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Walking in Butchart Gardens

My elderly friend and I walk along the raised flower beds full of rainbows of blooms, becoming the mother and daughter in the famous Renoir painting, now with the daughter grown up. We slow our pace, gazing at pink and yellow dahlias, velvety purple salvias, blue delphiniums, hanging baskets of pink bleeding hearts, red begonias everywhere we look. Greenery frames the fountain’s dancing spray. Down the paths of roses, yellow, orange, white, lavender, fuchsia, and bright red, sunlight catches on my friend’s white hair and the silver metal of her walker. We stop at a carousel, watching the pastel horses, the frog, the pig, the cat with its fish, the goose, and the rabbit rise and fall, round and round, until she turns to me. We part, as I head to ponds of lilies, surrounded by orange flowers I don’t recognize. I picture my friend, smiling amid the roses, her words echoing inside my mind: I’m holding you back...back...back... Go see the rest of the garden. Go see the rest of the garden. March 13,2021 Flower or Flowers in Imagism Form Poetry Contest Sponsor: Constance La France Note: This is a poem I wrote for my self-published chapbook Song of the Katabatic Wind: Poetry of Travel through Western Canada, which was made for a church fundraiser.

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Date: 6/17/2021 4:27:00 PM
Hello Jennifer … I was sent photos of Butchart Gardens taken during autumn. The colours were spectacular. You are very lucky to be able stroll among the beauty - thank you Jennifer - Lindsay
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Jennifer Fenn
Date: 6/18/2021 4:44:00 PM
Thank you Lindsay! I hope you get to go there sometime.
Date: 4/30/2021 7:47:00 AM
I love that you and your elderly friend were on the same wavelength. I have visited these same gardens and they are so well described in your lovely lines. Lovely work, Jenn.
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Jennifer Fenn
Date: 4/30/2021 5:15:00 PM
Thank you Suzanne! Yes, this friend is the one who eventually became my adopted grandmother. That
Date: 4/16/2021 5:39:00 PM
simply serene; publish - worthy! Congrats. shalom shalom ... Anil (Sucker for fuchsias and begonias). Thanks for the NOTE that adds to the CONTRIBUTION to civilization which includes the aged and young (plus the Unborn). amen
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Jennifer Fenn
Date: 4/16/2021 9:51:00 PM
Shalom Anil! Thank you for visiting me! Glad you like this. Yes, it's great to be together with all generations.
Date: 4/1/2021 4:21:00 AM
Great pen Jennifer so full of wonderful imagery bringing the garden to light. Makes one think they are there with them. Blessings,Gordon
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Jennifer Fenn
Date: 4/1/2021 6:37:00 PM
Thank you Gordon for your visit and compliments. I'm glad I could place you right at the scene. That let me know I achieved my goal with this poem!
Date: 3/29/2021 3:10:00 PM
You have written about this beautiful walk so well and the ending is powerful too :)
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Jennifer Fenn
Date: 3/29/2021 5:31:00 PM
Thank you Heidi. Glad you like it. Thank you for stopping by. :)
Date: 3/28/2021 6:12:00 PM
Underneath the petals and thorns a beautiful story. Like the tiny larvae on the rose, not everyone can see. I fell in love with the second verse.. Vivid descriptions of all those flowers wake this poem up like an alarm clock. The characters are real and lovable and this poem relays time and carries nostalgia. Surely this poem is a rose for all of us in Mother Jennifer's garden. Great ending.
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Jennifer Fenn
Date: 3/29/2021 12:10:00 PM
Oh thank you Michael! Your words really make my day!
Date: 3/27/2021 7:34:00 PM
Congratulations, Jennifer! It's a very special poem, very touching! I have visited this garden a few years ago, and was mesmerized by the beauty of the flowers. BW ~ Mala
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Jennifer Fenn
Date: 3/27/2021 9:36:00 PM
Thank you Mala! So happy you like it!
Date: 3/27/2021 8:21:00 AM
Lovely Jennifer. Wonderful imagery here as you and your friend walk through the garden. The ending is sort of bitter sweet as she stands and watches you proceed without her. She is tired and needs to rest but wants you to see the rest of the garden. Beautiful. God Bless, JB
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Jennifer Fenn
Date: 3/27/2021 3:38:00 PM
Hi Judy my new poetry friend! Thank you so much for your compliments on this poem. They mean a lot . God bless you too!
Date: 3/26/2021 11:48:00 PM
Congrats for your first placement. You have plenty of imagism in your wonderful poem.
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Jennifer Fenn
Date: 3/27/2021 3:38:00 PM
Thank you Victor.! You write great stuff too!
Date: 3/20/2021 3:51:00 PM
Gorgeous imagery, and how nice that it's in that chapbook. Congrats.
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Jennifer Fenn
Date: 3/20/2021 8:34:00 PM
Thank you Andrea! Have a great weekend with some “me time”. I know from your poem that your time is taken managing kids! :)
Date: 3/19/2021 9:42:00 PM
Was seeing this pace unfold right along with you until sadly I, too, am one with a walker, slow and weak, but wishing otherwise. Splendor in the blooms.
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Jennifer Fenn
Date: 3/20/2021 8:37:00 PM
Hi Sally! Thank you for the encouraging words! If you ever have a chance to see these gardens near Victoria, British Columbia, go. You will not be sad!
Date: 3/15/2021 10:47:00 PM
Great imagery, Jennifer, congratulations on your win. Hugs Eve
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Jennifer Fenn
Date: 3/16/2021 1:53:00 PM
Thank you Eve my friend! Thank you for stopping by! Hugs back at ya!
Date: 3/15/2021 1:51:00 PM
Stunning imagery, Jennifer, in this beautiful write. Congrats on your TOP win.
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Jennifer Fenn
Date: 3/15/2021 7:18:00 PM
Hi Vijay! Thank you for saying it’s stunning! Wow, that makes my evening! I like your flower poem too. It’s cool that we are first place winners together.
Date: 3/15/2021 8:55:00 AM
Jennifer, congratulations on your win in my Imagism Challenge on the theme of a flower or flowers, your poem has great imagery and is beautifully penned with that hint of sadness at the end, well done _Constance
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Jennifer Fenn
Date: 3/15/2021 10:43:00 AM
Thank you so much Constance! Glad I got to participate. I admire your poems. You write on a variety of themes in all kinds of tones.
Date: 3/15/2021 2:53:00 AM
- A beautiful poem ... vividly written, I walk along with you and your friend ... enjoy the scents and colors :) - Congratulations on your win, Jennifer :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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Jennifer Fenn
Date: 3/15/2021 10:40:00 AM
Thank you for your visit and encouraging words! I like your poetry too Anne-Lise!
Date: 3/14/2021 2:17:00 PM
Your imagery made me feel so emotional, beautifully penned Jennifer, many congrats on your win:-) hugs Jan xx
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Jennifer Fenn
Date: 3/15/2021 10:44:00 AM
Oh thank you Jan! Your poem for this contest was cool too. Hugs to you too!
Date: 3/13/2021 6:50:00 PM
Dear Jennifer, my heart's imagination was completely captivated by the emotion and imagery of your vivid and deep-reaching poem. To me it is both reality and spirituality. Rich and beautiful poetry. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan
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Jennifer Fenn
Date: 3/13/2021 6:59:00 PM
Wow! That’s the most beautiful complement I’ve ever gotten on a poem. That means a lot! Thank you Susan!