Premiere Contest WinnerYou Planted a Garden in me

The rosa blanda embroidering your face
will become the veins in my tongue reaching to clog my throat
go past the tonsils and vocal chords and windpipe
down and down still, burrowing into the esophagus 
relentless in its pursuit, just, just, just to lay seeds in my chest
tumor a pea, peanut, grape, walnut, lime, matilija, peach, grapefruit
straining muscle surprising itself with the ability to withstand the stretch
craving asphyxiation, those lungs may covet paroxysm
but grieve not the fulfillment of a destiny 
this ache, this devastation was meant to be

no, they won’t be careful of what they wish for
you’ll become the air I swallow, and the organ that inhales and exhales it both
viciously lush beauty anywhere and everywhere
so when you see the body that used to be mine,
you’ll gasp in horror or awe or both: which one? I’ll never know
the garden you planted nurses no speech, nor soil, nor hope of infertility 
just a promise of bloom and perpetual harvest
a pretty letter from dainty lips, viscous honey quenching its thirst
a giddy blush warming embryos out of stout cases
a brush of apple-sun cheeks dawning moonlight-budding leaves 
just a gaze and my heart will melt, 
sand that brazenly melds into laminated glass
gifted to strong hands smothered in peppermint lotion
who will keep it safe in their loops, whorls, and arches

brindle cedar irises roots to this infatuation
their existence cruel to a poet who only knows
words mere facets unworthy of describing
fields of cosmoses a cosmos itself

choking on fantasies and tears of scarlet drupes,
I retch out garlands born in guileless meadows
and as the last petal falls,
the sweetest rose hip takes branch
its only sin a love too big
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Scott Avatar
April 23, 2025 at 8:37 AM
Thank you for taking us along a poetic and passionate journey where our hearts were shaken and then replaced-forever changed. You are a most excellent artist!
Junaid Avatar
April 23, 2025 at 10:11 AM
Mary, that is such a high compliment - thank you so much. I am honored.
Radice Avatar
April 16, 2025 at 1:31 AM
As has already been said Hiba, this is such an exceptional piece. I sense each reader will have their own interpretation of your multi layered, well deserved contest winning free verse but I would love to learn the full true meaning of the piece. I sense a nurturing of spirit within oneself. Cheers - Gary
Junaid Avatar
April 18, 2025 at 8:18 AM
Hope you enjoy! <3
Radice Avatar
April 16, 2025 at 7:46 AM
Thanks Hiba. I’m off to read this excellent poem again. Cheers - Gary
Junaid Avatar
April 16, 2025 at 7:07 AM
Hello Gary, thank you for dropping by. In a nutshell, this poem is about how pining for someone becomes suffocating after loving them in silence for a long, long time.
Charles Avatar
April 4, 2025 at 12:41 PM
Indefectible from start to finish. Please forgive my simple mind but how is your vocabulary is so vast and scrumptious? Lol! You don't have to answer that question. I'm just in awe by your beautiful vocabulary and perfectious poem. "0 ") <3
Junaid Avatar
April 4, 2025 at 12:51 PM
Dear David, I love that little emoji at the end "0" haha it's so cute. Also thank you for appreciating the vocabulary - I research a lot for my poems in hopes of producing something original and layered, and definitely with more than one meaning. You are welcome to interpret it however you like, and share what you think!
Riabi Dziri Avatar
April 2, 2025 at 10:25 AM
We are the beautiful roses, of sweet fragrance, of wondrous soul.. nurtured and nourished by all those who highly appreciate and value who we are.. Rich as you are of all that have helped to build you and to plant a garden in you.. All the pain is but a true gain! Cherish that big Love! Congratulations, dear Hiba, for your outshining win! An honour and a distinction well deserved for a so unique poetry! Happy Eid El Fitr! Eid Mubarak and God bless your beautiful soul. My warmest wishes.
Junaid Avatar
April 2, 2025 at 11:20 AM
Besma, I am greatly motivated by your beautiful, invigorating comment. Happy Eid-al-Fitr!!! Khair Mubarak! I hope you had a wonderful day full of nourishment, happiness, and peace, my friend. May Allah Subhanahu Wa Ta'ala Bless you IA Ameen <3
Muriithi Avatar
March 31, 2025 at 10:20 PM
I am reading this artistic piece with my two big balls wide open...a really fantastic work!
Junaid Avatar
March 31, 2025 at 10:28 PM
So grateful for the comment, Mugo :)
Suri Avatar
March 30, 2025 at 9:30 PM
damn! what a deserved win!!! I love the analogies and metaphors you used-- if I judged this, yours would go first. it'd be a no brainier. your writing style is so cool!! :3
Junaid Avatar
March 30, 2025 at 11:13 PM
Thank you so much, Reya!! Your comment is so sweet. (P.S: I'll keep a lookout for any contests you host ;p)
Bartley Avatar
March 16, 2025 at 6:45 PM
That was a wonderful BJ analogy poem. I can see why it was a BIG winner. Thanks for sharing.
Junaid Avatar
March 16, 2025 at 8:44 PM
Thank you, Benjamin! <3
Anaya Avatar
March 16, 2025 at 2:37 PM
Hiba, I want to congratulate you on your trophy win! I was compelled on the first line of entry, but favorite line is "a pretty letter from dainty lips, viscous honey quenching its thirst a giddy blush warming embryos out of stout cases a brush of apple-sun cheeks dawning moonlight-budding leaves just a gaze and my heart will melt" you are a passionate writer poetess friend! Looking forward to read more ~ Anaya
Junaid Avatar
March 16, 2025 at 8:45 PM
Hi there Anaya - thank you so much for your comment and for sharing what you liked the most <33
George Avatar
March 16, 2025 at 9:32 AM
Wonderful poem dealt in a unique way! I must say that you are truly gifted. Congratulations, dear Hiba on your well deserved trophy win. Thanks for visiting my page.
Junaid Avatar
March 16, 2025 at 10:15 AM
Thanks so much, Valsa <3
Hind Avatar
March 14, 2025 at 6:31 PM
Gorgeous writing. Hiba. I have not had the chance to comment on your work until now. I love love this.
Junaid Avatar
March 15, 2025 at 12:27 AM
Paige I am so grateful for your kind comments. Be Blessed.
Hamilton Avatar
March 14, 2025 at 5:11 PM
You sure can write a lovely poem Hiba this is delicious the flow grips your reader with its smoothness a fav for me hugs Shadow well done on win
Junaid Avatar
March 15, 2025 at 12:28 AM
Thank you very much, dear Shadow!!
Rodgers Avatar
March 14, 2025 at 12:10 PM
Dear Hiba, How breathtaking, such a tangle of longing, beauty, and surrender that grows wild in the bones. I loved how your imagery doesn’t just bloom; it overtakes, consumes, and lingers. I felt every root take hold. Stunning, truly. It looks like you won an award and I can see why!! Spring Blessings, My Dear Friend, Daniel
Junaid Avatar
March 15, 2025 at 12:30 AM
Daniel I am greatly touched by your beautiful comment. Thank you, pal.
Godwin Avatar
March 14, 2025 at 8:07 AM
Oh, boy, howdy! One cannot just read this, one must r-e-a-d this and linger to absorb while reading. This poem is a commitment and it is worth the effort. I think we just met today? I'll check your poems to see how long you've penned on Soup. Congratulations on your trophy win ... CayCay
Junaid Avatar
March 14, 2025 at 9:02 AM
Hiya there. Haha yes, we did just meet today (I think). I've not been here too long - just about a year. Also thank you so much for your sweet comment! You are always welcome here.
Poet Avatar
March 13, 2025 at 7:09 PM
Hiba, your outstanding poem charmed me on a spiritual and cognitive level; I found myself reading it repeatedly, savoring the complexities of your brilliant metaphors and artwork. Congrats on your trophy win and best wishes
Junaid Avatar
March 14, 2025 at 12:38 AM
I really appreciate your comment, Sotto! <3
Kendrick Avatar
March 11, 2025 at 5:38 AM
Interesting work you've penned. Thanks for sharing it with us. Sara K
Junaid Avatar
March 11, 2025 at 6:53 AM
Much appreciated, Sara :)
Ashley Avatar
March 10, 2025 at 12:00 PM
Dear Hiba, my heart and imagination were both captivated by your stunning verse in such a way that I reveled in reading this multiple times to savor the shades and nuances of your rich metaphors and creative imagery, grateful for the stirring visceral response I felt while under the spell of your amazing, emotive artistry. This masterwork takes my breath away! A must fav for me! Congratulations for your wonderful and well deserved trophy win in Charlotte's contest! Warmest wishes, my gifted poet friend.. ~Susan
Junaid Avatar
March 11, 2025 at 1:20 AM
Dearest Susan, I must thank you once again for your heart-warming response. So grateful to you, my soulfully gifted friend.
Ashley Avatar
March 10, 2025 at 1:12 PM
My dear poet friend, thank you, I am truly honored by your kindness. I was just going through Sara’s contest list and saw you were a winner there too with this fantastic piece. I stand to applaud you once again and to celebrate your potent golden pen with my congrats for another worthy win!
Junaid Avatar
March 10, 2025 at 12:53 PM
Susan thank you so, so much, my friend. Your comments on my poetry have always motivated and fueled in me the urge to give as much as I receive. You are so very kind. God Bless (Also the power of your poetry is undeniable. You are amazingly talented!!)
Agustin Avatar
March 10, 2025 at 3:04 AM
Wow! Congrats! Thanks for sharing this. God bless you.
Junaid Avatar
March 10, 2025 at 4:50 AM
May God Bless you too, Beata :)
Famuyiwa Avatar
March 9, 2025 at 12:10 PM
This is beautiful and nicely rendered. Congrats on your well deserved win.
Junaid Avatar
March 9, 2025 at 12:40 PM
Thank you very much, Maclawrence!
Puddifoot Avatar
March 9, 2025 at 8:58 AM
this for me was a standout first place; such fresh, original use of language and imagery, internal rhyme, some wonderful lines - "brush of apple-sun cheeks" - i was captivated! congrats on your 1st place in my contest :)
Junaid Avatar
March 9, 2025 at 9:06 AM
Thank you so, so much Charlotte!! I kind of poured my heart and soul into writing this. so happy that it was acknowledged by such a talented poetess.
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