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Vase of Peonies - Claude Monet

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written for Sara Jama's Last Petal contest but I'll attempt another write for the contest

every illusion starts with a wish or a hope perhaps, and mine is this that I'm the hundreds of petals that remain and with each petal lost I won't feel this pain abundance is missed when eyes look to cause metronomic time spent analysing flaws to drown silently in the water that sustains as I ache with longing for summer rains I'm the bud, the bloom and the over and done already the rot as my thoughts outrun my mantra: "I'm more than just a season" though no defence against logical self treason anxiety doesn't let confidence embed craves validation ad infinitum instead a moment lasts a mere moment until expired I see it and I feel it and I'm tired, I'm tired... I'm fully aware these fretful hours I waste is misspent joy, life unlived and displaced though reality's gifts I rush to embrace self loathing kicks in, as is always the case

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Ink Empress

Date: 3/3/2025 11:50:00 AM

Dear dd, the cadence and flow of your words woven here is beyond catchy and soul stirring really! So much depth in what youv written here. I can feel exhaustion and so much more and all from an interpretation of an artwork! So clever of you to see all that! I am more than just a season! That line stands out for me along with the ending! One of those poems i can imagine you reading! Its so raw and emotive and just soul hitting! Pleasure reading this! Sending you light always

Di11y Da11y
Date: 3/3/2025 2:36:00 PM

I really threw myself into the painting with this one. I actually did try and do an audio but I tripped over a line mid way through. I prefer to just do one take but two takes and it wasn't meant to be! Thank you for spending time with my poetry, much appreciated x

David Kavanagh

Date: 3/1/2025 3:03:00 AM

I’m sure those fallen petals could be gathered back up, and made into a nicely scented potpourri Dilly, nature wastes nothing, just like the universe exchanges energy into matter and back again ad infinitum, self loathing is undoubtedly entropy tirelessly eating away at us, I don’t believe it’s the be all and end all though; there are far greater unexplained forces at work in the cosmos! Another extremely profound and beautifully crafted Ekphrasis from you, cheers David

Di11y Da11y
Date: 3/1/2025 3:15:00 AM

Beautiful comment David :) there's so many alternative paths from the very point in the painting that don't involve stagnation and decay (just yet!) poetry is so magical at capturing a moment and 24 hours passing is great at turning things around. Thank you for stopping by and flipping the script, appreciated

Lin Lane

Date: 2/28/2025 12:01:00 PM

I feel worse for flowers that are cut and put into vases than I do for those that wither and die on their bushes. Once cut, they're 'over and done' comes much too quickly than their normal lifespan would've allowed them to live. Much ado over a flower? I think not. There's no time for self-loathing, and that goes for people, too.

Di11y Da11y
Date: 2/28/2025 12:05:00 PM

Thanks Lin, I hate seeing all the poor Christmas trees stacked up. A bit of drama over a few lost petals - like you say, no one really knows how things affect people x

Paula Goldsmith

Date: 2/28/2025 10:51:00 AM

I enjoyed reading your wonderful write for "Monet's painting." Both Great... Each flower petal must fall. "Good Luck" Have a blessed day/weekend writing away...............

Di11y Da11y
Date: 2/28/2025 11:53:00 AM

Thank you Paula x

Jan Allison

Date: 2/28/2025 8:12:00 AM

You have an amazing talent for interpreting these paintings, makes you wonder what the artist was going through at the time, a powerfully penned piece which left me feeling as crushed as those petals ! hugs jan xx

Di11y Da11y
Date: 2/28/2025 8:15:00 AM

Thank you Jan. Hopefully the artist made perfume instead haha :) thank you for your kind words, means a lot.

Tom Cunningham

Date: 2/28/2025 2:27:00 AM

You have a great talent for getting in to the heart and soul of any painting Dilly. Tom

Di11y Da11y
Date: 2/28/2025 2:42:00 AM

Thank you Tom - I might have to keep clear of the Monet's in future, it brought out a rather sombre vibe. Thank you for your kind words, much appreciated :)