Visions Creeping - Sos

In the ocean of my sleep stars glow like fragile seeds
and I sail across the celestial tranquil black sky
where silence is hanging sublime
and I fall through this dark warm dream
my hair a flowing river
and I drift to beautiful places and green lush temples 
but my tranquility is soon hanging from branches
dripping in the grey woods of my mind
lost in a crowd of nameless faces
thick like trees in the woods at night
with eyes blank as statues
and a hundred whispers silent to my hearing 
just shadows swaying in the silence- swaying in rhythm 
O, it is a restless dream, endless
I want to shout-  stop, stop worshiping golden Gods
you are empty, alone and cold bone
but I am lost in the sounds of silence, a dream prisoner
lost in the whirling silence that surrounds me
and the stars are flashing, exploding, bursting, blazing
and my dream is falling to ashes
I wake to a dawn distant and dark
with echoes of silent thoughts
in my heart . . . 

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July 24, 2019


Poetry/Free Verse/Visions Creeping
Copyright Protected, ID 19-1168-509-02
All Rights Reserved.  Written under Pseudonym.

Inspiration - Sounds of Silence, Simon and Garfunkel


Written for the contest, Sounds of Silence
sponsor, John Hamilton

Fourth Place

Copyright © | Year Posted 2019



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Date: 8/11/2019 9:04:00 PM
Awesome mellow rhythm, Constance. Congrats on your win.
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Constance La France
Date: 8/14/2019 11:47:00 AM
Line , thank you for the congratulations
Date: 8/6/2019 9:03:00 AM
A lovely tribute. Congrats on your win.
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Constance La France
Date: 8/14/2019 11:48:00 AM
Jeanne thanks for the lovely and congrats
Date: 8/6/2019 1:54:00 AM
Congratulations, Constance on your great win with a beautiful flowing verse.
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Constance La France
Date: 8/14/2019 11:47:00 AM
Subimal thank you for the congratulations
Date: 8/5/2019 1:54:00 PM
Congrats!
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Constance La France
Date: 8/14/2019 11:49:00 AM
Richard thanks for the congrats
Date: 8/5/2019 12:51:00 PM
This is one of your very best Constance, I marvel at the free flow of thoughts, almost like stream of consciousness writing but more lucid and appealing, well done congrats on a high placement!
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Constance La France
Date: 8/14/2019 11:50:00 AM
John thanks for the contest and for my placement
Date: 8/1/2019 9:22:00 AM
I enjoyed this very much. Good luck in the contest.
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Constance La France
Date: 8/14/2019 11:51:00 AM
Thank you Richard
Date: 7/29/2019 10:10:00 PM
Beautifully penned, I like your interpretation of the song’s meaning :) hugs
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Constance La France
Date: 8/14/2019 11:52:00 AM
Thank you Sandra
Date: 7/25/2019 10:15:00 AM
Simply beautiful, DH. One of your best! A fav.
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Constance La France
Date: 8/14/2019 11:54:00 AM
Thanks Sunlite
Date: 7/24/2019 6:51:00 PM
strong imagery to a complex song that means different things to different people, very well done Dear Heart...good luck
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Constance La France
Date: 8/14/2019 11:54:00 AM
Frederic thanks for visiting and for commenting
Date: 7/24/2019 3:25:00 PM
you have interpreted this song so brilliantly Constance! I love the song but doubt I can write for the contest! good luck:-) hugs Jan xx
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Constance La France
Date: 8/14/2019 11:55:00 AM
Jan thanks for your kind words and I bet you could !
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