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So many voices, both men and women all talking at once, it was dark.
I don’t understand a word of what they are saying.
I'm trying to focus but I cant, my mind is wandering. 
I don’t know where I am, it is frightening.

I can see an ocean, I hear crashing waves but can still hear the voices and my heart is being ripped out and I feel pain.
I'm on a hill now, the sun is dazzling, my wife and children are there laughing, then silence.
I can see people running and they're taking off and floating away.
Now I'm outside a big white building and people are running and screaming, I hear gun fire.
My partner Bill runs forward gun in hand and then there's more gunfire, he falls, gets up and falls again, a man wearing a mask holding a gun fires at me, there's a flash and I fall down too.
I hear sirens, see flashing blue lights and hear voices.
The voices get louder but I can't make out what they are saying.

I see a forest with trees blowing in the wind.
I find myself inside the dark forest and I'm running, but from what?.
I hear loud beeping and the voices again, they're talking in excited tones.
I don’t see their faces, it's still dark.
I'm in my old school play ground, I see Miss Brown walking towards me, but she died a long time ago. 
I'm on my back , there's weight on my chest, I'm gasping, the voices again, I scream , nothing comes out.
I can feel pain in my arm, I hear heart beat da boom da boom, it gets louder but the gaps between get wider.

I'm in a church; I see a coffin on the altar.
Everyone's laughing the priest is crying, then the voices again. 
Now a high pitched continuous beeping, it goes dark quickly and the voices fade, I'm falling down a big hole, the light quickly moving away from me.



There's an explosion in my chest, it gets brighter again.
The voices get louder for a moment then the high pitched whine again as the light fades once more.
Then I make out one spoken word it’s "again"
Then the explosion in my chest again and it gets brighter and the continuous beep stops.
Then darkness again and a loud voice says "once more time, quickly, we're losing him."

The voices get louder and then they become less and less and then fade as darkness envelops me and then calm came over me and I feel peace, total peace.

The surgeon removed his mask and said “I’m afraid he's gone, the bullet caused too much damage to his heart, are we all agreed?”There were nods of agreement from everyone present.
He looks at the clock above him in the operating theatre and says "time of death eleven thirty six, thank you everyone, I'll go and inform his family and Captain ".




Written on 3rd December.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2018




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Date: 1/21/2019 3:43:00 AM
WOW! Tom that was so intense and true to life.
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Tom Cunningham
Date: 1/21/2019 10:15:00 AM
Thanks Bobby, travelling at the moment,I'm in Ireland, Tom.
Date: 1/2/2019 2:25:00 PM
Congratulations on our win with this thrilling journey of time between dimensions. Excellent Tom! Blessings for a wonderful new year in 2019! ; ) xxoo
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Date: 1/2/2019 2:44:00 PM
Thank you very much Connie, I too hope you and yours have a wonderful 2019. Tom
Date: 12/18/2018 6:21:00 PM
I have had such an experience, Tom, (my heart stopped three times in 2005), and while everyone's experience is unique, there are always certain elements that are almost identical, and you have touched on that here with a wonderful pen! Excellent write, my friend ... very moving and powerful. Keep up the great work, and have a great holiday! :-)
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Date: 12/19/2018 4:48:00 AM
Thank you very much Gregory, I'm sorry to hear that it happened to you, It's just something I read about but you've actually experienced it. Thank God you're still with us, I hope you and your family have a wonderful Christmas. Tom.
Date: 12/17/2018 7:46:00 PM
Powerfully moving; very realistic imagery; I could feel you and hear the voices. Very vivid with all of the emotion that such a state brings.
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Date: 12/18/2018 5:55:00 AM
Thank you ML, I wasn't sure if I had managed to capture someone's experience between life and death, but others seem to think I have.
Date: 12/17/2018 4:58:00 AM
Wow! Tom, how wonderful.. breathtaking story of tormenting voices one can experience in such a state between life and death! What a profound and meticulous imagination rendered in an impressive and captivating free verse! I tremendously enjoyed reading.. Beauty and depth! Worthy of retreads and generous appreciation.. A FAV. My deepest regards. Stay blessed always.
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Date: 12/18/2018 5:52:00 AM
Thank you very much Besma, it must be a very strange experience for someone to go through hovering between life and death. Tom
Date: 12/11/2018 3:17:00 PM
A great idea how you developed your story poem, tom. I was happy to find a recent poem of yours I had not yet viewed. Also, I see congrats are in order. Way to go
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Tom Cunningham
Date: 12/11/2018 4:36:00 PM
Thank you very much Andrea, I'm happy you liked it. Tom.
Date: 12/11/2018 1:17:00 PM
Another T.C. special. I was all-the-way-in on this one, my friend. It's a richly-deserved winner for you. Season's best, Gershon
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Date: 12/11/2018 4:33:00 PM
Thank you Gershon, I'm glad you liked it. Hope you too have a great Christmas. Tom.
Date: 12/10/2018 8:25:00 AM
Back with congrats Tom on your well deserved win in the contest.
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Date: 12/10/2018 11:31:00 AM
Thanks very much Vijay, Tom.
Date: 12/10/2018 12:08:00 AM
- Congratulations on this great winning poem/ story, Tom :) - At the same time I wish you and your family a peaceful and lovely Christmas :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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Date: 12/10/2018 2:04:00 AM
Thank you Sunshine. I wish you and your family the same and best wishes for 2019. Tom
Date: 12/8/2018 8:11:00 PM
Back with congratulations on your win, Tom.
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Tom Cunningham
Date: 12/9/2018 2:16:00 AM
Thank you very much Eve. Tom.
Date: 12/8/2018 10:56:00 AM
Good story telling Tom.. Congratulations on your placement in the contest..
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Date: 12/8/2018 3:41:00 PM
Thanks S.O. There were some stunning entries. Thanks for hosting. Tom.
Date: 12/7/2018 8:01:00 AM
Oh a heart attack :( from a gunshot .. My husband never knew he was having a heart-attack; he just pass-out. Enjoyed reading very will written,Tom, good luck in the contest.. You are so good in writing stories. Hugs Eve
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Date: 12/7/2018 8:23:00 AM
Thank you Eve, sometimes shocking brings them back from the jaws of death sadly not always. Tom.
Date: 12/7/2018 7:15:00 AM
This my great friend had me hooked from start to its truly great finish. Wondrously creative and with depths that stirs this old poet's soul to wish to write like this! Truly an exceptional free verse poem and a very fine fav, for me to save to my ever growing list. God bless...
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Tom Cunningham
Date: 12/7/2018 7:42:00 AM
Thank you very much Robert, I had often heard of people having NDE and somehow making it back, many have said they had flashbacks to events in their lives. I hope I managed to convey that in my verse. Thanks for the fave too. Tom.
Date: 12/5/2018 9:28:00 AM
This is a powerful write. You have captured the truth of violent death. The end of your poem especially tells of the awareness present, even unto death. Well done. Best wishes. Deb
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Tom Cunningham
Date: 12/5/2018 10:37:00 AM
Thank you very much Deb, I'm glad you liked it. Regards. Tom.
Date: 12/5/2018 7:10:00 AM
WOW! I AM IMPRESSED MR.TOM!!!! Didn't realize I was in the presence of such talent!!! OOOEEEEEE! BTW added a fourth lim today in reference to our friendly(?) battle!!! Let the battle begin!!!
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Tom Cunningham
Date: 12/5/2018 10:36:00 AM
Thanks Jack, I'm home now and ready to fire yee haw.
Date: 12/4/2018 1:18:00 PM
Hi Tom, You are a man who deserves to go to heaven! A beautiful, sad but imaginative write. You had me captivated! Best wishes, Jennifer.
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Tom Cunningham
Date: 12/4/2018 4:05:00 PM
Thanks Jennifer, I hope they let me in. Happy you liked it. Tom.
Date: 12/4/2018 11:57:00 AM
You had me hooked all the way through, Tom. Excellent narrative. Regards // paul
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Date: 12/4/2018 12:47:00 PM
Thank you Paul, I'm happy that you enjoyed it. Tom.
Date: 12/4/2018 11:01:00 AM
Such a powerful poem, Tom, love it.
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Date: 12/4/2018 11:18:00 AM
Thanks very much Harry. Tom.
Date: 12/4/2018 3:48:00 AM
Very sad, but so creative how you wrote this!
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Tom Cunningham
Date: 12/4/2018 3:53:00 AM
Thank you very much Arthur Tom.
Date: 12/4/2018 3:40:00 AM
I am so glad I came to read a bit tonight, peace and love, xoxoxoxoxox
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Date: 12/4/2018 3:52:00 AM
Thank you Aurore, glad you enjoyed it. Tom.
Date: 12/3/2018 9:03:00 PM
ohh, i love surprises and the intoxication from medical trance knocks me off, tom... very creative style!...huggs
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Tom Cunningham
Date: 12/4/2018 3:17:00 AM
Thank you very much Nette, glad you enjoyed it Tom
Date: 12/3/2018 7:57:00 PM
Tom, your poem is completely captivating in its dark, dreamlike and spectacular imagery of going through the final phase of death. Mesmerizing and exceptional poetry. Best wishes for a win.. ~Susan
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Susan Ashley
Date: 12/4/2018 9:19:00 PM
Indeed, you did a great job showing it :))
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Tom Cunningham
Date: 12/4/2018 3:15:00 AM
Thank you Susan, I picked up on peoples experiences' who have nearly died but were brought back. I hope I managed to show it here. Tom.
Date: 12/3/2018 7:09:00 PM
Yikes! to hear those voices. well done
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Tom Cunningham
Date: 12/4/2018 3:16:00 AM
A weird experience for sure Timothy.
Date: 12/3/2018 2:21:00 PM
Completely entertaining...as dead man tell his story...All the best Tom
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Date: 12/3/2018 3:05:00 PM
Thank you Arturo, glad you liked it. Tom
Date: 12/3/2018 2:04:00 PM
So the cat is out of the bag my friend, Tom. Now I know what to expect before I fly to heaven! Impressive and captivating writing!
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Tom Cunningham
Date: 12/3/2018 3:04:00 PM
Thank you Demetrios, I hope it will be more peaceful with no guns involved. Tom.
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