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WILL YOU PLEASE JUST TRY

I won’t, I won’t, no, I will not, not cry!
God, I can feel You, will You please just try
to get my Mom and Dad to remember
The Golden Rule right now, both together?

They started a loud fuss when we ate lunch.
I ran here, God, ‘cause it hurt me a bunch.
I gave Your six ducks my sandwich to keep.
Could I become a duck by sinking real deep?

God, I’m still too small for most adult things,
but, I know they are wearing their love rings –
Put them on in our car when we drove here.
I saw Dad kiss Mom underneath her ear!

This morning, we all laughed silly ‘bout germs
‘cause Dad got Mom to touch the fishing worms.
You saw that, God – here on this same duck dock,
where they smiled and bubbled the lake with rocks. 

Two days ago, we drove here wanting fun.
When we saw our cabin, I had to run!
We hiked, swam and cooked dirty marshmellow sticks.
My Daddy took many keep for always pics.

We were supposed to hike to a fairground,
but I’m alone and hope You are around.
Just me, bright sun, blue, green, then blue again.
I pray You do Your thing.  Your friend.  Amen.
Copyright © | Year Posted 2016

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A  Avatar
July 24, 2016 at 1:31 AM
Lovely win, CayCay...skat
A  Avatar
July 17, 2016 at 5:51 PM
CAYCAY, congratulations on your FEEDING THE DUCKY'S win. LUV **SKAT**
Kimathi Avatar
June 8, 2016 at 5:44 PM
Hi CayCay. Congrats on your placement in the contest!! ;-)
Rycroft Avatar
June 7, 2016 at 9:37 AM
Well done congrats xxx
Roper Avatar
June 6, 2016 at 1:44 AM
CayCay, congratulations on the Feeding the Ducklings contest! Hugs Eve
De Burca Avatar
June 5, 2016 at 8:52 PM
Congrats on your win.
Roper Avatar
June 5, 2016 at 8:43 PM
CayCay, congratulations on your win! Hugs Eve
Haight Avatar
June 5, 2016 at 8:03 PM
Hi, CayCay, congratulations on your nice podium win for your sweet 'duckling's poem. I like the different direction you took the theme! Hugs, Sandra
Scars Avatar
June 5, 2016 at 7:12 PM
awwww CayCay so sweet! congrats on your placement in the contest! :)-Luloo
Canerdy Avatar
May 31, 2016 at 9:12 AM
What a lovely bittersweet poem--very effective use of child's perspective--a 7! Janice
A   Avatar
May 31, 2016 at 5:17 AM
enjoyed this one CayCay:)... ~Linda~
Roper Avatar
May 30, 2016 at 5:07 PM
This is a beautiful poem, Cay Cay, I love the flow and the content a 7. Hugs Eve
Marcum Wong Avatar
May 29, 2016 at 7:48 PM
This is an awesome entry CayCay! We forget how impressionable little children are. Your poem captures that innocent essence beautifully. I hope this poem gets a top win! #7. ; )
Dietrich Avatar
May 29, 2016 at 4:46 PM
wow you went really deep with the Ducklings challenge, Caycay. VERY nice spinoff you did. I predict a WIN. And yes, what you said about great minds!!!
Lamoureux Avatar
May 29, 2016 at 10:24 AM
One of the best I have read, I suspect it will do well.
Callus Avatar
May 29, 2016 at 6:46 AM
I adore your take on this picture, CayCay...different to mine, but that is what makes individuality beautiful! Yes, children hate it when they see their parents bickering...so what about a kiss and make up:) #7 Warm regards ~~ paul
Johnson Avatar
May 28, 2016 at 8:11 PM
Parents must remember that children take things seriously. Very well written. Thank you for reading and commenting on my win. Love, Joyce
Chalise Avatar
May 28, 2016 at 6:42 PM
Very smart write Jennings wide area of poetic approach covered I loved too much.
Smith Avatar
May 28, 2016 at 5:50 PM
Oh CayCay I can just picture the little girl praying to let her parents stay together..lovely poem...good luck
Allison Avatar
May 28, 2016 at 5:47 PM
oh how charming a poem CayCay I was captivated by the imagery:-) hugs jan xx
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