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You Held Me In Your Aging Arms

You promised my heart could be mended. And swept me away with your charms. Together we loved and pretended. Held tightly in your aging arms. Weeks turned to years; I was blissful. You broadened my life with love’s play. Taught me to love from the get-go. I could hardly believe it was real. REFRAIN: But many a young girl has loved you. To each one you said you'd be true. Naive and alone, you were trusted. They were victims when you said adieu. A man of your stature and wisdom Should never spread his lies around. Your wife at home watched two children. Together, like me, missing you. Love seemed so great while it lasted. Wishes, whispers, dinners and songs. You swept her away with your wisdom and charms. Then, you held me in your aging arms. REFRAIN: Many a young girl has loved you. To each one you said you'd be true. Naive and alone, you were trusted. They were victims when you said adieu. © May 22, 2011 Name withheld for judging. Written for Poetry Soup Member Contest: Play Me A Cheatin' Song Sponsored by: Paula Swanson

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Date: 5/28/2011 5:16:00 PM
I loved your song, your refrain is great and I love your new contest, Ameria, The melting pot of Freedom, I am very excited to write for it although I am Canadian, it is North American, right!!
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Dane Ann Smith-Johnsen
Date: 5/29/2011 2:29:00 AM
Thank you for enjoying my poem and for letting me know. I am also glad you like my new contest, which is open to everyone from anywhere. One must only have an opinion...an inspiration! (The "New World" includes North and South America. The USA was nicknamed "The Melting Pot" I think because of all of the immigrants coming through Ellis Island from so many different places. I hope you will enjoy writing for the contest. Thank you for your support.
Date: 5/28/2011 12:41:00 PM
Wow Dane while reading i could hear this playing good luck in the contest.I really appreciate the placement in your contest.~Teresa~
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Dane Ann Smith-Johnsen
Date: 5/28/2011 2:09:00 PM
You are welcome, Teresa...you know I judge without knowing who wrote what...so you EARNED your placement as did the others who placed. It is always hard to judge contests here because there are so many good writers like yourself. Thanks, too, for "hearing" the tune. I wonder if you heard the same tune that I heard when I wrote it. Coolio...and BIG SMILES!
Date: 5/22/2011 11:13:00 AM
a magnificent write and entry Dane Ann.. this has winner written all over it from start to finish and your refrain is wonderful... good luck my friend in the contest as u enjoy this terrific Sunday with luv..
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Dane Ann Smith-Johnsen
Date: 5/25/2011 2:22:00 PM
Thank you for believing in me as a poet and for your well wishes in the contest. Sunday was great...I hope your week is wonderful, too. Thanks for always supporting my writing. (I still remember your son...prayers.) Lovingly, Dane Ann
Date: 5/22/2011 10:59:00 AM
Ahh...the eternal conflict of youth and old age, and the scheming deceit of an oldster foisted upon a younger (innocent?)...but, of course, it "takes two to tango"...most lines rather well written and a nice rhythm here (but a little off in a few places....for example: "Wises, whispers and dinners and songs" -- I don't get the "Wises"....but, a display of talent and writing ability.
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Dane Ann Smith-Johnsen
Date: 5/25/2011 2:27:00 PM
Thanks for catching my typo. I fixed it! It does take 2 to tango! Smiles. Thanks for complimenting me on my writing abilities. Sincerely, Dane Ann
Date: 5/22/2011 10:52:00 AM
Dane, you took my mind and soul with your words of beauty in the promise of being held in aging arms. Good luck with the deepest warm feelings in, Paula's contest.. God bless,..p.d.
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Dane Ann Smith-Johnsen
Date: 5/25/2011 2:34:00 PM
Thank you for immersing yourself in my poetry about being held in aging arms. God bless you, too. Lovingly, Dane Ann

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