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With-In the Spell

Of all the stories that us poets tell Soul's exposed, Some of Heaven – Some of Hell You know I'm posting this for Brian's contest but I'm totally lost on this one - Could some one let me know if I'm even in the ballpark, Thanks

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Robin L. Gass

Date: 2/16/2009 10:40:00 AM

This is awesome, Michael! I am just starting to get these! I see congratulations are in order for this well derserved win. I gues you did it right! (lol) Truth rings loud and clear in this truly inpired write. Keep them flowing, my poetic friend! Love, Robin

Nigel Fawcett

Date: 1/9/2009 8:25:00 AM

Congratulations on your well deserved Second Place Win in Brian's contest. Love, Nigel

Joyce Johnson

Date: 1/5/2009 7:47:00 PM

Certaily looks as though were well in the ball park. Congratulations. Joyce

Carrie Richards

Date: 1/5/2009 10:54:00 AM

Congratulations on your second place in Brian's contest, Michael. An awesome poem!! ~ Carrie

Brian Strand

Date: 1/5/2009 7:48:00 AM

Congrats Michael & thank you for supporting my contests & for your always welcome comments.Rgds Brian

Sharon Winter

Date: 1/5/2009 7:08:00 AM

Congratulations Michael on your big win in Brian's contest! Outstanding and so well deserved! Love, Shar

Elaine George

Date: 1/5/2009 7:00:00 AM

A TRUE MASTERPIECE, DEAR MICHAEL. I am at a library in North Carolinia as I write this. - returning home Jan. 15, 2009. i

Kristin Reynolds

Date: 1/5/2009 4:26:00 AM

Congrats on your well deserved win, Michael!!! Well done! Love, and light, Kristin

Michaela Payne

Date: 12/31/2008 8:56:00 AM

this was great Michael, so much said in so little, I think it's fine, a wonderful write by a wonderful person. ~Michaela~

Date: 12/21/2008 6:21:00 PM

So much truth shared in just two lines. I especially like the concept of the last couple of words. Good luck in the contest. Thank you for your kind words regarding my poem. Karen

Brian Strand

Date: 12/19/2008 12:41:00 AM

Michael the main key to this American Doublet form is the integral title (ie it forms a third line as it leads into the two line, ten syllable couplet) .Eg using this as an example I would make L2 'Soul’s exposed,some of heaven – some of hell' and then introduce a new title to lead in to L1.See Adelaide's example in my contest guidance.Hope this helps.Rgds Brian & thanks for your interest in my contest.

Sharon Winter

Date: 12/17/2008 4:39:00 PM

An awesome Epigram. Well stated and full of truth. Love, shar

Kristin Reynolds

Date: 12/17/2008 4:03:00 PM

Hey there, Michael! This looks great to me! I'm no expert on this form, but it does look right (and great!) to me. :) Love, Kristin

Sami Al-Khalili

Date: 12/17/2008 12:41:00 PM

You hit a homerun, the epigram is subdued with great effort and talent. Bro, this hit is out of the stadium. Sami