Vultures Circling

Ripples of pain weave circles round her Memories sad and stark crucify her Ugly and soiled scenes blur her vision The whimper of aborted foetus deafens her At night she encounters mindless phantoms Vampires who come to suck her blood Vultures circling to feed on her flesh raw Tear her and hack her to shreds Dribble spittle into her parched mouth She seeks a shelter where she could fall asleep, Breathing dark secrets into her crumpled pillow When questions rise from all corners, Putting her into a dreadful quandary, She longs to hide in the remote corners of her self And wash clean in her own tears, Dousing the flame in their salinity In a quickly darkening world, She looks for a candle flame, To make her ashen heart once more aflame. When torn with the whiplash of life, She longs for a balm to kiss away, The sting of her reeking wounds. From the throes of pain, She resolves to walk into the calm- Into the serenity of a day’s end, Not to be a toy again Fit for heartless rogues- The circling vultures! July.7. 2022 ~ Placed First~ Pick-A-Title, Vol. 31 Poetry Contest Sponsored by: Edward Ibeh

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Date: 8/2/2022 9:12:00 PM
"heartless rogues- The circling vultures!" - These are true vultures. Her agony... guilt-feeling... Beautiful depiction. Congratulations!
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Date: 7/31/2022 12:06:00 PM
Brilliant, powerful piece, Valsa:-) Your poems floor me, and this one is no exception! Congratulations on your top win in my contest!
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Date: 8/2/2022 10:28:00 PM
Hi Edward, your poetry contests are always an inspiration for me.... ! Is it because there is invicible cord connecting us ! Thank you for honoring me !
Date: 7/31/2022 9:59:00 AM
Back to congratulate you on your first placement! A tragic analogy so well deserved. Unrequited love, so painful yet so common. I'm happy for you Valsa!
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Date: 7/31/2022 9:15:00 AM
Congratulations on your win. Love your line, "The circling vultures!." Have a great/blessed day.......................
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Date: 7/31/2022 7:44:00 AM
Back with Congratulations on your first place win. You largely deserve it with this very well-crafted poem. Blessings
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Date: 7/31/2022 5:41:00 AM
A relevant theme, is the world listening? Superbly penned, Valsa, congrats on your top win!
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Date: 7/31/2022 12:57:00 AM
Congratulations, Valsa, for your haunting poem.
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Date: 7/12/2022 1:33:00 PM
The terrifying feeling that drew the nightmares to her were depicted was great imagery, Valsa. The pain and self torture gave her a feeling of helplessness, yet she found the resolve to overcome by making a decision to change the cause of her nightmares. Excellent poetry my friend. Great entry ... should place high in the contest. Smiles ~ Blessings Bill
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Date: 7/12/2022 3:40:00 AM
I am thrilled when she takes her power back "From the throes of pain, She resolves to walk into the calm- Into the serenity of a day’s end, Not to be a toy again "
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Date: 7/8/2022 9:37:00 PM
Valsa I agree with Sara. she used all the words out of my thought process. A winning entry for sure...
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Date: 7/8/2022 1:14:00 PM
I do think women who go through an abortion experience so terrible emotional pain from the act they have committed. I feel for a woman who finds herself pregnant and doesn't want or need a child at this time in her life. I can understand her needs and problems, but I think there can always be something worked out to avoid killing a baby. I enjoyed reading this one. Reads like a good contender for the contest. Way to go. Sara
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Date: 7/7/2022 6:23:00 PM
Life is tough when one lifts one's eyes to the heavens and see only circling vultures. Well said, Valsa! Aloha!
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Date: 7/7/2022 6:19:00 PM
The shame she must bear, memories stark. Traumatized by abortion, and a side effect of an unhealthy lifestyle, the unearthly nightmares she faces each night. Then a strength free's her from agony alas! Hopes for high placement Valsa!
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Date: 7/7/2022 6:05:00 PM
Oh yes another gem from your wonderful mind, Valsa.
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Date: 7/7/2022 4:07:00 PM
I can feel your pain every word is etched with heat break and rude awakening, I am glad you show the calm in the center of it all, we need to be brave, what a heart felt poem you have penned dear Valsa, winning wishes and and friendship ties xo
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Date: 7/7/2022 8:33:00 AM
Your poems are truly wondrous! This is one of such.
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Date: 7/7/2022 7:08:00 AM
Valsa, this is an eloquent illustration of the tension that might exist in real life. Gorgeous and erudite as it is, I nearly hear the crying of a lifetime spent in suffering in these lines.
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Date: 7/7/2022 5:48:00 AM
I hear the bawl of hapless life in pain. An emotive depiction that speaks to turmoil in life. Best to you, Valsa.
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Date: 7/7/2022 12:57:00 AM
Delightful and elegant poem, dear Valsa. Best for a win.
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