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Vast and Lonely Spaces

Into those vast spaces, where my mind does roam, I gaze and find dark e m p t i n e s s all around, Lin ger ing, looking for someone to hold me, I cru m b l e to p - i - e - c - e - s beneath these false smiles... Inside those vast spaces, where my heart does hang, I gasp and find damp h o l l o w n e s s choking me, Torn by l o n e l i n e s s, croaking cries in silence, I fumble in fragile f r a g m e n t s masked in mirth... Within these vast spaces, where people do live, Does anyone have such OPEN MINDEDNESS To accept me with my mood swings, muse and f-l-a-w-s? I hope there is, but God knows, I'm still w a i t i n g . . . . . . 09/29/17 Contest: Form V - Verse me a poem Sponsor: Broken Wings

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Date: 12/24/2017 1:36:00 PM
Jo, you made very good use of "spaces" in your poem. Constance is fond of that kind of patterning of words, so I imagine this one got rated high for you. I sure hope so. It's one of your few poems I had not seen yet. At least going down this far on your page. This one is quite poignant. Congrats for your win.
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Date: 10/5/2017 12:13:00 PM
Jo, a touching write.
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Date: 10/4/2017 9:19:00 PM
Congratulations on your win with this fine write.
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Date: 10/4/2017 6:33:00 PM
Congratulations Jo :)
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Date: 10/4/2017 6:06:00 PM
Jo, congratulations on your win in my contest with this amazing write !
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Date: 10/4/2017 5:59:00 PM
Great poem Jo Daniel. True for so many. Good luck in the contest. God Bless.
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Date: 9/29/2017 10:28:00 PM
Wonderful write in it's sadness and longing Jo, you will find your love, it just takes more time than we wish sometimes, hope this does well in the contest!
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Date: 9/29/2017 5:01:00 PM
A beautifully expressed, touching and heartfelt write Jo. Your lines are lovely and full of rich imagery and emotion. I especially love this line; 'I fumble in fragile fragments masked in mirth' wonderful alliteration and deep meaning. A great write Jo. Good luck in the contest! :)
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Date: 9/29/2017 4:01:00 PM
moving me to bits... glorious write, jo... huggs
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Date: 9/29/2017 2:51:00 PM
Very very touching and heartfelt poetry, great poem!
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Date: 9/29/2017 11:00:00 AM
Very nicely penned Jo..best wishes
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Date: 9/29/2017 7:05:00 AM
Lovely, Jo! I am always so proud of my son who has a quiet wife who has these artful mood swings etc... but oh how he loves to support her in her interests and make her happy. Blessings <3
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Date: 9/29/2017 3:36:00 AM
- A touching poem Jo, beautifully shaped :) - Good luck in the contest - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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