Yearn

in faces lined like glaciers sometimes there's loneliness that cuts a tow line to safety air of flux and hostility over dazed eyes turbulent modernity sometimes we yearn for elegance like a warm shoulder its edge of acceptance fitted with precision yearn to heal a heart in straight jacket pain to know motivation that punches above the weight of a fragile frame to relish the faith of a welcoming hand to find a community that bends the bar of one's cage into bracelets shuffled like a deck of cards lives seldom remain still yearning to break existence with its slur of off color jokes reaching for an unseeable light a homeward wish to smother all woe

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Sara Etgen-Baker

Date: 9/26/2023 1:55:00 PM

What depth you demonstrate in your writing...so many great lines that cut to the core of a human's yearning. "Reaching for an unseeable light...to smother all woe" says it all. Fabulous job, Brian!

Brian Sambourne
Date: 11/8/2023 6:25:00 PM

Thank you Sara, for your most supportive review of my small poem. The prompts Constance provide were the sparks to write. She gave us freedom to think. Be well. With appreciation, Brian

Constance La France

Date: 9/12/2023 5:45:00 PM

Brian, wonderful poem and congratulations on your win in my contest, Constance

Brian Sambourne
Date: 9/12/2023 5:55:00 PM

Hello Constance, My appreciation for sponsoring such a creatively open contest. To allow soupers to select any word from an alphabet letter, dictionary listing truly invited freedom to write. Thank you. Best wishes, Brian

Juliet Ligon

Date: 8/25/2023 7:00:00 PM

I love your creative phrasing. I had to read this through a couple times to understand the depth. Adding to my favs!

Brian Sambourne
Date: 8/25/2023 7:07:00 PM

Greetings Juliet, Your words are a tonic to creativity. Thank you most sincerely for your drop by + affirming remarks. Best wishes, Brian

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 8/24/2023 11:03:00 AM

splendid free verse writing, Brian!

Brian Sambourne
Date: 8/24/2023 1:14:00 PM

Thanks very much for your positive evaluation of my submission. I hope all is well with you. Brian

Jerry Brotherton

Date: 8/24/2023 9:30:00 AM

A fantastic example of free verse. Beautifully written and has a rhythm that makes me want to sing. We all need to find that place where we belong.

Brian Sambourne
Date: 8/24/2023 1:18:00 PM

Hi Jerry, most appreciative of your supportive views on my posting. You are so right - the search for a place of belonging is certainly worth pursuing. Best wishes, Brian

Sara Kendrick

Date: 8/23/2023 1:18:00 PM

Yes, we all yearn for something and mostly are unfulfilled, but sometimes life issues out just what we need. Thanks for sharing this with us and for dropping by my page. Sara

Brian Sambourne
Date: 8/23/2023 1:32:00 PM

Hi Sara, Constance's contest was all the push I needed for this piece on what to yearn for. Thank you for the stop by + comment. Best wishes, Brian

I Am Anaya

Date: 8/22/2023 4:56:00 PM

poetry that really hit the spot so to say, on so many levels, I recognize words I've used, perhaps even inspired, please say yes--at least I'd be good for something, LOL as you see I use lots of beautiful pictures, images as show to conceal the mediocrity-my poetry! Thank you, for your kind visits, dear friend. ~Anaya

Brian Sambourne
Date: 8/22/2023 5:14:00 PM

Hi Anaya, Your poetry is far from mediocre. The recent posting ("Angelic" in your portfolio) grabs creativity by the throat. And yes, your work does nudge poetry soupers forward like morning light pushing night aside. Be well. Brian

Bill Baker

Date: 8/22/2023 8:37:00 AM

A very deep and meaningful poem, Brian. I enjoy the variety of ways that you show the desire to "break existence" to be more than mundane. The desire to find our place in life and be our best something most people will relate to. Thanks for sharing your voice with us through your poetry, my friend. Bill

Brian Sambourne
Date: 8/22/2023 10:54:00 AM

Hello Bill, Your comments are much appreciated + always pleasurable to read. You are quite right, I did try to note a break of existence to re-formulate a place in life with a different sheen. Be well. Thanks again. Brian

Tom Woody

Date: 8/20/2023 4:42:00 PM

I agree with Charlotte you have a unique voice. My fave line is: to find a community that bends the bars of one's cage into bracelets." I have found such a global community. Very nice Brian

Brian Sambourne
Date: 8/20/2023 5:07:00 PM

Thank you, Tom. I much appreciate your visit + supportive remarks. It's good that you have found a kinship community - so vital to calm rough waters. Be well as you push your pen. Cheers, Brian

Christuraj Alex

Date: 8/18/2023 6:44:00 PM

"yearning to break existence with its slur of off color jokes" - Wow! Done well. Congratulations!

Brian Sambourne
Date: 8/18/2023 7:55:00 PM

Thanks very much, Christuraj, for stopping by + leaving such a grand thumbs up message. Much appreciated. Sincere good wishes, Brian

Kim Rodrigues

Date: 8/18/2023 11:53:00 AM

yearn to heal a heart in straight jacket pain to know motivation that punches above the weight of a fragile frame… yearning to break existence with its slur of off color jokes…Congratulations, Brian!

Brian Sambourne
Date: 8/18/2023 1:35:00 PM

Thanks very much for your congratulatory message, Kim. I hope that all is well with you. Best wishes, Brian

Charlotte Puddifoot

Date: 8/16/2023 1:31:00 PM

another very good free verse written in your unique style.."reaching for an unseeable light" - i especially like that line :)

Brian Sambourne
Date: 8/16/2023 1:52:00 PM

Hi Charlotte, Maybe I need to break the predictability of my style. Milton once advised, "please don't send me to a dictionary every time I read your work." The advice stuck. Thank you, immensely, for your acknowledgement of my posting. All the best, Brian