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You hold her in your arms so tight She touches you with fingers light You softly kiss her raven hair But in your thoughts, I'm there...I'm there! You try the vision to erase But there you see, my face, my face You turn to her and whisper low "My darling, come, let's have a go." And so you pound with vengeful thrust You hold her down and well you must This intercourse is laced with pain Your love, she knows, she cannot gain In vain you try to drift to sleep You see my eyes, they weep, they weep. Eileen

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Date: 12/22/2014 1:53:00 AM
When I read this poem of beautiful taunt and haunt I thought to myself...an artificial rose the heart always knows...there's an inescapable consequence of passion in your eyes which no other woman can hope to emit Eileen...J.A.B.
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Eileen Manassian
Date: 12/22/2014 12:02:00 PM
:) Oh, Justin. I don't know how you do it. How do you know just the right thing to say? It never fails to amaze me. Thank you for this beautiful post. I hope you are well....and happy. I miss your visits.
Date: 12/19/2014 11:13:00 AM
In a sense this is a love triangle, partly physical, partly mental. It is the mental side of it that is hardest to deal with because it's omnipresent. Eventually I would expect the whole triangle to collapse. A tricky and painful situation. // paul
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Date: 12/19/2014 12:18:00 AM
I like this poem very much. The line ending repetitions are appropriate and beautifully effective.
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Date: 12/18/2014 5:11:00 PM
I'm listening to "When I look to the sky" by Train...Now I read this beautiful piece....Thinking of a love that is not with you......This evokes a lot of emotions...hugs Tim
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Date: 12/18/2014 4:52:00 PM
This creates quite the visual, it is sad when the one the person is with merely performing the function of a surrogate. I don't know who my heart breaks more for, him or his surrogate.
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Eileen Manassian
Date: 12/18/2014 4:54:00 PM
Yes...that is a very good question. Some people accept to be the surrogate....for love. Is that crazy? I don't know. There is pride, and then there is love. I guess it would be best, in this situation...to walk away. Good observation, Richard.
Date: 12/18/2014 4:05:00 PM
I adore the title and the poem is so beautiful in its imagery but with a deep meaning Eileen - guess its so true - love hurts:-) Hugs Jan xx
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Jan Allison
Date: 12/18/2014 4:10:00 PM
Its the only thing keeping me insane at the moment:-( hugs jan xxx
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Eileen Manassian
Date: 12/18/2014 4:09:00 PM
Yup....it does, doesn't it? Or maybe it just hurts for idealist perfectionists. ;) I fall in that category. Hope all is well with you, sweetie. I'll check you out before I go to bed. SO happy the weekend is here. Honestly...without Poetry...I'd go INSANE...Well, I'd go even MORE insane! ;)
Date: 12/18/2014 4:04:00 PM
Soulful write Eileen...a 7 for sure..
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Eileen Manassian
Date: 12/18/2014 4:08:00 PM
:) Thanks, Ken...This one just sort of hit me....It kept pouring out of my head and I couldn't get to my lap top fast enough. Glad you liked it. LOVED your last piece. :) Hugs
Date: 12/18/2014 3:58:00 PM
I really love this poem..It speaks of a deep love ..many will understand,,but others will feel every word of it shaking their heart's desire.Sad and beautiful!
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Eileen Manassian
Date: 12/18/2014 3:59:00 PM
Charmaine....You're up! Hey...I'm going to soup mail you now. Hugs!!!! :)
Date: 12/18/2014 3:51:00 PM
The violence of a tainted love . . . a tear stained face of pain -- may your eyes always shine clear and bright little one. The love pain well expressed -- 7
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Eileen Manassian
Date: 12/18/2014 3:55:00 PM
Hello, David. I was just about to go to bed when the words of this just came to me. I have no respite from words. Honestly, the follow me everywhere I go. Did you read my previous poem...In the Shower? You'll know what I mean. ;) Thanks for the wishes. This Christmas will be good. I have family around me. :) I always get a bit nostalgic at Christmas...You always reflect on things in your life that didn't quite go as planned. Anyway...best head off to bed. It will be midnight in a few minutes, and I still have two classes to teach tomorrow. Hugs
Date: 12/18/2014 3:50:00 PM
Hi Eileen, Very well written Enjoyed your piece of poetry. Happy Christmas Kevin
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Eileen Manassian
Date: 12/18/2014 3:53:00 PM
Hi Kevin. Thanks for this visit. I appreciate hearing from you. This poem speaks for all who have been "jilted". I'm sure it is comforting to THINK that maybe the jilter suffers. :) Thanks for stopping by.

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