When Doves Cry

Oh wicked night of scarlet moon
that mocks my groaning, grieving heart
your bleeding glow, your crimson gloom
the doves cry out as you depart. 

For he has vanished from this realm
his soul has drowned in an endless sea
no more can his deep voice be heard
night’s lapping waves weep over me. 

Oh hear the haunting cry of doves
that coo incessantly at dawn
mad, sleepless nights are here to stay
with endless tears flowing on and on. 

Oh crimson moon, turn white as snow
release me from this weighty bond
let mourning doves away take flight
and banish dreams that come at dawn.
Copyright © | Year Posted 2023

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Peckham Avatar
May 23, 2024 at 5:56 PM
Nicely done. The mood is enhanced by the cries of the author along with the cries of the doves. Good rhythm and rhyming as well.
Leiser Avatar
May 24, 2024 at 8:33 AM
Thank you, Barbara! :)
Freie Avatar
May 20, 2024 at 2:34 AM
Wow Laura, this is the first poem of yours that I've read, but it won't be the last. What a wonderful but sorrowful write. Keep up the good work little sister.
Leiser Avatar
May 20, 2024 at 9:20 AM
Thank you, Randy, for commenting snd your encouragement, as well! I appreciate it. :)
Ebel Avatar
September 26, 2023 at 3:54 PM
That is a very good poem. I hope that I will be able to evoke emotion as you just have in me.
Leiser Avatar
September 28, 2023 at 6:36 PM
Thank you, Mona! I’m so glad you liked this one. :)
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August 28, 2023 at 6:44 PM
This is just deeply felt, Laura. And truly beautifully written. I love it! :) hugs ~
Leiser Avatar
August 30, 2023 at 2:11 PM
Thank you, Akkina! :)
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August 22, 2023 at 7:28 AM
Such a endearing lovely piece of writing Laura, full of great imagery and insightfulness along with nice rhyme and flow too. Blessings always,Gordon
Leiser Avatar
August 22, 2023 at 11:40 AM
Thank you, Gordon! I appreciate your kind comments. :)
One Avatar
August 16, 2023 at 9:23 AM
You've always been one of my favourite poets... i always like your emotive poems that capture sorrow and grief and you express it so emotively through you excellent vocabulary.. you write from the heart and once again that is evident in this poem... I hope you are well... life can be so short...
Leiser Avatar
August 16, 2023 at 12:44 PM
It’s so good to hear from you again, Silent One! I’m honored by your kind and generous words! I look forward to reading your amazing poetry again and hope you stay here at PS! We need poets like you! Hugs! :)
Cornish Avatar
August 10, 2023 at 12:54 PM
Thank you Laura, there's something about your thoughts that are always captivating.
Leiser Avatar
August 10, 2023 at 1:57 PM
I feel so honored by your generous words, Craig. Thank you for my placement in your contest! I always love your contest themes! :)
Hamilton Avatar
August 10, 2023 at 9:39 AM
What an impactful write Laura full of intense imagery and emotion. This is a sure winner to me!
Leiser Avatar
August 10, 2023 at 1:58 PM
Thank you for your kind comments, John. I’m so glad you liked this one! :)
Liguori Avatar
August 9, 2023 at 3:29 PM
I added this to my favorites. You write a beautiful poem.
Leiser Avatar
August 9, 2023 at 9:20 PM
I am honored that you faved it, Robert! Thank you! :)
Andresen Avatar
August 9, 2023 at 1:10 PM
- "night's lapping waves weep over me" ... a line with a lot of sadness, Laura - A beautiful poem ... in its deep loss - Best wishes in the contest :) - hugs
Leiser Avatar
August 9, 2023 at 9:19 PM
Thank you for commenting, Anne-Lise. I really appreciate it! :)
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August 2, 2023 at 7:44 PM
How mournful and touching, love your phrases like 'crimson gloom' and 'night's lapping waves weep over me' - your talent is so striking here (by the way I met our mutual friend John Watts when I was in San Diego last week, and told him how much I like your work)
Leiser Avatar
August 3, 2023 at 4:28 PM
Thanks so much for your kind comments, Michelle! I’m so glad you were able to meet John last week in SD.!Take care and God bless! :)
Buehler Avatar
July 30, 2023 at 11:28 AM
A beautifully crafted poem of vivid images and deep emotions. A stunning creation.
Leiser Avatar
July 30, 2023 at 3:07 PM
Thank you so much, sweet Evelyn. God bless you! :)
Richmond Avatar
July 30, 2023 at 3:03 AM
You used the imagery of the crimson moon and cooing doves very effectively in your poem to express the gloom in your heart. Well done Laura. I love your rhymes.
Leiser Avatar
July 30, 2023 at 3:07 PM
Thank you for stopping by to comment, David. I appreciate it! :)
Manassian Avatar
July 29, 2023 at 10:23 PM
What a heartfelt piece. I'm sorry you're mourning the passing of your uncle, dear. May God comfort your heart. Isaiah 57: 1& 2 comforted me when mom passed away. May it also comfort you. Writing is also helpful. Beautiful piece here albeit sad. Big hugs
Leiser Avatar
July 30, 2023 at 3:06 PM
Thank you for the condolences snd Bibles verses, as well, Eileen! It’s SO good to hear from you again! God bless you! :)
Poet Avatar
July 29, 2023 at 6:29 AM
Laura, I must commend your exceptional achievement. Within this exquisitely crafted poem, you have masterfully conveyed your emotions while showcasing an unparalleled caliber of imagery. Seeking liberation from the burdensome shackles that confine. Thanks for your comment on my page Laura.
Leiser Avatar
July 29, 2023 at 7:15 AM
Thank you, Sotto, for the high compliments regarding my poem! I am humbled that you appreciated it so. I write so little these days, so when inspiration comes, I take it! :)
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