Yellow Clouds

Swirling yellow clouds Above, valley hidden down Below, two mountains

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L'Nass Shango

Date: 12/7/2009 9:58:00 PM

You master this form so well, you and Brian intrigue me in the form. Bravo

Daver Austin

Date: 11/22/2009 7:40:00 AM

Yes, my favoite form along with tanka. The form is not as easy to write in as people may think. You do a very thoughtfrul job. Love, daver

James Fraser

Date: 11/22/2009 7:13:00 AM

Nice Haiku Sara >> James

Joyce Johnson

Date: 11/21/2009 5:33:00 PM

Oh this is lovely. Nothing but black clouds here today. Makes me remember summer. Thanks for the comments on my chair poem. Love, Joyce

Linda-Marie Sweetheart

Date: 11/21/2009 5:17:00 PM

Another visual beauty, Sara, from your pen.. its like u are the interior decorator of poetry .. so enjoyed... blessings ... luv ..

Jared Pickett

Date: 11/21/2009 11:07:00 AM

Sounds like the back yard of my mothers home in Salt Lake City......:JP]

P Sheart

Date: 11/21/2009 7:19:00 AM

Great visual with clouds. Last night I posted piognant realm, about billowy clouds. It seems we're on the same wave length....Love watching them! Keep writing! Love Light Patty

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 11/21/2009 6:44:00 AM

Wow! Love the perspective of seeing what lies both above and below the "swirling yellow clouds," Sara. Awesome haiku! Love, Carolyn

Robert A. Dufresne

Date: 11/21/2009 4:52:00 AM

Good morning Sara-- cool Haiku -Robert