when

free verse all repetition is intentional "when" when life seems darkening when stumbles knock on doors let the butterflies surround when humpty dumpty plummets when chaos shadows sun and moon let their illumination through when rain overflows when cold remains inside panes will blanket remember to breathe when faced with it all SkyWatcher 01-21-24

Post Comments

Poetrysoup is an environment of encouragement and growth so only provide specific positive comments that indicate what you appreciate about the poem.

Please Login to post a comment

Jennifer Proxenos

Date: 1/23/2024 11:17:00 AM

Hi dear Lisa, when all seems dark and good fortune is not seen down the path of life - 'remember to breathe, when faced with it all'. Very wise advise my friend, that is when we must keep it all together, and that is what families are for, to rally around us. Hugs and blessings, Jennifer.

Lisa Ricci
Date: 1/26/2024 4:15:00 AM

Hi back Jennifer. Good Morning. Thank you for your beautiful commentary and intake. Truly. Never do I take that for granted. Have a wonderful morning and day. May we all endure what comes our way. Blessings Peace and Light always. (smile)

Bill Baker

Date: 1/22/2024 3:26:00 PM

True, Lisa, when need to breathe and remember, "this too will pass". Life is grand, the things we understand and the things that we'll never understand. Live life and Love, my sweet friend. Hugs, Bill

Lisa Ricci
Date: 1/26/2024 3:58:00 AM

Hello Bill. Top of the Morning to you. Thank you ever so much. Your intake is right and true. Let's hope the day will reveal all things good for one and all and may one and all handle what comes our way. Have a beautiful morning and day. Love Peace and Blessings to both you and Sara always. (smile)

Tom Cunningham

Date: 1/21/2024 8:00:00 AM

Life can be like that sometimes Lisa, but we always try and find a way to rise above it. Tom

Lisa Ricci
Date: 1/26/2024 3:25:00 AM

Yes we do. Good Morning Tom. Hi. Thank you very much as always. Never do I take your visits for granted. Have a wonderful morning and day. Blessings and Peace always. (smile) PS May this day reveal all things good for you. (another smile)

Ink Empress

Date: 1/21/2024 6:58:00 AM

Thank you dear lisa for this reminder, reminding us in various ways to remember to breathe despite the chaos and darkness, whether light or dark, or through highs and lows, youve reminded us to always keep going and this is a message we all need today in this world. And i must say I absolutely love this poem. You have a soft eloquent way of phrasing thoughts, and it touches readers soul, just effortlessly! Pleasure always reading your work: sending you light always

Lisa Ricci
Date: 1/26/2024 3:05:00 AM

Good Morning Miss Empress. Hi. Thank you ever so much for such generosity and graciousness and yes intake to which I do not take for granted. Please know I think the world of your work and poetic talent. Truly. Have a wonderful morning and day. May today find you well. Blessings Peace and Light always. (smile)

Silent One

Date: 1/21/2024 6:15:00 AM

Hey Lisa, your poem resonates as a poetic guide, urging the reader to seek solace in moments of darkness, find beauty amidst chaos, and, most importantly, remember the elemental act of breathing when confronted with life's complexities. It's a testament to the strength found in embracing the present moment, no matter how challenging it may be.

Lisa Ricci
Date: 1/25/2024 8:04:00 AM

Good Morning Silent. Hi. Thank you ever so much for your gracious and elegant intake that enhances the entry itself. Truly. Never do I take commentary for granted or you as well. Have a wonderful day. May you always keep a poetic heart and soul. Peace and Blessings always. (smile)

Sara Etgen-Baker

Date: 1/21/2024 6:07:00 AM

I do appreciate your write, dear Lisa. "When" is such an appropriate title, for we never know 'when' something unexpected will happen. Your advice is sound, and your heart is full of compassion. Thank you for this uplifting and encouraging piece. Have a blessed day, hugs, Sara

Lisa Ricci
Date: 1/25/2024 6:39:00 AM

Good Morning Sara. Hi. It is I who thanks you. May today be a good day in every way. Yes every way. Your own words apply to you as well because you share uplifting and encouraging words as well. Truly. Enjoy the the day and keep enjoying poetry and poetrysoup. Love Blessings and Peace always. (smile)