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Written for the Winter Sonata poetry contest by JCB BRUL

 

"If you're really in love, appearances aren't important. The best house is the one you build in each other's hearts." Jung Yu jin
Autumn's alliterations amplified an acoustic of death. Stillness of internal instrumentals silenced my acapella.  Words like wildflowers withered in winter wickedness, without voice or verse I vanished behind a visible veil. I was like a lifeless crystallised burnt sienna leaf, as bitter breaths froze my brittle soul's ink. Fatigued fingertips trembled from numbness - without a purpose upon a speechless stage. Afraid of crisp crying rain, which fell like a refrain. my summer eyes turned amaurotic. Life resembled a blank music sheet, among an abandoned piano covered in iced cobwebs. In solitude my music remained unwritten, as I slept in a shivery silent slumber - tone deaf, finding fading apricity in stolen daylight. Until a silvery silhouette appeared. - sparkling. Placed my hands into her warm glove-like hands, wrapped me in an emphatic scarf-like embrace. Her rose gold lips echoed in Orphic tones, reviving my somnolent mute muse. Blessed with vibrations from her vision, senses awoke to rhythms of her heavenly harmony - strumming an enchanting lover's lullaby. Were you a gift from an orchestra of operatic angels, sent to place hymns of hallelujah deep into my heart? As her mystical mystery began to unfold. In union our lyrics amplified into a rhapsody of romance. Vibrant tunes from her intimate strings composed a seraphic serenade, as we drifted into a dream world. Today, as we dance under emerald velvet northern lights, snowfall covers our paths like an ivory blanket. Soft flakes, like pearls glisten under tinsel moonlight, as we leave poetic footprints behind in soothing snow - a chorus of constellations glow to the tempo of our glorious sonata.

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Date: 12/29/2023 2:34:00 PM
Best house is the one you build in each other's hearts." ...wow It doesn't get better than that and your poem tops it all, congratulations on a most amazing poem and a story ever told, congrats
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Date: 12/29/2023 10:57:00 AM
A deserved placing- number two in the 100 Best New poems, fantastic - your poetic words blissfully eclectic ' Fatigued fingertips trembled from numbness - without a purpose upon a speechless stage' yet when a silvery silhouette appeared and 'placed my hands into her warm glove-like hands' ... your 'senses awoke to rhythms of her heavenly harmony' ... together you left 'poetic footprints behind in soothing snow' - Heavenly poetry Silent One, what a 'glorious sonata'. Hugs and blessings, Jennifer.
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Date: 12/29/2023 7:41:00 AM
WOW!!! Congratulations on being number 2 in the "100 Best New Poems" list for Soup. Way To Go... What a wonderful write/picture/great ending. Yes, we leave our poetic footprints behind in our words. Have a great/wonderful day/2024 writing away.................
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Date: 12/29/2023 4:34:00 AM
Congrats on being ranked#2 on the top 100 best poems list Silent One!
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Date: 12/15/2023 2:34:00 PM
I am mesmerized, Dear Poet! How gracefully and beautifully you have penned the creation of a winter sonata! The alliterations are unparalleled! Congratulations on your win.
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Date: 12/14/2023 4:01:00 PM
You broke the silence of the winter eve, Silent One with this glorious masterpiece! Congratulations!
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Date: 12/14/2023 2:52:00 PM
Back with hearty congratulations on your well-deserved win with this lovely poem my friend.
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Date: 12/14/2023 7:12:00 AM
This is one of my most fave poems by you dear silent one . Congratulations on your win. This deserves all the accolades
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Date: 12/5/2023 4:25:00 AM
All I can say is WOW this is Fantastic your choice of words paint a wonderful picture in my mind Brilliant write and a favourite hugs Shadow
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Date: 12/5/2023 12:41:00 AM
You weave a very visual narrative into this journey of seasons, music and harmony...the ambiguity on the "silvery silhouette" leaves me curious. Hope its a real person....
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Date: 12/4/2023 3:01:00 PM
A beautiful, romantic Winter Sonata Silent One. I would have loved to enter the contest, but I didn’t as I can’t do free verse well at all, so I posted my Christmas Sonata in rhyme… All the best, Belle
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Date: 12/4/2023 10:27:00 AM
Blessed with vibration from her visions. terrific! Nice one.
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Date: 12/4/2023 8:43:00 AM
A shimmery rhapsodic sonata of winter's aurora borealis, brilliantly penned and intimately felt. A grand tribute to light, love, and nature's grace. Robert
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Date: 12/3/2023 9:49:00 PM
How lovely is your winter sonata ! From a lifeless, burnt sienna leaf, you have emerged into a sprawling, verdant, blooming tree with the touch of love! You are not just a master in scripting poems of loneliness and melancholy, but poems glistening with the ambrosial dew of love. "As her mystical mystery began to unfold. In union our lyrics amplified into a rhapsody of romance. Vibrant tunes from her intimate strings composed a seraphic serenade, as we drifted into a dream world." With what sweet flavor, you have dressed this romantic union. I love all your poems, but this highly alliterative poem is special. Another FAVE
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Date: 12/3/2023 9:05:00 PM
Wow, how wonderful would life be if partners could see each other in the same way as when they first met. Outwardly appearances should not matter over time if Souls had connected in the first place. As always I love your poems, but this one is extraordinary and a fave for me. I think you should put out a book....How to keep the spark alive. In these fickle times, when relationships fail as fast as they start, it could be a best seller .
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Date: 12/3/2023 7:11:00 PM
Wow, Silent One, absolutely beautiful.
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Date: 12/3/2023 6:36:00 PM
I love "Until a silvery silhouette appeared. - sparkling. Placed my hands into her warm glove-like hands" very beautiful writing. I enjoyed reading!
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Date: 12/3/2023 4:36:00 PM
Your poem captured my heart, Silent One. A simple delightful and elegant read. Your imagery was breathtaking...'emerald velvet northern lights, snowfall covers our path like an ivory blanket.' I truly am in awe and breathless. You seem to just breathe poetry. You're amazing. Have a great evening, Sara
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Date: 12/3/2023 4:35:00 PM
Ohhhh~So you did see the northern lights? I have read about them being visible farther down in the US since there were so strong solar flares which would produce more northern lights. Thanks for sharing this one with us and for dropping by my page. Sara
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Date: 12/3/2023 1:05:00 PM
As her mystical mystery began to unfold. In union our lyrics amplified into a rhapsody of romance. Vibrant tunes from her intimate strings composed a seraphic serenade, as we drifted into a dream world---brilliantly beaming with love and romance. Much enjoyed the voice of your glorious poem, SO.
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Date: 12/3/2023 12:59:00 PM
The Silent one speaks in poetry and prose. And for some lucky lady he doth compose. A romance a song right from the heart. I dare say your poems are such a delight. Gorgeous read.
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Date: 12/3/2023 10:52:00 AM
Dear Silent One, Such a masterpiece with your own words. Your eloquence is outstanding. This piece brilliance is beyond description and It has captured my heart. Your imagery and metaphors were breathtaking. Silent One, your tremendous creative skill is revealed by the precise diction alliteration, and depth of feeling conveyed. You are gifted and have limitless potential my friend this is a favorite.
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Date: 12/3/2023 10:11:00 AM
You make beautiful music and poetry together, my friend. May the two of you function in oneness forever. The imagery was as luminescent as the green glow in the photo above your verse. Very romantic poetry, Silent One. I enjoyed reading your poetry today. I will FAV this one. Write on my poet friend, Bill
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Date: 12/3/2023 10:04:00 AM
Such romance in the notion of dancing under velvet northern lights in a blanket of whiteness, leaving poetic footprints. The ladies will love this one
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Tonye George
Date: 12/4/2023 10:28:00 AM
We do
Date: 12/3/2023 8:07:00 AM
What a most glorious sonata this is, I absolutely love the storytelling here, of how one finds light amidst the coldness and darkness of the world and how you’ve shown us that through vivid imagery and beautiful alliterations truly touched my soul and heart so deeply. I will never get bored of reading your poems they always seem to evoke so many thoughts and feelings in such a profound and moving manner that not many can do, I absolutely love the wordplay too, and the way you’ve written certain
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Date: 12/3/2023 8:09:00 AM
Lines like .. “ Until a silvery silhouette appeared. - sparkling. Placed my hands into her warm glove-like hands,“ soul warming and so creative really! I felt that and made me tear up. Such love! “ as we dance under emerald velvet northern lights, snowfall covers our paths like an ivory blanket.“ wow!!! I love northern lights and those lines go so well with the picture you’ve used here too! I think this will be a top winner really! This is truly poetic perfection! Impeccable write. Meticulously woven with such brilliant metaphors and descriptive lines! Fave

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