Wounded

Come and gone like small twister like the cloud of debris he’s left. Echoes of Charlie Brown’s buddy Pigpen blow through the cobwebs in memory. Left over coffee cups replacing Transformers still dumped in the attic. Reams of knarley skateboards, wheel-less, lay in piles like so much unburnable refuse. The obligatory hugs and peck, over and done the never paid chauffeur collapses… Ah, to have him always near, So, each kiss was not quite so dear. The last fair maid on parade has wandered across the home front, wondering about her predecessor, still tacked with magnets to the fridge, still part of my heart and his… Sons…they say, do not cause such angst. Couldn’t prove it by this mother. This maternal blimp of unused helium was not permitted a girl child. One did come and fleetingly leave before formed. We’ll never know the sweetness of her. Let the image of his manly self disperse, this son.. into the mist as his Father’s has… to be remembered again, only in times of need, his need, for to do anything else, would be to rub salt in an open wound.
Poet: D. Guzzi *the day after Christmas
Copyright © | Year Posted 2010

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Aldea Avatar
October 20, 2011 at 9:06 PM
well expressed,, congrats for the win!
Deane Avatar
October 15, 2011 at 4:13 PM
Moving and heartfelt words...congrats to you for a superb win in the contest...
Song Avatar
October 15, 2011 at 8:42 AM
I read this the day b4 the soup went off line....a wonderful write...an even better win...it stirred up so much emotion in me! Similar feelings experienced with me... Gwendolen
Foster Avatar
October 15, 2011 at 3:27 AM
Congratulations Debbie on your success with this wonderful verse. It was a pleasure to read and pulled the heartstrings...cheers Margaret
Beck Avatar
October 14, 2011 at 12:57 PM
yeah i liked it long ago and i still do..........hefty congratulations and best wishes Deb
Horsman Avatar
October 14, 2011 at 12:41 PM
brilliant Debbie, worthy winner. harry
Johnson Avatar
October 13, 2011 at 7:05 PM
up on top of the tree, Debbie de Guzzi, has flown there to see, if poor johnson is down on the rocks, but nah he's just chasing sweet goldilocks, delusion ...
Richards Avatar
October 13, 2011 at 6:55 PM
Ahhh.....how to tell you how much I love this poem of yours????? Can't ....! But hope you know it!! :) Hooray for you!!
Song Avatar
October 13, 2011 at 6:08 PM
This is a wonderful emotive write, Debbie. A new fav for me. So many shared emotions! Congrats. Gwendolen
Arowolo Avatar
October 13, 2011 at 5:25 PM
Nice and sweet write,Debbie.Congratulations on your well deserved win....
Sweetheart Avatar
October 13, 2011 at 5:07 PM
Congrats Debbie on a first place win so grand with this outstanding poetry from the inner core ..luv.. well deserved sweet success ..
Quigley Avatar
October 13, 2011 at 5:02 PM
Congratulations Debbie on your excellent win
Brown Avatar
October 13, 2011 at 3:06 PM
7,000,000+ ~~~Magnificent~~~ The best I have read today Debbie. Going to my favorites. I know where you are coming from as you know. NO ONE could have written this any better my friend. Congratulations on your 1st Place win. Love, Carol
Williams Avatar
October 13, 2011 at 1:49 PM
Oh Debbie a bittersweet congratulations for your first place win. So heartfelt. A well deserved placement
Cwiak Avatar
September 26, 2010 at 8:52 PM
Debbie, I know the feelings of the loss of a child. Ours was not yet born, but a fetal death. We never knew if it was a girl or boy...but the loss was no less felt. There is, however, the saving grace that only faith can give one when that happens. Your saving grace is in your words so filled lost love. No one can relate what you have written here any better! Dan C For your Harvest Moon Contest I am going to use "to the moon Alice" .
Fraser Avatar
September 26, 2010 at 9:29 AM
Terrific poetry Deborah, you sure have a knack for words. If I may, I would love to enter my poem 'Full Moon Fever' based on mooning the crowd. Have a lovely Sunday >> James :)
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September 25, 2010 at 8:44 AM
Debbie, This is a sad, but moving poem...one of acceptance and recovery against the pains that women face. It evokes emotion...a lot of emotion. Nicely written. Love you, Dane (I would like the topic "Moon Over Miami" for your Harvest Moon contest. I am finally inspired. Is it still available? PS My x-husband died yesterday...sad.)
Freeman Avatar
September 22, 2010 at 9:48 AM
Interesting free verse Debbie, enjoyed the read. Soup mail me a phrases you have left, and I will enter your contest. Agape, Moses
Beck Avatar
September 21, 2010 at 1:06 AM
Hello Deb, I like this poem, it deals very well with a topic which is close to my heart.....you may find my recently added poem THE TEACHER AND THE FOUNDLING of some interest, for its subject matter is similar. Thanks for all your kind and supportive comments. sincere regards Syd
Conway Avatar
September 20, 2010 at 6:14 PM
Wow what an amazing write Debbie, Sad...If it's still open I'd like "Goodnight Moon" for your Harvest Moon contest!~Tirzah~
Marcum Wong Avatar
September 20, 2010 at 4:00 PM
Debbie, a very beautiful and moving poem. I could really identify with your second stanza. My son grew up too fast, but I am blessed by daughters who call me all the time, still, though they are grown. I would like to choose Harvest Moon if that is possible? Thank you, Connie
K. Avatar
September 20, 2010 at 2:36 AM
This truly is such a touching write-- I couldn't help but read it again -- I can only imagine the pain you would have gone through with this one-- my own mom had her share of miscarriages-- a sad but very compelling write that comes across as quite vivid to me as well-- I sure am glad that you told us about this for your contest, definitely worth reading-- speaking of, can I please write on "to the moon Alice"? I have a thought for it, hope I can pull it off--thank you ;) -soupmail btw nikko :)
Gorelick Avatar
September 19, 2010 at 8:20 PM
A very soulful write..wow.. I chose Harvest Moon..hope thats ok..if not, dont worry about it.. BG
Beck Avatar
September 18, 2010 at 3:08 PM
Debbie, I would like to write about "sailor's moon" do I simply write such a poem and post it in MY POEMS ? Thanks for inviting me to write it. Syd
La France Avatar
September 17, 2010 at 7:49 PM
Hi Deb, very thought provoking poem, you had told me about the baby before, that part made me very sad, as you know I too lost a baby at birth.. anyways, I will be the Goodnight Moon.. please..
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