Void

I am held gently in the void Escaping thoughts of all destroyed Forever's distance will dim my view To ignore hell I must pass through Terrible fear I'm paranoid I am held gently in the void Where do I go when all is grey For I am stillness, here I stay No muscle moved yet heart beats on Removed from chest, all feelings gone I am held gently in the void Resilience now to be employed Numb though nurtured within this space No signs of distress on my face Recall lost about why annoyed I am held gently in the void

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Susan Ashley

Date: 12/5/2023 5:56:00 PM

Dear DD, your poem intrigues the imagination and heart with vivid emotive imagery. The emptiness of the void is enveloping. Congratulations for your excellent win in Joseph's contest. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan

Speaks Volumes

Date: 12/4/2023 1:05:00 PM

Back again to congratulate you on a well deserved win.

Di11y Da11y
Date: 12/4/2023 2:42:00 PM

Thanks SV x

Joseph May

Date: 12/4/2023 1:59:00 AM

Congrats on your win, Very nicely penned

Di11y Da11y
Date: 12/4/2023 7:58:00 AM

Appreciated, thank you Joseph. I enjoyed attempting the form

Hilda Greenhough

Date: 11/23/2023 11:24:00 AM

At least voids don't ask for much. At times, I enjoy my personal void. I like the poem. You cause me to think on many levels. Phew. My head is bursting.

Di11y Da11y
Date: 11/23/2023 1:40:00 PM

Haha it's hard to say if the void takes or offers rest - glad you liked it x

Clive Culverhouse

Date: 11/23/2023 12:17:00 AM

I like the first line moving down the stanzes until it becomes the last line to round it off, good sense of feeling too, well expressed D

Di11y Da11y
Date: 11/23/2023 1:41:00 PM

It's quite a nice form to write in as long as you don't set yourself up with a tricky rhyme - thanks for your comment

Mat Ignacio

Date: 11/22/2023 8:38:00 PM

boldy worded, nicely executed -

Di11y Da11y
Date: 11/22/2023 11:29:00 PM

Thank you Mat - I'm not sure what I intended to write but this is what transpired. I nearly gave up because I'd picked void as a word that needed rhyming 4 times but scraped it over the line. Thanks for your kind word

Speaks Volumes

Date: 11/22/2023 3:36:00 PM

Perfect Quatern D.. Intriguing subject. Reminds me of being in an MRI capsule recently. You captured the sense of being still in a void exceptionally well BOL in the contest. SV

Di11y Da11y
Date: 11/22/2023 11:30:00 PM

Yes, it does correspond nicely to being in a scanner trying to hold still and hold your nerve you're right. Thanks for your supportive comment x