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wabi-sabi

the cracks begin to show and flawless floors are not what shift and shatter here but fear a frangible tear gold sun-strands threading a chemtrail-crazed sky vaporous cottons of cloud white wadding expanding internally blood-spotted strings strangling the breakable blue did you think a forever could ever be through your voice through the mist and how it echoes to nothingness unfinished not home was I ever at home in the bowl of your arms with the smarm and the charm the bowl dashed to the flawed floor smashed and all the pretty pieces floored temporarily unglued how shards of morning piece the pieces together again sun stitching unravelling seams of dreams a healing gilding spooling in veins repairing the fault lines of rift and how we drift to finish right back where we begin

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Date: 1/9/2024 5:44:00 AM
Congratulations on your win! Like Andrea I am clueless about this one.
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Date: 1/8/2024 4:33:00 PM
i knew you would win this one. I did not have a clue how to even do it. Way to go, Charlotte.
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Date: 1/5/2024 1:52:00 PM
This one was awesome but I thought Craig didn't want us to mention cracks or bowls.. oh well what do I know...Congratulations on your first place In the contest. You are a very talented writer
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Charlotte Puddifoot
Date: 1/6/2024 5:30:00 AM
well i took it he meant he didn't want poems literally about cracked bowls, but metaphorical references could be used..thanks for commenting
Date: 1/5/2024 2:06:00 AM
Congratulations on your first place.
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Date: 1/4/2024 9:19:00 AM
Is this the imperfection on relationships, or just relationships in general. Starting 24 a winner, I'm impressed. Saw an Easter egg today. How time flies.
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Paul Bell
Date: 1/5/2024 9:32:00 AM
Don't you be writing a three-day resurrection poem now? Remember the standards you've set.
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Charlotte Puddifoot
Date: 1/4/2024 12:54:00 PM
i'm hoping it's symbolic lol
Date: 1/3/2024 7:05:00 PM
Congratulations on first place, Charlotte!
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Date: 1/3/2024 4:41:00 PM
Congratulations on your win
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Date: 1/3/2024 1:51:00 PM
Well I'm not much for peer sponsored contests (not even my own) but I'm happy you won this one. Not sure why. Just am
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Date: 1/3/2024 6:55:00 AM
You describe relationships really well and so many end up like this... A nicely done take for the contest.. I could see the cracks appear..
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Date: 1/2/2024 8:06:00 PM
did you think a forever could ever be through…so hard!
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Date: 1/2/2024 5:25:00 PM
wow, Charlotte, this was a powerful and effective poem that describes the cycle of abuse...I've known many caught in that loop. Very creative! Liked it...have a great evening, Sara
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Date: 1/2/2024 3:11:00 PM
"Was I ever at home in the bowl of your arms..." I'm thinking not. Why do some stay in caustic relationships, especially women? "The answer my friend, is blowing in the wind. The answer keeps blowing in the wind." No one writes quite like Charlotte
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Charlotte Puddifoot
Date: 1/4/2024 12:57:00 PM
many reasons, but often some kind of dependency is involved
Date: 1/2/2024 2:56:00 PM
This raw, so raw, and you captured wabi-sabi like no one I ever read yet. Lots of light, keep writing...
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