam Kauffman Date: 11/1/2022 11:39:00 AM "Alone beside your voice," "pull of yesterday's voice," "snatched by the willful wind!" Your poetic use of words and innovative imagery always leaves me breathless with awe Michelle! Not only are they so imaginative but they always perfectly express the emotion of your poems. Congratulations on your win! Blessings of comfort. Login to Reply Michelle Faulkner Date: 11/1/2022 8:21:00 PM This is actually (thankfully) a work of fiction, but am so pleased you enjoyed it, your encouraging comments always make me smile, thank you Sam~

Malabika Ray Choudhury Date: 11/1/2022 6:22:00 AM Oh Michelle, this is such a poignant and touching write! I love many of your poems, this is another exquisite one in a beautiful matching form. Congratulations on your well-deserved top win. Love ~ Mala Login to Reply Michelle Faulkner Date: 11/1/2022 8:20:00 PM I am so touched by your kind words, Mala, I enjoy your poems as well~

Christuraj Alex Date: 11/1/2022 3:07:00 AM Indeed, very touching writing in the form of Tritina. Congratulations! Login to Reply Michelle Faulkner Date: 11/1/2022 8:19:00 PM Appreciate it, thank you~

Yolanda Nicholsen Date: 10/30/2022 4:14:00 AM lovely expressive piece Login to Reply Michelle Faulkner Date: 11/1/2022 8:19:00 PM Thank you Yolanda

Michael Tor Date: 10/21/2022 3:13:00 PM An emotional write to read Michelle. Sad but conveyed through the readers heart... Login to Reply Michelle Faulkner Date: 10/21/2022 8:51:00 PM Thank you, michael, for your visit and comment~

Ann Peck Date: 10/21/2022 8:59:00 AM Michelle, So very poignant and lovely. I especially loved...I walk the shore alone beside your voice...Your poem a winner for sure! Login to Reply Michelle Faulkner Date: 10/21/2022 11:38:00 AM Thank you, Ann, for your visit and the positive comment, I appreciate it~

Gary Radice Date: 10/20/2022 12:42:00 PM Your poem oozes atmosphere and drips with emotion Michelle. I can almost smell taste and hear the sea and sea air. A great read. Cheers - Gary Login to Reply Michelle Faulkner Date: 10/21/2022 11:38:00 AM I too love the smell and taste of the beach and sea air, thanks for your comment, Gary

Linda Alice Fowler Date: 10/20/2022 6:41:00 AM A beautifully romantic poem Michelle. Just lovely. :) Login to Reply Michelle Faulkner Date: 10/21/2022 11:36:00 AM Thank you so much~

Anil Deo Date: 10/19/2022 3:32:00 PM you both are hale and youthful yet ... so this is good poetry (not biographical, except in romance). Always a treat when you write/post/ communicate poetically. Paz and shalom-shalom, Michelle. Login to Reply Michelle Faulkner Date: 10/19/2022 8:06:00 PM Thankfully, not biographical! Thank you and peace to you also Anil~

Rico Leffanta Date: 10/19/2022 11:12:00 AM Whispers on the wind, indeed! Enjoyed, Michelle! Aloha! Login to Reply Michelle Faulkner Date: 10/19/2022 2:24:00 PM Thanks, Rico, hope you're well~

Valsa George Date: 10/18/2022 8:19:00 PM This clutches at the soul as a blood sucking leech. So poignant and equally romantic .... ! The concluding line though not vociferous speaks in a thousand tongues. Into my FAVE...! All the best dear Michelle. Login to Reply Michelle Faulkner Date: 10/19/2022 2:23:00 PM I am very flattered Valsa, thank you for your encouraging comment and the fave~

Mystic Rose Rose Date: 10/18/2022 6:10:00 PM This is absolutely stunning, as a poem and as a love story. Sad but deeply emotive, gl int the contest. It's a winner for me, Michelle, Login to Reply Michelle Faulkner Date: 10/19/2022 2:23:00 PM Thank you kindly for your comment, I appreciate it

Vijay Pandit Date: 10/18/2022 4:02:00 PM Your ending line spells the essence of your poem, Michelle. Heartfelt and emotive write--skillfully delivered. Best to you. Login to Reply Michelle Faulkner Date: 10/18/2022 4:06:00 PM Thank you for your kind words, Vijay~

Line Gauthier Date: 10/18/2022 3:49:00 PM beautiful ~ Login to Reply Michelle Faulkner Date: 10/18/2022 3:54:00 PM Thank you, Line, appreciate it