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Waking Up To a Snowy Day

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White flakes of snow float down on to the ground, they make the earth look so fresh, clean and bright. Flakes twirl as they fall, they don't make a sound, and the ground shines with soft snow of pure white. Young kids wake up at dawn, climb from their beds, and then draw back their dark drapes with great glee. They eat a quick snack, then dust down their sleds, and say 'Mum we'll be home in time for tea'! Kids put on snow boots and snug soft warm clothes, then whizz down the crisp white snow on the hills. They wear socks and gloves to warm hands and toes, eyes shine bright; kids don't feel the ice cold chills! It’s great to see kids have fun as they play, they’ll wish it could snow all night and all day! Checked with rhyme zone and how many syllables Because It's A Tuesday 140 - 140 Sonnet Cash Prize Poetry Contest Sponsored by William Kekaula 9/20/19

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John Hamilton

Date: 10/3/2019 9:46:00 AM

Hate to think of it (snow that is) but your depiction of it is so playfully true, took me back to my childhood on the toboggan racing down hills, a carefree time, enjoyed very much. Not sure how a chap in Hawaii will rate this but for me it's a winner! (funny I used the word chap talking to you, I never say that!)

Kim Rodrigues

Date: 9/24/2019 8:32:00 AM

Thanks for the sleigh ride down memory lane! Such a great time and this is a wonderful poem!

Jan Allison
Date: 10/1/2019 7:00:00 AM

Thanks kim:-) Hugs Jan xx

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 9/22/2019 8:12:00 PM

This poem is delightful! I love hearing laughter and watching kids play in the snow of my youth. Kansas winters can be brutal but kids always have fun. This should do well Jan. Kudos for your realism! : ) xxoo

Jan Allison
Date: 9/23/2019 3:48:00 AM

Thanks Connie, its a re write of 'snowfall' as i discovered I had the form wrong with the first poem but at least I got 2 poems in the sonnet form which I do struggle to write:-) hugs jan xx

Anisha Dutta

Date: 9/22/2019 6:20:00 AM

I live in Tropical region and have no scope to experience to snow flakes floating. Love.

Jan Allison
Date: 9/22/2019 2:29:00 PM

thanks Anisha, we rarely get it on our little Island I much prefer the rain to snow!:-) hugs Jan xx

Regina Mcintosh

Date: 9/21/2019 7:02:00 AM

I love this poem... I don't like snow, but do love this... God bless you

Jan Allison
Date: 9/22/2019 3:13:00 AM

I don't like snow either lol:-) hugs jan x

Matthew Anish

Date: 9/20/2019 7:03:00 PM

Soon enough we will see some of that white stuff. I remember going from house to house with a shovel. Good job1 Peace & Love Matthew Anish

Jan Allison
Date: 9/21/2019 2:59:00 AM

Thanks Matthew:-) hugs Jan xx

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 9/20/2019 5:40:00 PM

Nothing like this when you are a child and the snow comes!! Jan, were you able to do this in England or on your island? You write about it so realistically.

Jan Allison
Date: 9/20/2019 6:31:00 PM

pure fiction lol in fact its a re-write of my poem snowfall which I wrote for the contest then was advised I have the form incorrect as its 140 words not just 140 syllables:-) hugs Jan xx

Caren Krutsinger

Date: 9/20/2019 3:39:00 PM

"whizz down the crisp white snow on the hills. They wear socks and gloves to warm hands and toes, eyes shine bright; kids don't feel the ice cold chills!" - I hope you win a hundred dollars!

Jan Allison
Date: 9/20/2019 6:29:00 PM

aww thanks Caren and if I do win any money I want it to go straight to those in the Bahamas. there need is far greater than mine:-) hugs Jan xx

Caycay Jennings

Date: 9/20/2019 2:05:00 PM

I've been rebelling against all the poems about Autumn and Winter because I don't want to let summer go yet but this is irresistible to me as it took me to my own childhood days of snow and you described them beautifully, perfect imagery. This sonnet smoothly sled all the way for me. Hugs ... CayCay

Jan Allison
Date: 9/20/2019 6:28:00 PM

thanks so much CayCay I am not a snow fan the onoy way I like to see it is on Christmas cards lol:-) hugs Jan xx

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 9/20/2019 1:27:00 PM

- Kids love snow :) - And you don't have to be born with skis on your feet to have fun in the snow - Snow is fun for everyone :) - A lovely poem, Jan - Best wishes in the contest - Have a wonderful weekend :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Jan Allison
Date: 9/20/2019 6:27:00 PM

thanks Anne-Lise:-) hugs Jan xx

Bobby May

Date: 9/20/2019 12:54:00 PM

I want to be a kid again, brought back many memories JAN. Good wishes in the contest I can see into the future this one will win!!

Jan Allison
Date: 9/20/2019 1:08:00 PM

Oh thanks Bobby and if it does win then I will ask William for the prize money be donated straight to the poor people in the Bahamas. I find writing sonnets so challenging and this is a re-write of snowfall as I had mis interpreted the rules... but I think I am not the only one!@=_ hugs Jan xx

Chris Green

Date: 9/20/2019 12:43:00 PM

Really fun Jan. We don't get much snow down here but your poem sure did cool the day off for me. Best wishes in the contest.

Jan Allison
Date: 9/20/2019 12:47:00 PM

Thanks Chris it is a re-write of my snowfall poem as I hadn't followed the rules properly:-) hugs Jan xx