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In a white empty coffin Angels lay in wait For today the preacher is late In a white empty coffin Silent nights filled with piercing screams You may call them nightmares The grim reaper calls them dreams In a white empty coffin Snow storms hail from above A blanket of death over Those who breathe not at all White empty coffins Collecting tears as they fall

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Date: 12/2/2017 11:36:00 AM
Hello Arthur, I'm glad I read your recent selection here, "White Coffin." The metaphor of the "white empty coffin" is perfect. And the way in which your last verse in each of the stanzas is employed is done so very well. As I read a poem of this nature, I always try to visualize the imagery it presents simultaneously. Superbly Done!! I enjoyed this one very much. Cheers and Best, Gary
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Date: 11/30/2017 3:30:00 PM
wow, what very interesting imagery!! I love that title and how you depicted it in your poetry.
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Date: 11/28/2017 11:27:00 PM
Geez my friend thanks for cheering me up....lol great write though...Seren
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Date: 11/28/2017 9:24:00 PM
Wow, so very deep, but very intriguing .. Wet cold tears... Hugs Eve
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Date: 11/28/2017 8:35:00 PM
Arthur, through your stunning imagery and great use of line repetition you've created a stirring aura of depression and death. Your poignant poem is creative, artistic and enthralling. Beautifully dark.
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Date: 11/28/2017 4:48:00 PM
A poignant song, Arthur!
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Date: 11/28/2017 2:17:00 PM
Sad but beautifully written Arthur! : )
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Date: 11/28/2017 1:03:00 PM
Arthur, my friend. What have you done? This is fabulous! Dark, spooky, creepy...but still fabulous.
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Date: 11/28/2017 5:55:00 AM
very dark and depressing Arthur - just what I need when I am just back from the hospital - think I will have a biodegradable cardboard box lol lol:-) hugs jan xx
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