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Winged Words

Like a creature hibernating in its burrow Waiting to come out with the first verdure of spring, The seed of a poem lay dormant in my heart Through the long winter awaiting another spring After staying torpid inside for long, At a time I expected it the least Timidly came out the first word, As shaky as a calf getting up for the first time. Then another came and word after word in a row Like pellets of rain on the window pane I boiled them in the crucibles of my imagination And finally dipping them in the ocean of my emotions But rhyme came to set constraints For the right alignment I struggled I had to decide on its texture and format Pondered if it should be a sonnet or an ode I might have kept the door open for long Alas! All my words and fancies flew away, Like birds taking on wings into the sky From a cage where they were imprisoned for long I stood so helpless with my mouth shut, Staring blankly out into the airy nothing Like one lost in the doorway of his own threshold Unable to call back those winged words lost in the void
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~Placed Fifth~ Submitted for Marathon no.10. Poetry Contest Sponsor - Mark Toney
~Placed First~ 31. March .2022 A Brian Strand Standard Poetry Contest

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Date: 8/23/2022 10:41:00 AM
Valsa, congratulations on your win! I have read this wonderful poem many times delving into its rich metaphor, vivid similes - "shaky as a calf," "pellets of rain" and oh so creative stanzas describing the dance with inspiration. Your ability to create fresh images is amazing. I so love diving into your words for their refreshment dear friend. Sending you many blessings dear Valsa! This one is amazing!
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Date: 8/6/2022 3:14:00 PM
Valsa, you have enchanted me with your amazing imagery in describing the creative process... ideas hibernating, seeds laying dormant, coming out like a shaky newborn calf, pouring like rain drops on a window pane, boiling them in a crucible, then having them fly away like a bird from its cage prison. This is like a delicious banquet to my poetic appetite, every stanza a feast. Going into my faves to be enjoyed again in the future. My admiration for such beautiful writing, and hearty congratulations for your Mile 10 win ~ John
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Date: 8/4/2022 10:27:00 AM
Dearest Valsa, such metaphorical magnificence spills from your priceless pen! Your exquisite imagery and sprinklings of internal rhymes charm my heart's imagination and captures the enchanting yet elusive nature of creativity. Winged words, indeed! If not caged on paper they can zip away like sparkling hummingbirds. Such a beautiful poem and a fav! Congratulations for your excellent win in Mark's contest. Warmest wishes, my sweet friend.. ~Susan
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Date: 8/4/2022 6:57:00 AM
Congratulations for your win. Your "Winged Words" is wonderful write. Love your ending, "Unable to call back those winged words lost in the void," So true." Have a great/blessed day.....................
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Date: 8/3/2022 3:59:00 PM
Valsa, you beautifully describe the highly fragile creative process and how thoughts, ideas, and words can easily fly away without a trace. Your similes and metaphors are so creative. This is a fav poem for me. Congratulations on your win on Mile 10 of my 2022 Poetry Marathon Contest. Keep your running shoes on, because Mile 11 has already started. Also, check out my blog post to view your current standing in the Marathon.
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Date: 8/3/2022 10:24:00 PM
Thank you so much Toney for the recognition you gave to my poem. I am so excited ! Thanks also for the lovely comment and your effort at analysing each poem in all its different dimensions ! The conduct of this prestigious contest and your time bound announcing of results are much appreciated. Through this, we get the chance to read a few of the best poems ! Thanks once again!
Date: 8/3/2022 3:52:00 PM
I get terribly frustrated when I lose poetic thoughts, phrases, or something I've left unfinished, but sometimes new thoughts turn out even better. If they take flight, does that mean I'm not flighty? lol Congratulations on your placement in Mile 10, Valsa.
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Date: 8/3/2022 10:29:00 PM
Thanks a lot Lin... ! I think it is a universal experience for all poets ! But after the initial disappointment, some times our muse comes back to us to aid us in even better ways!
Date: 4/9/2022 4:07:00 AM
I have quickly read your winning entry in Brian's contest and found it worthy of its honor. Congrats. Sara
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Date: 4/6/2022 10:27:00 AM
Wonderful metaphor and imagery Valsa. What a creative and elegant description of writing against the backdrop of spring. This really shows off your creative spirit in full display. Congratulations on your win dear friend!
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Date: 4/5/2022 9:33:00 AM
What a great description: As shaky as a calf getting up for the first time! Congratulations!
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Date: 4/5/2022 1:26:00 AM
"seed of a poem lay dormant", "airy nothing" - You have many such in your poems. Congratulations!
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Date: 4/4/2022 2:04:00 PM
Congratulations on your win, Valsa, I believe "Laureate" should go beside your name. Hugs ~ Debra
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Date: 4/4/2022 7:49:00 AM
This is often how the first word arrives "Timidly came out the first word, As shaky as a calf getting up for the first time." - wow!
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Date: 4/1/2022 1:25:00 PM
Fine write Valsa, good imagery, and insightful thought. Blessings, Gordon
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Date: 3/31/2022 10:31:00 PM
Absolutely true & dazzling Sister Poet. A fave again! Emily Dickinson wrote: " A word is dead when it's said, some Say - but I think it begins to live that day"
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Date: 3/31/2022 9:54:00 PM
Well said, Valsa, the struggles we feel , we see, we touch, but how to place in in a verse for people to feel as you do inside. Blessings my friend that your inspirations never end.
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Date: 3/31/2022 6:21:00 PM
Sometimes, even the most guarded treasures in time may be taken away. Yet even with a pained heart, life moves on. Penned with profundity Valsa!...ab
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Date: 3/31/2022 3:11:00 PM
Valsa, you've written an excellent poem on the origins of writing. Utterances have emotions and feathers, just like anything else. The writing is excellent, and the thoughts are conveyed deeply and effectively.
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Date: 3/31/2022 11:47:00 AM
What a profound write! Your winged words reached my sanctuary and pled to stay. Masterfully penned. A winner for me!
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Date: 3/31/2022 11:45:00 AM
Your excellent vivid torrid imagination is surely a gift to all who read your poetry - - 'shaky as a calf getting up for the first time' - wow Valsa, love this poem an absolute fave. Hugs and blessings, Jennifer.
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Date: 3/31/2022 11:17:00 AM
False Labour seems to impact us all . . .Enjoyed! Aloha!
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Date: 3/31/2022 5:56:00 AM
Great dissertation on birth of a poem, Valsa. Words have moods too and wings...All the best.
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Date: 3/31/2022 5:17:00 AM
I can come up with the best poems in the middle of the night then they fly away at the crack of dawn. Once again, I have a blank canvas waiting for the painter to decide which color to put on first. I enjoyed reading your contest entry. Reads like a good contender to me. Way to go for the contest. Sara
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Date: 3/31/2022 12:34:00 AM
You've just written a poem about me. I too search for words but they seem to fly away. Great poem.
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